Transformers: Return to Cybertron

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  1. JackWheel

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    This is my FIRST attempt at something like this. So please, bare with me. I'd also really appreciate some constructive criticism :D 

    Characters:
    Autobots - Optimus Prime, Bumblebee, Wheeljack, Ironhide, Smokescreen, Arcee, Warpath, Red Alert, Ratchet, and Jolt.

    Decepticons - Megatron, Starscream, Soundwave, and Shockwave (More to be announced in the upcoming chapters)

    Location: Earth>Jasper, Nevada>Autobot Base

    Chapter 1 - The Goodbye

    "I can't believe we're actually leaving" says Arcee as she looks up to Bulkhead.
    "I never thought in a million years that we'd be leaving this rock" says Bulkhead.
    "Don't worry to much Bulk we've got another rock in our sights!"
    "Ha, you're right about that Smokescreen!"

    "Autobots" Optimus says as he begins to address Team Prime "Today, we return to Cybertron. And even though Earth has been our home for quite some time now, I'm glad to be returning. However, today's mission to the Space Center must be a covert one. We cannot allow the remaining Decepticons on Earth to discover our plan."

    "Optimus, the mobile space bridge is ready. I suggest driving to the Space Center so that way the Decepticons can not learn our location." says Ratchet.

    "I agree, old friend."

    "It feels weird not having Miko around" says Bulkhead.
    I felt the same about Jack, but they're living their own lives now. Jack in college, Miko about to finish high school, and Raf moving to Florida." Arcee said.

    "Autobots, for the last time on Earth, TRANSFORM AND ROLL OUT"

    *The Autobots one by one transformed into their Earth forms, and began to rev there engines as they rolled out from the Autobot base.*

    *Transmission(TM) to Agent Fowleer from Optimus Prime*: "Agent Fowler, we're in a safe proximity from the base. It's been an honor."

    "The honor was all mine Prime!"
    "This is Agent Fowler, Operation Autobomb is a go"
    * The bomb inside of the Autobot base detonates as Agent Fowler sees the mushroom cloud in the rear-view mirror of his F-22*

    Location : Cybertron>New Kaon>Decepticon Headquarters [/SIZE]

    "Lord Megatron, the bomb has been detonated, the Autobots are preparing to leave Earth" says Soundwave

    "Send every Vehicon left on Earth to there location, DO NOT LET THEM BOARD THE XANTHIUM" screams Megatron

    "Yes, Lord Megatron"
    *TM to Vehicon Base* - "Vehicons, destroy the Autobots, leave no trace of there existence"

    "Yes Soundwave" the Vehicon General replies
    "YOU HEARD SOUNDWAVE, THIS IS OUR FINAL CHANCE."
    * All remaining Vehicon troops on Earth begin to travel towards Team Prime *

    Location: 30 minutes from Space Center

    "Prime, we have the entire Vehicon army heading towards our location." says Ratchet

    "Autobots, now that our efforts of evading the Decepticons have been thwarted, we must stop them at all costs. Lets do this!" says Optimus as he addresses the Autobots

    Ratchet begins to say"I'm going to need an escort in order to get the Xanthium ready."
    "I'm on it!" Bumblebee announces.
    *Bumblebee & Ratchet quickly begin to swerve in and out of traffic in order to get to the Xanthium before the Vehicons.*

    *Multiple Vehicons begin firing upon Arcee & Bulkhead, and Suddenly Arcee takes a direct hit and spirals out of control, forcing her to transform slamming directly into a gasoline tanker*

    "ARCEE" Bulkhead screams as he frantically tries to rescue Arcee
    *Bulkhead quickly transforms and launches himself into the air*
    * An incoming Vehicon blast makes it way towards the gasoline tank, and ignites the spilled fire, with only moments towards explosion*
    *Bulkhead quickly makes his way towards Arcee, and jumps into the gasoline tanker to protect her.*
    * The tanker, now 30 feet away from her, explodes, waking her up out of her slight consciousness*

    "Bulkhead?,..Bulkhead?"
    *Arcee quickly notices the large round blunt-force object coming from the gasoline tanker*
    "BULLLKKKHEEEADDD"
    * She quickly runs over to Bulkhead & drags him out from the wreckage*
    "No....."

