2D Artwork: Transformers Mosaic: "Fate Of The Tank Force - Ultra Magnus"

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  1. TF Mosaic, Jul 14, 2010
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    TF Mosaic

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    The Universe of the Transformers is vast, and populated by many characters. Their universe is a large tapestry, made up of the stories and points of view of countless experiences that serve the larger whole.

    These are some of those stories. This is:
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    It should be noted that while this project has been recognized by IDW Publishing and Hasbro, none of the works presented have been commissioned or solicited by either company. The stories are not official canon, except where noted. These stories are the result of Transformers enthusiasts taking the time out of their busy days to contribute to a universe they love. No one has been paid for the production of these stories.

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    FATE OF THE TANK FORCE - ULTRA MAGNUS

    Story and Art by:
    Christian Ludwig Clu-art on deviantART

    Lettering by:
    Franco Villa M3Gr1ml0ck on deviantART

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  2. Whelpd, Jul 14, 2010
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    Who were the tank force? because I had a search for them on Tfwiki but it came up emtpy
     
  3. Altitron, Jul 14, 2010
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    This is not a bad attempt at story telling, and I will say that it is satisfactorily executed overall. Although nothing very interesting happens, from an artistic point of view it could be made much more visually appealing.

    In the future, I suggest using varying line widths when inking over your original artwork, or when digitally inserting lines, vary the pixel size so that everything does not appear uniform throughout. When every line carries the same weight, details get lost in the mass and it becomes difficult to separate one object or individual from another.

    Another result of invariant line weight is that nothing on the entire page appears to be important at all. No one means to draw an entire page of unimportant things. I believe you can see my point when you study the third panel. As I think you can easily see, it is difficult to distinguish each character from the next. The problem is unfortunately compounded by the fact that a green overlay is used, rendering nearly everyone in the image the same color, and thereby making it even more of a chore to comprehend what the panel is trying to convey.

    And 'Num-Far' sounds silly.

    I hope this critique proves helpful to you in future endeavors.

    - Alty