Transformers : The Final Prime

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  1. Primus Productions

    Primus Productions Defender of the movieverse Veteran

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    Based off My Transformers Fall of Cybertron Fanfiction

    Autobots

    Optimus Prime - The Heroic Leader of the Autobots

    Grimlock - Warrior/Dinobot

    Swoop - Warrior/Dinobot

    Snarl - Warrior/Dinobot

    Slag - Warrior/Dinobot

    Bumblebee - The Warrior/Scout

    Cliffjumper - The Warrior

    Steelcrusher - Elite Guard/Warrior

    Stonecrusher - Warrior/Elite Guard

    Warpath - Warrior

    Ratchet - Medical officer

    Ironhide - The Weapon Specialist/Warrior

    Wheeljack - Wrecker/scientist

    Ultra Magnus - Warrior/Commander

    Decepticons

    Megatron - Leader of the Decepticons

    Starscream - 2nd Commander/Warrior

    Soundwave - Assassin/Warrior

    Shockwave - Scientist/Destroyer

    Breakdown - Warrior

    Sidways - Assassin/Warrior/Spy

    Bonecrusher - Warrior

    Barricade - Scout/Warrior

    Knockout - Medical Officer

    Dreadwing - 3rd in Command/Warrior

    Deathwing - Warrior

    Galactia - Warrior/possible Leader

    Destructor - Warrior

    Onsalught - Warrior

    Brawl - Warrior

    Swindle - Dealer/somewhat Warrior

    Vortex - Scientist/Warrior

    Blastoff - Seeker/Warrior

    Bruticus - The Ultimate Weapon

    Vechicon Troopers - Soldiers

    Story - Megatron has defeated all the prime's expect one. "Optimus Prime". All the other prime's had been defeated and now Megatron hunts down Optimus. in hope too shift the balance of the table's once and for all
     
  2. Jackie1768

    Jackie1768 Autobot Scientist

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    Can't wait to see it
     
  3. solusprime19

    solusprime19 Disney, Dat knee

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    Can't wait!
    edit: the updates on the characters make it even better!
     
  4. Primus Productions

    Primus Productions Defender of the movieverse Veteran

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    Alright we all know what they look in their designs expect the one's I made up. Their will be an update soon enough but for now part 1 of this fanfiction is starting ^^
     
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    (Optimus makes a speech about the fall of cybertron and it continues with Megatron Speaking towards Optimus has his prisoner)

    Optimus Prime : Cybertron our home. it has been almost destroyed of cause. Of Megatron Leader of the Decepticons. We Autobots must leave cybertron. Under Primus's Command. And now The War continues during the fall of cybertron.


    Onslaught - Brawl he's coming too

    Brawl (Turn's seeing Optimus and said while punches him in the process on the face) - Stay DOWN!!!!

    Starscream (Walking towards Megatron Laughing Evilly)

    Megatron (Turn's around having laserbeak on his shoulder and said as Brawl and onslaught Slam Optimus on the ground) - Optimus Prime?. Is that what they call you now? isn't?

    Optimus - Megatron

    Starscream (said in bragging towards Megatron) - Funny isn't Megatron I've Caught the one adversary you couldn't.

    Megatron (suddenly got angered with rage and used his fusion cannon release the trigger yelled in his rage) Silence!

    (Starscream flew from the impact)

    Optimus (Was chained on the ground and said while chained) - It didn't come too this

    Megatron (Walking towards Optimus) - This is what you chose Prime when you defied me (move's arm with his fusion cannon towards an Autobot trooper) All this is your doing.

    Autobot - Optimus?!

    Megatron (Shot The Autobot)

    Autobot (yelled in pain) Ahh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Optimus - Megatron! Stop!

    Megatron (Reloads his fusion cannon) - I'll Stop!!! When All of you are dead!

    Megatron (Points fusion cannon at the other trooper)

    Autobot - No no no!!!!!!!!

    Megatron - (Fired his fusion cannon)

    Autobot - NO! NOOO!!!!!!!!!! ARGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Megatron (reloaded his fusion cannon while Optimus spoke)

    Optimus - This is needless... All we wanted is too leave!!!!!!!

    Megatron (looked very disgusted in his face and smacked Optimus in the face and turned around walking towards his throne)

    Megatron - Charge warp cannon and wipe their precious ark off the face of Cybertron

    Decepticon {Brute} - Yes Sir!

    Megatron - No one leaves without my permission!

    Optimus (stood up and said) - I wasn't asking

    Megatron - Always defiant to the end aren't you Prime?. At every turns of my efforts you thwarted too save this planet. To Return to it's former glory.No More!, This day it all ends Prime!. Once for all.

    Sidways (Realizes and yelled) - Megatron!!! Look OUT!!!!!!!!

    Megatron (turned around seeing mertroplex and started firing) -Stop running you fools and stand in fight!!!.

    Metroplex (Just had dents. he raise his fist and smash Megatron once. Megatron weakly raised his arm and tried fire. He smash him again. Nothing shown of Megatron. And Metroplex ensured by his death smashing him the third time.)