    *Optimus, behind Arcee & Bulkhead, is frantically shooting Vehicons down from the sky with his twin- Ion Blasters. Suddenly, Optimus receives a transmission from Arcee*

    "OPTIMUS, Bulkheads down, I need your assistance NOW"

    "I'm on my way now Arcee!"
    *Optimus transforms back into his truck, and quickly races towards Arcee and Bulkhead, smashing into Vehicons, killing them, leaving a destructive path. Optimus transforms as he reaches Arcee & Bulkhead.*
    "We've got to get him out of here now" says Optimus
    TM To Ratchet from Optimus : "Ratchet, have you prepped the Xanthium?"

    Ratchet replies "Its ready when you are Optimus"
    Optimus transmits back "We need a groundbridge asap!"
    * Ratchet quickly opens a groundbridge to Prime's location. *

    *Prime grabs Bulkhead, and carries him through the Groundbridge*

    END OF CHAPTER 1




    Chapter 2- We have arrived

    *Optimus Prime emerges from the other side of the Groundbridge, with Arcee & Smokescreen right behind him.*

    "Ratchet--" Optimus attempts to say
    "Optimus, it's to late, Bulkhead has already merged with the Allspark" Ratchet noticed
    "No...." Optimus barely mutters as he looks towards Arcee

    *Arcee's mouth drops open, as she drops down to her knees, facing the fact that she is now without a partner..again*

    "Autobots, we have lost an ally that can never be replaced. But if there's one thing I knew about Bulkhead, it would be that he would never want us feeling sorry for him. We must continue, for Bulkhead." Optimus states as he looks towards Arcee once more
    "Arcee are you okay?" asks Smokescreen.
    "I need to be alone" snaps back Arcee.

    *Arcee makes her way throughout the Xanthium, sitting in the storage room, reminiscing about her moments with Bulkhead, and Cliffjumper... and Tailgate*

    "Wheeljack are you in position?"
    "Sure am Doc, little Decepticon activity." states Wheeljack sitting in the Space Bridge control room on Cybertron

    "Lets roll" affirms Prime.

    *Ratchet begins to initiate the launch sequence, as the rocket booster below the Xanthium begin to ignite. The Xanthium slowly pulls away from from the Space Station, and uses a turbo boost to break through Earth Atmosphere.*

    *The Autobots begin to take there seats, facing the front of the ship. Optimus takes command at the Xanthium control booth, and Bumblebee takes post at the monitor controlling the ships vitals *

    * In the optical center, Smokescreen locates the Space Bridge that will fast - pass them to Cybertron *

    "Optimus the Space Bridge is in sight" Smokescreen shouts excitedly
    * As Smokescreen looks excitingly at the Space Bridge, he begins to notices discrepancies in the Space Bridge.*
    "Uh Optimus is there usually dark yellow in the Space Bridge" asks Smokescreen

    *Optimus slowly gets up from his seat, and stares with wide eyes into the Space Bridge*
    "Ratchet" Optimus jerks his 90* to face Ratchet "Do you have radio communication with Wheeljack" Optimus nervously asks Ratchet

    "Wheeljack, come in." *Ratchet waits for response, but gets none"
    "WHEELJACK" Ratchet screams into the microphone.

    *Ratchet then hears a faint breathing sound from the Microphone*
    "Would you all be quiet" Ratchet directs that statement towards Smokescreen
    * Ratchet then loses all communication with Wheeljack *

    "Ratchet, re-route all power to the main engines. We have got to get to the Space Bridge"
    " On it Optimus" Ratchet affirms
    " Bumblebee, Smokescreen, return to your posts and secure your self in position"

    *The lights begin to flicker aboard the Xanthium, as the Autobots get thrusted foward because of the redirection in power.*

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    "So you though you could actually defeat me?" the mysterious Decepticon says as he begins to taunt Wheeljack"

    "I don't think I can defeat you, I know I can" affirms Wheeljack
    * Wheeljack quickly sends a blast from his cannon directly into the Decepticon, causing the Decepticon to lose his footing *

    "Your irritate me Autobot!"
    * The Decepticon quickly retaliates by sending a POWERFUL blast directly into Wheeljacks torso, knocking Wheeljack unconscious *
    "You're coming with me little pest, you'll be my new pet!"
    * The Decepticon delivers a final blow to Team Prime, by powering down the Space Bridge *

    [​IMG]

    "Optimus we're cutting it to close" Ratchet frantically states
    "This is our only hope, we must push foward!"

