Discussion in 'Transformers Fan Fiction' started by Shadowwavepool7, Mar 15, 2014.
There will be a prequel eventually.
could work, hope it's like The Dark Knight Returns
It's totally nonsense for Sideswipe sharing something stupid to Prowl of what he had done; at the time when the entire team of Autobots and Decepticons might parish. XD But then again, emotions got to Sideswipe and it just came out with out thinking. lol
Story is good.
I think the commination with the U.S. Air force with a UFO should been more realistic.
First, the transformers can speak English but lessoning with human accent, the Seekers would've been more puzzled and confused at first. After the Pilot repeats himself "You are in restricted Air space of the U.S. Airforce. Identify yourself or we will use deadly force" for the second time; Then I think Thunder Cracker should've said "Squadron and I lost Radar signal and were trying to fined our way back." Air force pilot would disbelieve the story because the coloring of the three jets. Then the Pilot would make a fatal mistake that would cause the cons to blow down all the Aces out of the sky (with out killing) then head torts the U.S. airbase near by.
Rest of the story is quite alright.
Oh no! Beachcomber has been Kidnaped.
A dark Colored Optimus.... Interesting.
Triple changing Rumble. Cool
I read part 5.
Well at least beachcomber was never kidnapped.
Nice way to introduce Waspinator. to bad Megatron killed him off. I liked that character of yours.
I'm sure Optimus will have a game plain because he always does.
I never new Bumblebee had Hotshot as a brother.
To bad Hotshot perished in shockwaves wrath.
I read part 7.
I never knew Beach Cromer talk like a hipster.
Love the Comedy in this story. Keep it up.
Poor Beachcomber. At least he had a good attitude towards death. Plus Sideways with his Mini-Cons was a pleasant surprise. I can't help but wonder if he is somehow related to the death of Soundwave's people, or if there is some other character that has or hasn't appeared yet who's responsible. By the way, that was an interesting dynamic between Megatron and Soundwave that you rarely see. Good job.
I read part 8
Story in this is good.
Though there is allot of script writing for each line don't have a character name for me to under stand the conversation between each character.
Then again I'm a terrible reader and your the Author of your own stories. I'm sure you had a good reason why that most lines don't have a character name before each line I read.
Read part 9
Yup the fight was something alright.
I guess it's one of those things you gotta kill off a character order make the story easier on your self.
Just read ep.1 nice a little g1 mix in there great start!
Damn screamer up 2 no good and as soon as I read three jets I knew it was 'cons! Also great intro with the humans.
Terradive is scary! I think this one has a little dark tone to it. Liking it
Loved the action like I said a little g1 but more mature
Now this is very interesting, you should have been the writer of the Bay films
BRING ON CHAPTER 2
Thanks man. My laptop is working now.
Wasp is back but sadly he only spoke ones I think.
I think you should've added that all the Autobots saluted after prime's speech about Hubcap.
All n' all good story about two side having there own deception.
I read part 11.
I really don't have anything else to add or to review about this part.
Separate names with a comma.