|07-14-2010, 05:05 PM||#1|
Join Date: Mar 2007
Collection Count: 390
This is my first attempt at a serious comic. It has no fixed continuity. Itīs a brand new story. Hope you guys enjoy it. Now with you, "Transformers: Legacy"
|07-14-2010, 06:59 PM||#2|
Herald of Unicron
Join Date: Feb 2009
Not bad, not bad...The New and IMPROVED (I think) version/But I Don't Wanna Catch Them All! A Pokemon Comic/Pony Rider
|07-14-2010, 07:29 PM||#3|
Doing the unmentionables
Join Date: Jul 2010
Location: dont stalk me
Collection Count: It got better, no It got worse
Love the intro, and thundercracker as a main,or atleast I think so, is win^^
|07-14-2010, 09:21 PM||#4|
is playing "catch up"
Join Date: Jun 2010
Collection Count: Why count? I'm just gonna get more!
I'm guessing Thundercraker is the "Shatered Glass" Starscream.
|07-14-2010, 11:07 PM||#5|
Join Date: Jul 2009
Holy cow man. Way to start off with a bang!!! I'm hooked.
|07-15-2010, 12:18 AM||#6|
D Witwicky biographer
Join Date: Aug 2006
|07-15-2010, 02:10 AM||#7|
Energon Station Comander
Join Date: Jul 2003
Location: Ashmore, IL
Collection Count: 1k +
News Credits: 1
Off to a great start.
|07-15-2010, 09:55 AM||#8|
Spiff's Stunt Double
Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: Somewhere in the UK...
Collection Count: Most of the Alts and MP's, with a few choice Classics and Movie-Formers thrown in for spice.
Good start. I like the atmospheric scene setting of the narration, and the sick part of my brain LOVES the idea that Leige Maximus keeps Prime's corpse strung up to break the spirits of any Autobot dissenters. That's very cool. Also, I'd like to point out that the first panel, that opening shot of Jetfire, is a GREAT angle and pose. Looks really moody and introspective. Great work.
One quick suggestion, you might want to try downloading GIMP and take a glance at some of the tutorials in the forum. I know I sometimes come across as a GIMP salesman, but especially in a serious comic, the MS PAINT gunshot effects you've used here slightly take me out of the narrative. It only takes about two minuets to whip up the kind of laser blasts Warring at Play throws around, and it really adds to the visual appeal of the comic.
Also, the second panel has a spelling error: "Wars that went ni place." I know I'm the LAST person who should be talking about spelling errors, but it does take people out of the story.
Overall, good stuff. Looking forward to your next update, because I want to know where this story goes, and that's the core goal of any photocomic.
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|07-15-2010, 10:15 AM||#9|
Join Date: Nov 2006
Collection Count: Lost count... again
Interesting. I might have to keep an eye on this comic.
|07-15-2010, 02:13 PM||#10|
Eventually I Think
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: everywhere and nowhere.
Collection Count: More than few but less than all of them
News Credits: 5
Great new series G.M
I wonder who's with Thundercracker's resistance team?