    *The Xanthium nears the Space Bridge as its about to close, the Autobots, now including Arcee, suspense-fully wait to see if the Space Bridge will stay open. The Space Bridge, with only a hint left of green left in it, stays open long enough for the Autobots to succesfullly pass through to Cybertron.*

    *The Autobots are able to safely land on Cybertron, and are welcomed by Jazz & Mirage.*

    "Optimus, its good to see ya back on Cybertron, we really needed our leader back" Jazz stated excitingly.

    "Its good to be back,Jazz."
    "However this day can not be overshadowed by the loss of Bulkhead, and possibly Wheeljack."

    "Smokescreen, I need you and Bumblebee to scout for Wheeljack, or any trace of him."

    "Yes sir" *Smokescreen nods*

    *Bumblebee and Smokescreen transform into there vehicle modes, and begin to travel through New Iacon. They both noticed the devastation that still exists on Cybertron. The grayness of Cybertron feels eerie to them both. They begin to arrive when Smokescreen notices something from the corner of his optic*

    "Bumblebee I got something" Smokescreen announces

    *Both of the Autobots transform into there robot forms, and rush over to-*

    "That's Wheeljack arm..." Bumblebee notices "There's an audio log attached to it."
    * The Audio Log begins to play *

    "Hello Autobots, yes, this is Shockwave. Although I could not stop you from returning to Cybertron, I can stop your celebration. You only have a few cycle's until Wheeljack is gone!"

    *The Audio Log Ends. The young Autobots look at each other, both noticing there facial expressions; terror. They re-count the stories of what Shockwave has done to former Autobots, and even Decepticons. *

    "Prime, we're gonna need a lot of backup" Smokescreen exclaims.


    END OF CHAPTER 2



    Authors note - The dashed lines indicate a change in POV.
    Chapter 3: Wheeljack's Return

    * Optimus Prime, sitting in his golden chair, watches as the last of the Autobot's leaves the ship. He stands up from his current position, and glances through the vast window, peering into the newly re-born Cybertron. Oddly enough, Optimus is content with the decision he made. Letting Cybertron be re-born under Megatron's name, and Earth be saved from any harm. In a moment of pure bliss, Arcee interrupts him, with breaking news.

    "Optimus we have a problem."
    "What could possibly ruin this day?" Optimus exclaims.
    "Shockwave has got Wheeljack hostage, and it's already not looking good for Jackie (Arcee thinks to herself "Did I really just say that?").
    "Lets not waste any more time." proclaims Optimus

    * Optimus swiftly walks over to the Ark's intercom, presses the announcement button and states : "If they're are any Autobot's in Class Rank 1 please proceed to the Captains Quarters"
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    *Down below in Class Rank 1, (Which contains transformers such as Jazz, Arcce, Wheeljack etc) Ironhide escorts the last of the Autobots from this level, except 1.*
    * Ironhide walks over to the room that Bulkhead stayed, well, layed in. The stasis pad pushed up against the wall, and Bulkheads scrapped remains lye on the floor. Ironhide enters the room, and kneels down on one knee, and gently puts his left hand on Bulkhead. As he does this, Ironhide ponders the crucial decision he made of staying on Cybertron as the lone wrecker. He wonder if he went to Earth, if he made the adjustment, would he still be alive? All these thoughts race through his head, but are short-lived as he hears Optimus's command come over the intercom. He immediately responds, and makes his way towards the elevator, and punches the button "CQ". He feels the initial bump of the elevator, and is soon heading upwards towards Optimus's location. *
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    * Concentrating on Teleetran 1, Optimus eagerly jerks his head when he hears the "ding" of the elevator. *
    Ironhide, glad you responded.

    "What is it Prime?" wonders Ironhide.

    "I need you to escort Bumblebee and Smokescreen to Shockwave's location. He's holding Wheeljack hostage and I fear that Wheeljack will suffer the same fate as Cliffjumper did when he was captured." Optimus stated

    "I wont let you down" Ironhide says as he nods, and walks back to the elevator.
    TM from Optimus: "Ironhide, I've sent you the coordinates. Bumblebee and Smokescreen will be waiting for you"
    "Gotcha Optimus, will bring back Wheeljack, don't worry." Ironhide transmits.
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    *Ironhide transforms into his Cybertronian tank mode, and thrust his boosters as he travels along the revived Iacon Speedway towards Bumblebee and Smokescreen. After seeing the planet so cold, so dark, for eons, it's a welcome sight to see Autobots traveling along this route. When he reaches the extent of the Iacon speedway, the light and the warmth disappears as he enters Decepticon territory. *
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    "Big Guns is approaching" Bumblebee sarcastically stated.
    "I heard that you puny scout" shouted Ironhide as he approached Smokescreen and Bumblebee, violently transforming.
    "Now now you two, we've got work to do" Smokescreen surprisingly stated, since he was usually the one to cause chaos.

