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Old 05-22-2013, 04:31 PM   #1
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Transformers: Spark

My transformers fanfic set in my own Transformers universe. Be warned, I'm not the best writer. Suggestions and constructive criticism welcome.
Note: I do not own Transformers or any related characters.
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Chapter 1: Chosen
GREAT LIBRARY OF IACON, IACON, CYBERTRON
The warrior crouched in the shadows of the second story of Iacon's Great Library. He looked directly forward, never diverting his gaze to glance at the huge shelves full of the glittering gold and silver of the knowledge they held for even a moment. His target was ahead, and ahead he would go.

He crept to the edge of the massive hole that allowed those in the second story to look down into into the first.He carefully peaked over, as not to be seen and studied what was below. Shelves lined with data pads and V-Sigma Canisters filled most of the room, the center had a large lighting well with a holographic fire projected inside it. Around the light, Seven rounded desks were positioned and around those thirteen chairs, two to each desk except one. The largest desk had a single chair that had its back to the warrior. In the chair, a large Red and Purple cybertronian sat with a rather fancy quill pen in hand and writing in a large book.

He scanned the old bot to be sure that it was his target. Upon varifying that it was indeed who it seemed to be, the warrior reached onto his back and grabbed a stick like device, which upon being sent a mental signal, silently extended into a bo-staff. He stood to his full height, backed away from the edge a little and took a running leap. He held his bo-staff in front of him so it would make contact with his targets skullplate before he himself did.

But moments before he succeeded in taking down the Elder, everything went horribly wrong. The chair turned around, and the seemingly old and frail bot held up the book it had been writing in, which nearly immediately projected a hard light sheild from under its cover. The bo-staffblow bounced off of the strange armor and the warrior only barely landed on its feet behind the Elder. The older bot whipped around, holding the quill pen in its right servo. The pen's "feather" projected a hard light blade and the warrior gasped in horrer as his intended victim drove the glowing blue blade through his back plating and into his spark. The old bot deactivated his blade, and the warrior fell to his hands and knees.

"Well done Smokescreen," the older bot told the warrior, offering him a servo to help him up. Smokescreen rolled onto his back and grabbed his teacher's servo.

"I lost," he stated bluntly as the Elder helped him to his feet.
"Yes, but you came closer to succeeding than you ever have before."

"I shall never be as great a warrior as you Alpha Trion," Smokescreen stated with obvious disapointment in his voice.

"On the contrary, in time you will be able to fight against more powerful bots than I, and stand victorious. Do not dispair, you will prove yourself when you are ready."

"Well he better be ready quick. The Forged are knockin' at the Decagon's maingate, it won't be long until they find their way here," a gruff, southern sounding voice responded.

Alpha Trion and Smokscreen turned to the entryway of the library, where a heavily armored mech stood with arms crossed, staring at them. His red paint was covered in dings and scratches beyond count, and one optic was dimmer than the other. Each arm had a large cannon afixed to it, and a scatter blaster was slung across his back. His name was Ironhide, first liutenant of the Wreckers.

"They're packin' Furmanite 'nades too. And on the way here I found a Autotrooper, half eaten. That can only mean one thing"

"Insecticons," Smokscreen growled.

"Exactly," Ironhide turned to Trion, "Sir, I heavily suggest that we get the Pit outta here, follow me"
The three of them rushed out of the library into the large main hall of the Iacon Arts and Science building, which housed both the Library and the Decagon. They ran down the hall until the reached the first intersection of the main hall and a secondary hall. There, five Autotroopers joined them, armed with the Antiorganic weaponry that had proven so effective against Insecticons in the past.

"You two," Ironhide pointed at two Troopers, "scout ahead, and radio me if you encounter any Forged or Insecticons"

"Yes sir," the troopers said in unison before dashing down the hall to the next intersection.
One trooper radioed all clear, and the rest of the party moved to his position. The other continued on to the next intersectoions, checking for enemies.

"Clear......Clear......Clear......Cleeeaaaaahhhh!" the trooper screamed as a powerful Furmanite blast explosively neutralised all the Energon in his frame.

"Ah frag!" Ironhide shouted, raising his cannons to aim at the supports of the last intersection the trooper had checked before his demise. The five remaining Troopers did the same,"Fire!"
The Troopers and Ironhide all fired, the lasers and missiles streaking towards the supports. An Insecticon and two Forged turned the corner and took aim at the Autobots. Ironhide's Missiles made contact, and the supports cracked and a large section of the roof fell into the hall, smashing the Decepticon's into scrap.

"That will hold their comrades off for a few minutes, hopefully long enough for the two of ya to escape. Go down this side hallway to the right. It leads to the main hangar. In the hanger you will find a Wrecker dropship, take it and get the scrap away from here. Iacon is under attck, so don't evn think about landin' 'til ya get to someplace that ain't under Con control."
Alpha Trion stroked his beard for a moment an then asked, "What about you commander?"

