Hi this is my first comic strip and I promise it will get better
1#:Optimus gets pissed off

Optimus:Where the f#@% is jetfire with the movie designs

Jetfire: Ummmm.............. I don't think you want to see this oh and I forgot the donuts I got soy which is more helther

Optimus: Stop trying to shove that hippie crap down are throughs

Jetfire: This is bumblebee's design

Jetfire:This is Ironhide's design

Jetfire: Thats Ratchet's design
Jetfire:thats Jazz design

Jetfire:And thats you Prime
Optimus: Thats it were making are own version period but first we must destroy michael bay

 

Heres the secound comin right now
2:They find MBay

MBay:Who the f@#% are you get the f@#% out of my house

All:You should have not have f@#%ed with us know youre dead

MBay:What the f@#% are you talking about

Optimus:You screwed up transformers you prick

Mbay:Transformers is some thing I created you dip s%#^s now get out of here!
Optimus:aren't going to live any longer to screw up anything else

 

3:Ironhide the movie director!?

Ironhide:Hangover so bad gawd hey prime what are you doing

Optimus:Looking for a director for the movie where doing about us

Ironhide:I thought that jack a$$ michael bay was doing it

Optimus:We killed everyone who was working on the movie

Ironhide:All right I'll do it wheres the crew and cast

Optimus:Look around we are

Ironhide: Lets get working

 

  Nice

 

Thanks I don't have time to do more today but its gonna get funnier.

 

#1. I love how you censor fuck but don't censor prick, which can be much more offensive. If you're going to censor yourself, do it all or not at all.

#2. What the hell? Is... is there a point to this? Other than hating on the movie desgins?

#3. Your little "crusade" against Mr. Bay has been done already, and far suepriorly to this pile of crap. Please, get an original idea.

#4. In fact, go get some funny. This is not entertaining at all.

 

That time of the month for Lord Megatron  

 

Honestly, Lord Megatron's rant was funnier.

 

i really don't know what to say. so i'll say nothing. except pancakes. ill say pancakes. but as to what i think about this comic...it's best i dont speak. although it did make me chuckle.

 

 

Hey, it is a start.

 

Not funny. At all.

 

I've seen pretty dumb comics in my time, but these...aren't funny. Not even a chuckle. I'm sorry, but these comics SUCK.

 

Keep trying man 

 

is there any way we can keep the criticism constructive so that we don't make this guy feel ashamed and like nobody likes him? just because you have experience at making funnies doesnt give you the right to pass such harsh judgement. my first funnies weren't that great either, but you have to start somewhere.

quit being jerks. people on this forum are supposed to be nice to each other.

 

I like him, I just don't like his comics.

Seriously, I think the jerkness was not called for, but I completly agree.

I would suggest text bubbles for your next comic Ironhide2005. HOWEVER, I seriously doubt you have the funny "factor" that the other comic makers here do.

So, and don't take this the wrong way, but I think you should quit while your ahead.

 

Here's some constructive criticism:

I think this story would work better as a prose piece. You obviously don't have the resources to create original pics (I don't either) and the inconsistencies in the art hurt the story (G1 Cartoon Prime, to Classics Prime, to Masterpiece Prime) and seem to force jokes you might not have ordinarly used (Ironhide's hangover).

It's a good idea, and there's some good material in here to be minded, but the format you've chosen really gets in the way of it all.

 

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[see,s michal bay crying]


..............spechless   


[tied of people chewing out Bay...when they couldnt make a better movie if their life depended on it]


..... very bad taste 1/10

 

I'm with the stuffed tiger.