    * Bumblebee looks away from Ironhide and Smokescreen, and focuses his attention to the entrance of Shockwave's hidden lair. *
    "These are the coordinates the audio log came from" Bumblebee noticed.

    "Alright you two, weapons ready, but be careful, Shockwave has a lot of tricks up his disgusting sleeve" Ironhide spits out.

    *Bumblebee equips his "Stingers" (His Guns) and carefully approaches the entrance. He begins to notice the strange markings all over the door, and quickly notices the door is cracked open *

    "He's expecting us alright" Ironhide says
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    *Smokescreen stands on the opposite side of the open door. He then watches Ironhide exert an enormous amount of force traveling from his leg to the door, forcing it wide open.
    Smokescreen turns around to the open door, with his blasters ready to shoot. He looks for any signs of Decepticons, or Wheeljack, but finds none.*

    "Clear" Smokescreen announces.

    "Ironhide, there's nothing but road for about a mile." Smokescreen notices.

    "Well then lets pedal to the medal" Ironhide awkwardly says

    * Smokescreen transforms into his vehicle mode, revving his engine as he travels at high speeds through Shockwave's lab. He begins to notice the insides of the lab, scratch marks can be seen that were made on the opposite sides of the doors, large chunks of the wall are missing, and the lighting fixtures have crashed onto the ground. *

    *They reach the end of the tunnel, with surprisingly, no weirdly, no Decepticon activity.*
    "NOOO" Bumblebee screams
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    * Bumblebee quickly runs to another body part of Wheeljack. He reaches for it the leg, and when he does so, the bomb inside of it goes off, blasting Bumblebee back. Bumblebee's head clashes HARD with the wall, and the back part of his head is now crushed. Bumblebee soon falls to the floor and....*
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    "BUMBLEBEE!"
    *Ironhide screams as he watches the bot collide head-on with the wall. He runs over as Bumblebee begins to collapse on the floor. Ironhide soon watches as Bumblebee eyes flicker from blue to grey...
    Ironhide's attention is soon drawn away from Bumblebee as a new door closes and locks the entrance to the facility. After noticing the door locking into place, Ironhide's nervousness grows as the door begins moving towards him, and in second will collide with all of them. *

    "Smokescreen we need to get out of her, blast through that rubble! NOW!"

    *Ironhide grasps his hands around Bumblebee's torso and watches as Smokescreen clears an impressive path based on Smokescreen's size. Ironhide runs toward the path, but the door is faster, causing him to jump to the clearing. Ironhide's chin collides with Bumblebee's torso as a result of the jump. He soon stands up, and nods to Smokescreen, signaling that they should continue. However before they begin moving, they can hear a crackle in the intercom.*

    "If there is anyone in here..............ple-"

    "PLEASE continue listening as I torture the life out of poor Wheeljack." Shockwave says in a terrifying tone

    "Smokescreen, stay here. I have business to take care of."

    *Without hesitation, Ironhide throws the body of Bumblebee onto Smokescreen, in order to avoid the annoying chatter Smokescreen will produce. He quickly transforms, and violently accelerates until he homes in on the audio signal that played over the intercom. Ironhide quickly makes an irrational decision, and blasts his way through the door*
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    * Not expecting the Autobots to have made it to his lab, Shockwave is "shocked" when Ironhide comes blasting through the door. He cocks back his AstroMag cannon and fires a blast toward Ironhide, which is successful in making impact on Ironhide, but doesn't stop him from bashing his mace into Shockwave's face, which creates a devastating impact to Shockwave, leaving him defenseless on the floor. *
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    * Ironhide feels victorious as he watches Shockwave fall defenseless to the floor. He looks at both Shockwave and Wheeljack, and decides to make a rational decision and save Wheeljack first. He grasps Wheeljack's hand tight, and looks directly into his eyes, feeling relieved that the Wrecker is still operational despite the torn off limbs. *
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    END OF CHAPTER 3


    Chapter 4- Internal Conflict

    * A thump awakes Wheeljack from his stasis. He feels intense heat on the lower half of his body. He looks down to find Jolt furiously working to reattach his leg, after Shockwave tore it off. *

    "Ah Wheeljack, you're up!" Ratchet says as he walks towards Wheeljack.

