Extintion is here - oppinions please

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  1. Achilles1943

    Achilles1943 Well-Known Member

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    so this is my version of TF4
    notice that I love the movie I am not doing this because I don’t like it, but because I have some ideas that I wanted to share

    Prologue (made of two parts)

    The movie starts in the dinosaur era;
    Lots of ships are heading to earth, leaded by a larger ship with different design; inside that ship there is an alien (green dude like we see sci-fi)(forget the shark monsters, those are my version of allicons).
    That alien starts cyberforming earth with seeds, turning the ground into metal and reducing dinosaurs to mere skeletons (who are also transformed in metal).

    Some time (a lot of time actually), even after the primes are gone and the fallen departed from earth, the Allspark comes bursting thought the sky and crashes creating a blastwave that bring some skeletons to life. A convoy of HUMVEEs and an CIA surveillance van arrive to an harbour;
    Inside a boat, ratchet prepares for battle.
    Some troops invade the boat and plant explosives and cause ratchet run away, followed by the lights of some helicopters; ratchet is pursued by six traxes; in the middle of the confusion, no one notices an masked metallic head emerging from the water and transforming into some kind of telescope.
    Ratchet is severaly damaged and the traxes start capturing him;
    But suddenly, an missile comes flying and shoots the trax that is dragging the medic, killing him. Six more missiles, smaller ones, come flying right after
    Two of them kill an trax and the other two explode in the floor, causing some HUMVEEs to go flying; one other missile hots another trax only damaging him and the other destroys the van Ratchet uses the distraction caused by his mysterious savior to run away. In Texas, an mechanic called Cade and his friend Lucas receive an truck that Cade bought in the internet to strip it for parts and win money to pay his daughter’s college.
    Lucas does not seem very happy with Cade’s idea. They return to the Yeager´s farm where Tessa, Cade’s daughter is and the tree start arguing about the truck. On Chicago, an conference his happening: Harold Attinger arrives in his car, an Lamborguini Aventador.
    The theme of the conference is transformers: what to do about them.
    Also present is Joshua Joyce, founder and director of KSI, an famous company that builds transformers to protect the country, and sells them for little money to famous people; they starts arguing about one of Joshua’s robots, and white trax, that somehow gained a conscience and escaped KSI. But soon the theme of the reunion is changed to KSI and Attinger’s new plan: an alliance to rebuild cybertron and restore earth. When asked about “earth restauration”, they explain that natural resources have been dangerously decreasing on the last decades and overpopulation was bringing an end to earth; the solution was an alliance with lockdown, a bounty hunter that pretends to rebuild cybertron and repopulate it.
    But its not cybertron he his talking about: it his earth; the objective is to terraform cybertron into an advanced organic paradisiacal world and cyberform earth to new cybertron. This is possible with the seed: that they plan to detonate in the arctic to transform ice into metal and use that metal to build machines that can change cybertron´s atmosphere and transport entire oceans. To prove that the plan is possible, they show a documentary of some KSI scientists and engineers already on cybertron preparing the planet. They also show some CGI they build of the new paradisiacal heavily organic but also technologically advanced earth. (it looks like Krypton from man of steel). The reunion fishishes with attinger saying “The age of transformers is over; human race will take their place and be the colonizing race on space; glory awaits us gentleman.”.
    The movie then reveals the truck is prime like usual and Attinger’s troops go get optimus; after the confrontation between Savoy and Cade, Shane arrives with smokescreen, who his the trax that excaped KSI; we meet Shane and became his partner, scanned his sonic rs and recame his car; Shane drives him because transformers roll in vehicle mode with little motors on the back wheels (in Smokescreens’s case, it is in his ankle); during his excape, his foot was hit by a missile and he cant roll one wheel and if we tries to move he will ride in circles; however, if a human uses his accelerator he can ride normaly. Optimus bursts out of the barn and start attacking everyone; Savoy kidnaps Tessa and they run away in the cadillac SUVs, and is chased by prime, the humans, and smoke.
    During the chase, Cade receives and message from lucas saying that we will go to the far, but cade does not have money in his cellphone to call him
    Optimus destroys two cadillacs and destroy the roof of another like in TF1;
    He then goes to Utah in search of incoming autobots, but is chased by lockdown
    The humans rescue lucas and are chased by two rally fighters;
    They are able to foil one; then smoke transforms and attackes the other rally fighter, who also transforms moleculary; in the end smoke is able to defeat him.
    They go back to the farm and find crosshairs half-way, who is going to help prime after receiving his message; the other rally fighter appear and they chase him until they stop in a military airport; they fight and crosshairs kills the rally fighter, but not before smokescreen is also mortally hit; Optimus and lockdown continue chasing eatch other and sideswipe arrives; they end up chasing each other back to the farm; optimus scans a new truck mode in the way to the farm; when they arrive to the strret that goes to the farm, lockdown’s ship is in the air; they fight and lockdown shoots optimus, but fails and the missile hits sideswipe, killing him. Galvatron (controlled by humans) enters the battle but is defeated by optimus.
    Lockdown recovers and shoots prime; crosshairs and the humans arrive in that exact time and tessa runs to optimus. they end up both captured.
    Crosshairs and humans infiltrate KSI to get answers, and Joshua shows them how his robots are powerful: he makes a captured bumblebee fight stinger; stinger wins
    Bee freaks out and starts destroying everything; bee and humans are able to infiltrate knight terminus while crosswairs and the two newly arrived autobots Hound and Leadfoot try to repair a ship. Bee manages to free two large beasts (strafe and snarl) and free optimus. KSI releases Galvatron, Stinger and Fearstorm (vehicon commander modelled after crankcase); they split; prime fights Galvatron (who shoots lots of missiles (bus scene on the set)) who is now Motormaster, brought to life by a charge of Allspark energy inside megatron’s head; strafe pursues and kills fearstorm and bee chases stinger (scanning a new mode to show Joshua he is the better robot) and ends up launching his harpoon to stinger’s head and push, separating head from body, killing him. Optimus also manages to kill motormaster, destroying his head. The robot mode is dead but the humans can still transform motormaster and control his vehicle mode. Optimus flies to knight terminus to confrontate lockdown, but is forced to retreat, but not before discovering where ratchet is. The autobots go to Utah to reunite with ratchet; they tell him that his mystery savior was lockdown, and it was a trap to use a localizer mechanism and locate ratchet, attacking when he was together with the other autobots. They are attacked by Nizzi Bots (Joshua changed sides and is with them, and he does not like ratchet because they are under atack because of him); one of the Nizzi Bots eventually manages to capture ratchet before retreating. Lockdown questions ratchet about the autobot’s motives, but we does not reveal anything, so lockdown takes his spark to analyze his memories. The bots head to china – optimus flying, bee on strafe, crosshairs on a drone ship and hound on his ship (was stolen by lockdown but shoot down, the one he and Leadfoot (who by the way is dead by now) wanted crosshairs to repair). Snarl stays behind to protect Chicago. They travel to a location strafe gives them. Bee, strafe and hound protect the city while the other go to the location. There they find an entrance to a massive geologically distorced world, where the dinobots live: Grimlock, Slug, Slog and scorn are there, protecting dinobot eggs; some already hatched, revealing small raptor babies. The place is protected by the dinobots’s guardion, deadlock. Deadlock says that he is raying a dinobot army to protect earth and kill the creators who are maniac creatures obsessed with keep the balance of the universe; or what they judge is balance. Deadlock speaks Chinese and looks like a samurai because he is in asian soil for a long time. We speaks with prime in cybertronian and reveals that he was also one of the knights and betrayed them for the creators, but regret his choices by betraying them and raise the dinobot revolution. He accepts to help prime and optimus, crosshairs and deadlock (now calling himself drift) ride grimlock, scorn and slug respectively after prime shows his power to the leader grimlock. Slog stays behind protecting the eggs
    During the final battle in china, Attinger arrives with galvatron and megatron’s head.
    Megatron possesses motormaster and becomes Galvatron, creates a lot of new decepticons (a new stinger is between them) and calls all decepticons on china; three decepticon appear: junkheap, runamock and runabout. lockdown betrays the humans and starts cyberforming earth ans galvatron convinces lockdown that if he lets optimus rule new cybertron, there are going to start more wars, and if HE rules cyberton with his tyranny no one will stand up and no energon will be split.
    Lockdown agrees; Hound eventually dies and everyone is touched because everyone liked him for his personality; drift also dies honrably fighting lockdown.
    Bee kills the other stinger and the runatwins, hound kills junkheap (who keeps separating into two after being killed, until he his hit in the chest), drift kill the McLaren and the Aston martin and crosswairs kills the two murcielagos.
    Lockdown and Galvatron both manage to excape; Lucas is killed in hong kong and optimus goes to space with strafe and the eggs, ready to defeat the creators and bring another age to the universe.
     
