Check Out My TV Spot I made

Discussion in 'Transformers Movie Discussion' started by HawaiianBro808, Dec 13, 2016.

  1. HawaiianBro808

    HawaiianBro808 Well-Known Member

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  2. Sablebot

    Sablebot #iposttomakeyouthinknotdebate

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    This is pretty good. Being that I have experience editing, and shooting video myself, here's my feedback:

    STRENGTHS:
    Pacing-really good: it pretty much gets to the main point of this film (Optimus' fate);

    Editing: rhythm of edits is really good.

    AREAS TO DEVELOP
    Music - Too loud; competing with the dialog, especially at 8 seconds in;

    Edit length-The shot where BB jumps on the drone-Maybe add your fade out to black a second later; Also the edit of the dissolve into Optimus floating in space seems a tad rushed;

    The V.O. of Optimus saying, "Forgive Me"-while you may have left out the shot of OP stabbing BB for suspense, hearing that without visually showing us why Optimus is saying that may throw some viewers off contextwise.

    Pretty good overall.
     
  3. Livingdeaddan

    Livingdeaddan The Sept of Kaon

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    That looks exactly like... wait a minute, you've just ripped off Transformers 5
     
  4. HawaiianBro808

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  5. daniel 97

    daniel 97 Autobots' second in command

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    It's very well put together, maybe just like Sablebot said, the music blends with the dialogue at some parts.
     
  6. Primus Productions

    Primus Productions Defender of the bayverse Veteran

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    Very well done!, Music fits the dialogue and scene's.

    As for myself, I've done a trailer myself. Multiple actually.







     
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  7. Megatronus the Fallen

    Megatronus the Fallen The First Decepticon

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    Not a fan of unofficial trailers. A lot of them are just random clips from different movies that I know there from. And also he dialogue doesn't match what they're even saying. Not to mention I like the original music better and the events that happened in the trailer were better chronologically then they are in trailer edits. So yeah, I'm rather bland.
     
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