"Me and the boys are gonna hold the Pit spawned bugs off long enough for ya to escape," Ironhide saluted, "Its been nice servin' with ya Sir. Now go!"
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Old 05-22-2013, 04:43 PM   #2
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Ooh, pretty good, Lego! I liked Alpha Trion and Smoke's brief training and banter (based on TFP, I presume?) and Ironhide is just awesome as ever. Screw enemy forces attacking, he'll take them all on! Very good

My only recommendation is some more spacing, but otherwise, a nice read. Good one, Shokwave
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Old 05-22-2013, 05:07 PM   #3
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Thanks for the input, Meta. I wasn't exactly sure of the best spacing, but double spaces from now on.
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Old 05-22-2013, 05:12 PM   #4
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No problem at all, my friend
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This is good...........you may..........continue
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Old 05-22-2013, 08:17 PM   #6
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Thanks Meta and RoadRage. I have hopefully fixed the spacing issue.
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Old 05-23-2013, 09:08 AM   #7
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Ok, here's part two.
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Ironhide watched Alpha Trion and Smokecreen run down the hallway, hopefully to safety.

"May Primus be with you," Ironhide muttered, "May Primus be with us all."

He turned to the five Troopers and pointed at the rubble pile keeping the Cons at bay, "As soon as those aft-hats come through there, we'll be in the fight of our lives. So look lively, prep your guns, get your 'nades, and kiss your aft goodbye."

Ironhide turned and aimed both of his arm mounted cannons at the barricade of metal and stone, the Troopers did the same. They stood there, listening intently to the sounds of the Insecticons digging on the other side. Finally, after a tense few minutes of waiting, the first Insecticon broke through. All five Autotroopers fired, but their shots did little to harm the beasts. Ironhide fired his missiles and they blasted the first Insecticon to oblivion.

Soon two more broke through, along with a third ariving from the first one's hole. Ironhide was able to take out one, but one of the other two transformed into robot mode and grabbed an Autotrooper in each hand. The other three Troopers fired on it, to no avail, and it bit the head off of one of its unfortunate captives, and ripped the other in two. While they had been attacking that one, the third crept around to behind Ironhide. Ironhide had actually been following its every move, and when it charged him he dodged it easily. It barreled along, taking out a single Autotrooper, before burying its beetle mode horn in the spark of the other Insecticon. Ironhide sneered and let loose a volley of missiles that obliterated both cons entirely.

Ironhide's cannons, both out of ammo, retracted into his forearms and he pulled his scatter blaster from its back-mounted holster. He and the two remaining Troopers pointed their weapons at the holes in the rubble, waiting for what would come next. A pair of blaster bolts flew from hole and struck the Troopers in their heads. Three Forged marched into the room and were greeted by a blast from Ironhide's blaster. Two fell dead, and the third's crimson visor went blank.

"Reforged," it moaned in it's mechanical tone. It's visor reignited electric blue, the exact same shade as Ironhide's scatter blaster fire. Ironhide shot twice more, but the lasers did nothing. Ironhide growled and threw the gun to the ground.

"Huh, I suppose we'll have ta do this the old fashioned way then," He rushed the drone, pulling a mechanium combat knife from its sheath on his hip as he did so. The Forged drone fired, but its laser rifle lacked the punch to pierce Ironhide's armor, and the Autobot reached it none the worse for ware. The drone rose its arms to shield itself and Ironhide batted away the offending apendages before plunging the jagged, rusty blade into its spark.

The next trio came in, and their visors were already blue. They unloaded towards Ironhide who dodged or took their shots with little detriment to himself. Then one got a lucky shot to Ironhide's face, the Bot fell to one knee clutching his face and the Forged surrounded him.

He looked up, "Fell for it!" He rapidly stood and sliced the throat of one drone, swiveled around and tossed the blade into the neck of another. The third attempted to restrain him, but Ironhide broke free of his grip, whipped around, grabbing the drone's face and crushing it into a ball of scrapmetal as he did so.

"Aw, they're all gone. And just when I was startin' ta have fun," Ironhide stated with mock disappointment. Ironhide turned towards where the barricade was as a massive explosion sounded from that direction. The rubble was scattered throughout the intersection and a large, purple bot with a massive cannon for his left arm, and a single sulfur yellow optic stood in the place where the barricade had been moments before.

"Calling a battle for your life 'fun' is not what I would call logical," The large bot stated in a deep, emotionless voice, "but if fighting for your very spark entertains you," The freak rose his cannon to aim at Ironhide, "Allow me to heighten your enjoyment."



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ENTER SHOCKWAVE!!!!................
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Ironhide is so hardcore. One Insecticon shrugs off the firepower of five troopers. One Ironhide just blows it up and kills a few more for good measure.

AND SHOCKWAVE. Logic this, logic that, time to kick Ironhide's ass! This should be good

Good work on the improved spacing, my friend. Liking this so far!
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Old 05-23-2013, 02:51 PM   #10
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Very well versed, my friend
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