    "Where, where am I" Wheeljack says to Ratchet

    "In a drop ship about 30 minutes outside of New Iacon. You're lucky your still functional. Both a leg and arm torn off." Ratchet responds.

    "Shockwave" Wheeljack whispers to himself.
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    *Ratchet walks over to Bumblebee, who's head is badly damaged after being slammed against a wall. *

    "Perceptor, any signs of brain activity in Bumblebee?" Ratchet asks

    "None. After doing multiple scans, and of course triple checking my work, it seems that Bumblebee's Earth Protoform can no longer sustain him. If he is to operate fully again, he must be transferred into his Cybertronian protoform. "

    "That could be tricky." Ratchet notes.
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    "Alright Wheeljack, since the sedative I gave you obviously wore off, this is probably going to hurt a lot." Jolt states

    *He begins to clean the exit wound, ensuring the operation can go smoothly as possible. As he is doing this, he hears the ding of the drop ship going off, signaling they are preparing to land. Jolt heads over to the medical table, and firmly grabs Wheeljack's severed arm, making sure that the arm can reattach with relative ease.*
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    * Megatron watches as Shockwave arrives at Decepticon Headquarters. He is shocked to see Shockwave in such bad condition. His torso is bleeding out, and his eye is fractured into 8 pieces. *

    "Megatron... I have failed you. The Autobot escaped, and I was unable to capture Bumblebee."

    "Shockwave... I would expect this behavior from Starscream, not you. " Megatron says as he looks away from Shockwave.

    "I am trying to win an election, Shockwave. The Cybertronians, they need to trust me. Now that the pesky Autobot messenger lives, and Wheeljack can tell the stories of what you did to him, I doubt I can win. Right now, you're worth as much as cannon fodder to me." Megatron says in disgust

    "You compare ME to Cannon Fodder?" Shockwave angrily replies "Who do you think kept Cybertron under Decepticon control while YOU were fighting a war that up until now you were LOSING."

    *Megatron releases a blast from his Fusion Cannon into Shockwave's torso, increasing his damage.*

    "I do not have time for this. Soundwave, take Shockwave to get repairs, and make sure he doesn't escape the facility. I have a meeting with Optimus Prime to attend to."


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    END OF CHAPTER 4


    Chapter 5- The Confrontation

    * As the Autobot Leader Optimus Prime approaches the building in which the High Council resides in, an array of emotions fill his processers. He can still remember the day when he brought the lifeless, torn body, of Zeta Prime. He remembers the tragic day when Megatron lost his way, and bid war against all of Cybertron. As Optimus pushes the door, he thinks about the irony of the situation. Himself and Megatron, meeting with the High Council, discussing peace and politics. Those two things alone used to bother Megatron immensely. *

    *Optimus is pleased to see Megatron already present. As Optimus nears the table, Megatron stands from his chair, and shakes hands with Optimus. They begin to talk briefly, but are soon interrupted.*

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    *Megatron's attention is diverted from Optimus Prime as the door (not the entrance) swings open. The High Council emerges, after eons spent in hiding. Megatron is shocked when he discovers that the High Council is now comprised of one lone member; Alpha Trion. Megatron looks over at Optimus, and is not surprised to see the look upon his face; Disappointment.*
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    "Gentleman, it is good to see you here." Alpha Trion says as he takes his seat.

    "From the look upon your faces, I can tell you that you are both wondering where the rest of the High Council is. The truth is, they're dead. Megatron, your army entered our once secret base, and assassinated my brothers. I was spared only because I was able to hide within the base. But I'm here to tell you, all your sins against Cybertron will be forgotten. You have revived our once dormant planet, and rid it of the Dark Energon you infected with it. But we are not here to reminisce, we are here to discuss the terms of your agreement." Alpha Trion exclaims.

    "Optimus, you agreed to spare Megatron's life if he 1) Re-actiavted the planet, 2) Allowed for a democracy to exist on Cybertron, and 3) Rid himself of Dark Energon.