    (Starscream and The Decepticons walked towards too the death site of Megatron)

    Mretoplex (Raise his fist revealing Megatron)

    Starscream (had a mixture of terror in his optics fright and Shock. He stared at Optimus while as Optimus said)

    Optimus - Leave.... Now...

    Starscream (And The Decepticons stared at metroxplex and Starscream finally said)

    Starscream - Decepticons.. Megatron has been perish betrayed by his own foolish pride (Sidways and The Decepticons stared at each other) I, Starscream are your Leader now. (stares at Optimus and Megatron's death site) Decepticons!... Return too base. (transforms and flew away)

    Soundwave (closed his fist and sworn bring Megatron back)
     
  6. Primus Productions

    Primus Productions Defender of the movieverse Veteran

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    This was part 1 I hope you guys will enjoy this part :D 
     
  7. solusprime19

    solusprime19 Disney, Dat knee

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    That was awesome dude! Keep it coming!
     
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    Thanks Bro Glad you liked it :D 
     
  9. Jackie1768

    Jackie1768 Autobot Scientist

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    Can't wait for the next one. This is awesome!
     
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    Part 2 "Starscream's plan"
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    (Swoop and Jazz go inside the Decepticons home base in turn stealing energon for their Ark)

    (At The Ark)

    Optimus : Jazz, I need you and swoop go too The Decepticons base. and somehow find some energon for the ark. So we may leave our home in turn of hoping we could restore cybertron

    Jazz : You got it Prime. come on swoop let's roll!!!!

    (At the Decepticons Base)

    Shockwave (Was speaking too Starscream) - The Energon is stable and ready use of our convoy's

    Starscream (said in a form of a hologram) - Excellent Shockwave!.I want that Energon transported for the return of our master.

    Shockwave - I don't understand Starscream?

    Starscream - Megatron will be returning as I know. But our Mission! is transport the energon in chance his return. So Shockwave. Don't Screw this up! (his hologram disappears)

    Jazz (uncloaked and said in the comm link too Optimus) - Prime you heard that?

    Optimus (replied) - Indeed Jazz. Find the Energon and return too base.

    Jazz (said) - Understood Prime. Jazz out (turns off comm link)

    Swoop (turns around staring at Jazz with his weapons activated) - What he say?

    Jazz (loaded his assault rifle) - Prime said Get the energon and get the out of there

    Swoop (smirked) - This will be fun (reloaded his weapon)

    Shockwave (was working on his projects until he heard some noises and realized the intruders) - Hardshell Find The Intruders and bring them too me

    Hardshell - Yes Shockewave. (Turns seeing Destructor) Destructor come on

    Destructor - (nods)

    ((To be continued))
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    Barricade24 The Decepticop

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    It sounds like you are going in a better direction now that I see your original story work. I really like the part where Starscream instinctively knew that Megatron was going to come back, that was a very nice touch. Dialog for the most part seems decent, however there are some comments I have. The second part was a little short, I'd love to see you try this part again and try adding more content to it.
     
  12. Primus Productions

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    "Death of above"

    (Previously on Transformers The Final Prime)

    Optimus : Jazz, I need you and swoop go too The Decepticons base. and somehow find some energon for the ark.

    Shockwave - The Energon is stable and ready use of our convoy's

    Starscream - Megatron will be returning as I know. But our Mission! is transport the energon in chance his return.

    Shockwave - Hardshell Find The Intruders and bring them too me

    Hardshell - Yes Shockewave. (Turns seeing Destructor) Destructor come on

    (We now continue too the present)

    (At Shockwave's Lab)

    Hardshell (Transformed and seeing Jazz and Swoop)

    Jazz (Yelled in shock) - RUN!!!!!!!!

    Swoop (had no clue what was happening) - Huh?

    Hardshell (Fired fusion out his cannon and transformed) - This is End of the line. Autobots....

    Destructor (jumped in the mid-air and grab jazz's foot and thrown him on the ground)

    Swoop - Jazz!.

    Destructor (picks Jazz up and thrown him against the wall again) - Oh look The little Autobot want's play.

    Swoop (ran towards Destructor. Activated his Assault rifle. And began shooting at Destructor)

    Destructor (chuckles. Grab Swoop wing from his back. He said in sarcasm) - Too slow

    Swoop (widen optics in fear) - Let GO!!!

    Destructor (said in sarcasm as he thrown swoop across the sky) - Whatever you say.

    Swoop (Yelled in terror) - AHHHH!!!!!!!!!

    Hardshell (ran towards Jazz)

    Jazz (Activated blade)

    (As Hardshelll ran towards Jazz Hardshell said)

    Hardshell (Raises arm with deadly sword) - End of the line Autobot.

    Jazz (looked upon him and said in anger of rage) - How about you end BUG!!!!!!!!!! (Stab Hardshell)

    (Hardshell fallen on his knee's and dropped his saber. he stared at his hand covered with his spilled Energon)

    Jazz - Take That!

    (Jazz jumped in mid-air and transformed towards Swoop's location)

    (Swoop was fighting Destructor)

    Destructor (Rip Swoop's left wing and ate the wing he torn) - Megatron was right Autobots are good too eat.