  2. primal789

    primal789 Prime

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    Nice!I honestly love it as much as I love the movie
     
  3. Achilles1943

    Achilles1943 Well-Known Member

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    I forgot to mention that during optimus's capture, lockdown tells him that que creators created primus and powered him with the allspark; the allspark created live on cybertron and then has gone to space
    prime was one of the thirteen, but was diferent: he was build directly by the creator, like primus. he was the one who defeated unicron, but accidently absorved part of his dark powers.
    later, the knights of cyberton departed to space to investigate the cybertonian's origins and recruited the dinobots when they passed by earth; they eventualy discovered the creators and because of that were killed; deadlock and seven dinots managet to excape; optimus was reporn as orion pax because of unicron's ressurection powers
     
  4. Achilles1943

    Achilles1943 Well-Known Member

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    you already read it?! so fast?! wow!
     
  5. Achilles1943

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  7. Achilles1943

    Achilles1943 Well-Known Member

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    if there is anyone who did did understand it, the fearstorm name is a reference to TF Prime comics

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  8. Kraken

    Kraken Is a vegiesaurus, Lex. Veteran

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    Also belongs in the Fan Fiction section.
     
  9. Achilles1943

    Achilles1943 Well-Known Member

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    I also forgot to say Savoy is killed by Cade like in the movie and Attinger is killed by lockdown during his betrayal
     
  10. MegsLITTLE

    MegsLITTLE Autobot soldier

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    This is just fan fiction and should go in the fan fiction part
     
  11. Achilles1943

    Achilles1943 Well-Known Member

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    By the way, Cade's sword gun is made by KSI