    Megatron.. it is very pleasing to know that you have abided by these terms. Now, your deal with Optimus Prime is that the Matrix no longer decides the leader of Cybertron. The 'Autobots' and 'Decepticons' are forever more political factions, rather than armies." Alpha Trion explained.
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    *Optimus Prime felt and overwhelming sense of joy and nervousness fill his body. For the first time ever, the people would get to chose the leader of Cybertron. The Matrix is merely now a vessel of hope, that can only be used to light our darkest hour. Megatron has rid himself and the planet of Dark Energon. Optimus thinks to himself, "The only bad thing about today, is that 11 members of the High Council perished trying to maintain tranquility during the war."

    "The election will take place on November 4th, and the Cybertronian who wins it will be inaugurated on January 1st. The winner, will chose the new members of the High Council, and they will serve solely as his advisers. The leader will be responsible for enacting laws and policies that will ensure peace on Cybertron. We have lost too many brothers due to both of your conflicts with each other, and it's time to formally end this once and for all." Alpah Trion said

    *Megatron and Optimus Prime both stand up, look each other in the optics, and shake hands, signalling the end of the War for Cybertron.*


    And that's when its all happened. From above, the roof collapses, and fire began to erupt all over the building. Pieces of Cybertronian metal are scraping against each other as they began to fall into the ground. Another blast is heard from the side, and Megatron soon feels the impact as the left side of the building collapses on top of him. With only his head visible, he can see something purple floating above the surface. His vision deteriorates as more and more Energon leaks from his crushed body. Optimus Prime, stuck to the ground by a chunk of the ceiling, looks over, and his eyes widen as he see's the large metal beam fall from within the roof, and lunge into Alpha Trions head. Optimus Prime tries desperately to free himself from the rubble, but as soon as he makes progress, a large chunk of the building slams straight into his chest.


    *From above, the Cybertronian lets out a menacing laugh, and orders his comrades back to base.*

    "This is just the beginning" the Cybertronian screams from the sky.


    END OF CHAPTER 5
     
  2. kaijuguy19

    kaijuguy19 Keyblade Wielder

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    Poor Bulk! :(  Guess this time he may not so lucky!
     
  3. JackWheel

    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    Did you think it was good? Any suggestions?
     
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    kaijuguy19 Keyblade Wielder

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    It's good so far although you should really be more descriptive and speific about who's talking and what's happening. And that the pics should be smaller when we're switching to Autobot to Decepticon and vice versa.
     
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    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    Thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate it
     
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    Ømnidrive Stop.....think......fart.....and keep on going

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    This is great!!!!
     
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    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    Wow thank you :) 
     
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    Ømnidrive Stop.....think......fart.....and keep on going

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    Try to make thing a bit less obvious no offense btw!!! Also try introducing characters people probadly don't know. Also when in battle scenes the littlest of detail would be great other than that do what u do!!!!
     
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    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    Awesome advice, thanks! But can you elaborate on "make things less obvious"! And no offense taken, its constructive criticism :) 
     
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    I believe he/she means make the story more unpredictable.
     
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    Ømnidrive Stop.....think......fart.....and keep on going

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    a.) He lolz know u didn't know my gender but everyone gets one guess
    b.) That's exactly what I meant
     
  12. JackWheel

    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    Thanks, I'll work on that for my next story. :) 
     
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    Ømnidrive Stop.....think......fart.....and keep on going

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    Anytime bro!!!!
    :lol :thumb :lol 
     
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    i love this can you put bruticus in this i would love it more if so
     
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    mmmm Shockwave standing up for him. That was fun. Hpy Nw Yr to ya !
     
  16. JackWheel

    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    Thank You! I'll try and come up with ways to put him in the story . :) 

    Thanks! Happy New Year as well!
     
  17. megatron prime1

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    u could have Shockwave bild bruticus
     
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    Ømnidrive Stop.....think......fart.....and keep on going

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    Nahhhh let them be brothers with an unusual ability to combine!!!
     