    Swoop (Widen optics in fear)

    Jazz (comm linked towards Swoop) - Swoop find the Energon while I handle Leadfoot!

    Swoop (answered) - Understood (ran to find some Energon)

    Destructor - Switching huh (pop neck) This should be intriguing.

    Jazz (brings weapon out) - Bring it Tough GUY!

    Destructor (growls and ran towards him) - Rawaghh!!!!!!!!!


    Jazz (struggles and comm linked towards swoop) - Hey.. um.. Swoop

    Swoop (replied) - Yeah? What?

    Jazz (said in sarcasm) - Not trying hurry you or anything but...... PLEASE HURRY!!!!!!

    (In the comm link Swoop hears Destructor Growling loudly)

    Swoop (found some Energon and comm linked towards Ratchet) - Ratchet found enough Energon for The Ark

    Ratchet (replied in excitement) - Excellent! Groundbridge Online

    Swoop (see's Jazz fighting Destructor)

    (Destructor rip Jazz's arm and ate his arm. Grabbed Jazz and thrown him thorugh the groundbridge)

    Swoop (ran in the groundbridge holding the Energon. made it through and the bridge closed)

    Destructor (growled and told Shockwave in the comm link) - The Autobots has retreated.

    Shockwave (replied) - Return Too base. Commander (corrected himself) Err... I mean Lord Starscream need's us for his speech...

    ((Part 3 will come out soon. Please tell me what you think of this part and what you like about Destructor and much more :D )
     
  13. solusprime19

    solusprime19 Disney, Dat knee

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    I love how it's getting. still can't wait for the crusher twins though.
     
  14. Primus Productions

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    All information you want for the other part's will be made
     
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    Barricade24 The Decepticop

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    The dialogue honestly fits in with the characters as I remember them to be from the game. So good job with that! I forgot that Destructor was an Insecticon-like thing so him eating robot parts actually makes since. I still think that the parts could have a bit more in them, see if you add any further content in future chapters.
     
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    Jackie1768 Autobot Scientist

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    Feels like Fall of Cybertron, can't wait for the next part
     
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    Barricade24 The Decepticop

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    I think he told me that's what it is based off of.
     
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    kaijuguy19 Keyblade Wielder

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    At first the writing seems a bit cluttered since you're using a type of movie or comic script but it seems to be getting better. I like how the writing reminds me of that from the WFC and FOC games.
     
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    "The Rain of Starscream"

    (The Decepticons walked in the hall)

    Starscream (grab his crown and said in a very strong firm voice) - Decepticons!. With Megatron gone!. I am your leader now!. And I Starscream shall begin a new age!. The age of Starscream!. (Evilly Laughs) Haha

    (Meanwhile at Soundwave's Abandon Lab)

    (Soundwave said while ejected Rumble) -Rumble, Eject. Operation resurrection of Megatron

    Rumble (said while climbing) - You got it boss.

    (Rumble climb around the wrecked area of the over left parts)

    (Rumble activated the machine too power up)

    (The machine was powered up. And Soundwave used his tech-volt. Too activate The Energon spoils. Of Megatron's blood streams. Megatron glow with energon coursing through his veins.)

    Soundwave (said while walking towards Megatron reviving him) - The Dark Energon. is fully almost completed. Soon Lord Megatron will return.

    (The Light glowed very bright and Soundwave had cover his optics. And it revealed Megatron online)

    (Megatron was laying on the table awakening Staring his hands as he said in movement)

    Megatron - Where am I?

    Soundwave (said while holding Laserbeak) - My old abandon Lab..

    Megatron (look upon of the screen of Starscream making his speech)

    Starscream (said through the screen) - Decepticons!. With Megatron Gone!. He is Nothing! compared towards my Leadership! (Laughs Evilly) Haha

    Megatron (Got enraged with anger and smash his hands together. and said) - Fear not Starscream your Leadership will not Last.

    (Megatron Breaks the holding that held him back. and yelled in anger. walking towards the door and seeing Rumble holding his Fusion cannon. he picked up his fusion cannon. staring at it. of his reminders of what memories of what it had caused. And Megatron said)

    Megatron - Starscream. Shall pay what he had caused under the disgrace of The Decepticons (Blasted door with his fusion cannon. and told Soundwave) Soundwave!. Contact Shockwave and ensure that he brings my newer army. As I know. The army with Starscream are too much loyal too him.

    Soundwave (said while holding Laserbeak) - Yes, Lord Megatron.

    (Megatron Walked through the halls and founded an elevator and taken him towards Starscream's speech)

    Starscream - I am your leader and you Decepticons shall ob-e-y... (grunts)

    Megatron (raise Arm and said in sarcasm) - coronation Starscream. This is bad comedy.

    Starscream (Grunts and said) Decepticons! I am your true leader now!. And I order you. Attack! Megatron!. Now!.

    (Too be continued)



    The Real action is about begin :ev: 
     
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    Jackie1768 Autobot Scientist

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    Starscream is gonna be toast!