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    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    Chapter 5- The Confrontation

    * As the Autobot Leader Optimus Prime approaches the building in which the High Council resides in, an array of emotions fill his processers. He can still remember the day when he brought the lifeless, torn body, of Zeta Prime. He remembers the tragic day when Megatron lost his way, and bid war against all of Cybertron. As Optimus pushes the door, he thinks about the irony of the situation. Himself and Megatron, meeting with the High Council, discussing peace and politics. Those two things alone used to bother Megatron immensely. *

    *Optimus is pleased to see Megatron already present. As Optimus nears the table, Megatron stands from his chair, and shakes hands with Optimus. They begin to talk briefly, but are soon interrupted.*

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    *Megatron's attention is diverted from Optimus Prime as the door (not the entrance) swings open. The High Council emerges, after eons spent in hiding. Megatron is shocked when he discovers that the High Council is now comprised of one lone member; Alpha Trion. Megatron looks over at Optimus, and is not surprised to see the look upon his face; Disappointment.*
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    "Gentleman, it is good to see you here." Alpha Trion says as he takes his seat.

    "From the look upon your faces, I can tell you that you are both wondering where the rest of the High Council is. The truth is, they're dead. Megatron, your army entered our once secret base, and assassinated my brothers. I was spared only because I was able to hide within the base. But I'm here to tell you, all your sins against Cybertron will be forgotten. You have revived our once dormant planet, and rid it of the Dark Energon you infected with it. But we are not here to reminisce, we are here to discuss the terms of your agreement." Alpha Trion exclaims.

    "Optimus, you agreed to spare Megatron's life if he 1) Re-actiavted the planet, 2) Allowed for a democracy to exist on Cybertron, and 3) Rid himself of Dark Energon.

    Megatron.. it is very pleasing to know that you have abided by these terms. Now, your deal with Optimus Prime is that the Matrix no longer decides the leader of Cybertron. The 'Autobots' and 'Decepticons' are forever more political factions, rather than armies." Alpha Trion explained.
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    *Optimus Prime felt and overwhelming sense of joy and nervousness fill his body. For the first time ever, the people would get to chose the leader of Cybertron. The Matrix is merely now a vessel of hope, that can only be used to light our darkest hour. Megatron has rid himself and the planet of Dark Energon. Optimus thinks to himself, "The only bad thing about today, is that 11 members of the High Council perished trying to maintain tranquility during the war."

    "The election will take place on November 4th, and the Cybertronian who wins it will be inaugurated on January 1st. The winner, will chose the new members of the High Council, and they will serve solely as his advisers. The leader will be responsible for enacting laws and policies that will ensure peace on Cybertron. We have lost too many brothers due to both of your conflicts with each other, and it's time to formally end this once and for all." Alpah Trion said

    *Megatron and Optimus Prime both stand up, look each other in the optics, and shake hands, signalling the end of the War for Cybertron.*


    And that's when its all happened. From above, the roof collapses, and fire began to erupt all over the building. Pieces of Cybertronian metal are scraping against each other as they began to fall into the ground. Another blast is heard from the side, and Megatron soon feels the impact as the left side of the building collapses on top of him. With only his head visible, he can see something purple floating above the surface. His vision deteriorates as more and more Energon leaks from his crushed body. Optimus Prime, stuck to the ground by a chunk of the ceiling, looks over, and his eyes widen as he see's the large metal beam fall from within the roof, and lunge into Alpha Trions head. Optimus Prime tries desperately to free himself from the rubble, but as soon as he makes progress, a large chunk of the building slams straight into his chest.


    *From above, the Cybertronian lets out a menacing laugh, and orders his comrades back to base.*

    "This is just the beginning" the Cybertronian screams from the sky.


    END OF CHAPTER 5
     
  20. JackWheel

    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    Chapter 6 - Optimus

    Optimus's optics flashed a bright blue as life returned to him. His vision is very dazed, and everything around him seems to be a blur. Lights are flashing, Cybertronians are rushing about, and various wires are being slammed into his processors.
    "Jolt, Jolt, he's flat-lining!" Ratchet shouted as he rushed over to Megatron
    Optimus titled his head painfully to the right, and saw Megatron in an even worse condition he was.
    "Put the pack on, hurry, CLEAR!"
    Optimus watched as Jolt and Ratchet attempted to restart Megatron's spark. The beeps became less constant, and a cringe in Optimus's stomach began to emerge.
    "3,2, CLEAR!"
    Optimus watched as Megatron's body jolted up, only to slam back down onto the med-table, lifeless.
    The monitor began to beep louder, and Optimus directed his attention to it. The monitor read : ----^--^^------^-----------------------------------
    "He's dead" Ratchet said in shock. "I'm calling it, 10:20. Today is the day some have been waiting for a millennia, but this is not the way anyway should go. Jolt, get one of the medics to bring up another body bag."
    "Another?" Optimus mumbled towards Ratchet "Who else has perished today?"
    "I'm sorry to tell you Optimus, but Alpha Trion has perished."
    The monitor began to beep loudly again as Optimus's spark-rate jolted to unhealthy levels.
    "Two must not perish today" Optimus declared as he ripped off the wires attached to his protoform. He stood up, nearly crashing back into the medical equipment in the process. Ratchet watched in disbelief as Optimus's chest began to transform. The light from The Matrix began to fill the room. Ratchet knew what was Optimus was about to do. He ran to Optimus, and tackled him to the ground.
    "His body can no longer handle life. I'm sorry Optimus, he's gone."
    Optimus pushed Ratchet off of him, and took The Matrix out once again. As he held the ancient Cybertronian relic in his hand, he looked directly into Megatron's empty eyes.
    "Optimus, don't do this. You can not allow Megatron to become the holder of The Matrix." Ratchet pleaded.
    Optimus ignored his comments.
    As the Matrix got closer and closer to Megatron, his Spark Chamber began to open. Optimus watched in awe as it opened, and gently placed it inside of him.
    The entire room stood still as Megatron arose from his deceased state.
    Ratchet's eyes were as large as Cybertron itself.
    Jolt's jaw was dropped.
    Red Alert was in a defensive position.
    Most of all, Optimus was a combination of all of those expressions.

    Megatron jumped from his table, and tackled Optimus onto the ground. Red Alert was prepared to fire, but Ratchet motioned him to lower his weapons. From the ground the surrounding Autobots could hear Optimus attempting to talk down Megatron, and after a few tense moments, it worked.
    "Where, where, where am I?" Megatron confusingly asked.
    "Iacon. You were just involved in of the greatest terror attacks against Cybertron since the War for Cybertron started. You've got a lot of explaining to do." Red Alert pronounced.

    In response to Red Alert, Optimus began to speak. "Megatron was only at the scene to talk peace with Alpha Trion and myself. I doubt Megatron would actually risk killing himself in order to harm us."
    "Very well" Red Alert responded.

    Ratchet and Red Alert walked into the room adjoined to the medical bay
    "This was such a mistake." Ratchet spat out
    "What was Optimus thinking?" Red Alert questioned
    "He wasn't. That's the problem. His compassion is getting in the way of protecting Cybertron. Primus granted us the chance to re-build Cybertron and now he is handing over one of the most important relics in Cybertron's history to a Decepticon." Ratchet shivered as he said those words.


    Location: Iacon Borders

    "Ironhide we've got a problem. The most elite of the elite Decepticons are standing at our borders demanding access to Megatron. What is going on over there?" Warpath transmitted.
    "Warpath, is Soundwave among this crowd" Ironhide transmitted back
    "It's hard to tell when they're all in a frenzy. Wait wait, I found the only civilized one it must be him. Alright Ironhide I've got em."
    "Let him through" Ironhide responded

    Soundwave bursted through doors, looking directly at Ironhide he said "Bring me to Lord Megatron at once"
    Ironhide motioned him through the galley-like doors. On the other side of these doors lay Megatron and Optimus Prime. Optimus, still heavily reliant on the machines, and Megatron gaining back most of his abilities.
    "Lord Megatron, we have a drop-ship waiting for your return." Soundwave proclaimed.
    "I wish to stay with the Autobots, Soundwave."
    "But my Lord I-"
    Soundwave is interrupted by Megatron.
    "I have important matters to discuss with Optimus, and I will stay here until he makes a full recovery. Return to base and resume normal operations." Megatron ordered
    "As you command"
    Soundwave exited the building and ordered all the troops back to base, although deep inside of him he felt this was a mistake.

    Three Cycles(Days) Later

    "Megatron, who do you think could of done something like this?" Optimus pondered.
    "Do you remember" Megatron began to ask "When the building was going down? I saw something floating in the sky. It was purple. I couldn't make anything else out because the smog became too thick."
    "All to well" Optimus responded and he began to remember that day. "After I watched what had happened to Alpha Trion and yourself, I heard from the sky someone scream 'This is just the beginning'.
    "I think I may have a theory as to who that might be."
    "Who?"

    "Shockwave."

    End of Chapter 6