Knightfall

Discussion in 'Transformers Fan Fiction' started by Ironhide1706, Dec 29, 2012.

  1. Ironhide1706

    Ironhide1706 Elessar Telcontar

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    Thank you guys. My apologies for the delay, I've taken a while to decide where I want this to go. I'm very happy with my decision, and I hope you will be too! For those who have read some of my other stories, you may recognise where I'm going here...
     
  2. JackWheel

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    Can't wait to see how the next chapter plays out! Great job as always :) 
     
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    Rewind Eject Bluestreak 's #2 Fan

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    Bludgeon and Mindwipe's lair I'd wager. It seems like Optimus has grown since Ironhide saw him last; in more than one way.Really glad the gangs back together. Red Alert and Scavenger could make for cool new guys too. I can't wait to see how everything unfolds.
     
  4. Ironhide1706

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    Thanks, I have a new update! Let's see if Rewind was right! ;) 
     
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    I decided to post two updates at once to make up for lost time. Enjoy guys! As always, I love to hear your comments, but your critiques are just as important.
     
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    I enjoyed the update! :) 

    But a critique I have is to not make the updates too long, because my attention seems to fade away from the story. Not sure if its just me or if other people get that feeling when reading fan fictions.
     
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    Still seems to be moving in a good direction. So, Megatron is still leader of the decepticons (ok, was technically). I thought he was as highly ranked as Optimus at first for some reason. Still, this is a really innovative origin for him. Fight scenes are still your specialty I believe. I wonder if being the Decepticon founder is enough to earn that much ire from Ironhide or if you plan on something deeper happening here.

    I get that feeling sometimes Jackwheel, but I feel that these are good sized updates. Personally, I would suggest breaking up the updates by posts more often; maybe every time. That way, we don't have to scroll down so much to get to the new stuff. Also, I feel certain inbetween parts are rushed such as how Optimus and Megatron appear to have become so close so fast. I know there was a timeskip, but it still strikes me odd reading that they became each other's best friends between two chapters. Might just be another thing of my personal taste though.
     
  8. Ironhide1706

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    I really appreciate the comments guys. I will try to keep updates around the 1000 word mark, and I will start putting them in separate posts. I totally understand Rewind, and I will try to flesh things out more often now. For the time being, enjoy the bridge to what I hope will be an exciting adventure.


    “Tha-that may be so, Ironhide, but I can honestly say that he has changed! Believe me!” Optimus stammered. The pain from his wounds and the confirmation of a truth he had been dreading was becoming too much. “He has saved my life more times than I can remember. He just saved all of our lives!”

    “He found you in the Shards, didn’t he? He was the one who looked after you for all those years!” Ironhide demanded.

    “Yes” Optimus answered simply.

    Before Ironhide could reply, the tower doors were blown off their hinges, and MIndwipe shot out in his powerful bat form. His wings flapped furiously and jets on his back kicked in. But despite all of that, he was still no match for the speed of Megatron. Using boosters on his soles and on his back, Megatron closed in on Mindwipe. He clutched his two swords, and Optimus noticed that they were stained with glowing orange Energon.

    Midnwipe shrieked in fear, something that he had never felt before. Megatron flew behind him like a meteor speeding through the night sky. Megatron reached Mindwipe and cut one of his jets off. Mindwipe panicked and spiraled out of control. He tried to level out, but Megatron simply hovered and watched, then threw one of his swords at Mindwipe. The blade sunk straight into the Decepticon’s body, and he dropped like a fly back down to the surface. He crashed into the ground just outside the fence and a fiery inferno engulfed him. His shrieks of pain were abruptly silenced as the flames incinerated him alive.

    Megatron disengaged his boosters and free fell to the crash site. He landed heavily, but showed no sign of injury. Without any sign of fear, Megatron walked straight into the licking fires. A couple seconds passed, then he returned with his sword. He sheathed it and its twin, then slowly walked over to where the Autobots were watching in awe. The blaze behind him cast Megatron into shadow, showing only his flickering silhouette and the fiery red of his eyes. For the first time, Optimus fully realized his size and formidability.

    Megatron reached the Autobots and, completely ignoring the others, knelt beside Optimus. Megatron’s armour showed no sign of damage, not even a scratch.

    “How are you feeling?” Megatron asked calmly.

    “Better. Red Alert is a superb medic!” Optimus looked at the Autobot doctor, who was working on his abdomen wound, desperately avoiding eye contact with Megatron.

    “I have no doubts.” Megatron smiled warmly. The image didn’t fit the chaotic and unstoppable power he had just demonstrated. “Do not fear me, Autobot, I mean none of you any harm.”

    “That’s certainly changed a lot since we last saw one another!” Ironhide shouted fiercely.

    Megatron looked at him with a calm, but still intimidating, look. “I see you have gotten to telling Optimus about my past, Ironhide.”

    “How do you two know one another?” Optimus questioned, trying to avoid the daggers they were staring at each other.

    “Megatronus was the one who destroyed the rest of my squad. He was the one who single-handedly took out the Old Wreckers.” Ironhide said angrily.

    “Evidently, I missed one.” Megatron replied coldly. “It is Megatron now, Autobot, address me as such. My new name joins my new outlook on life. The direction the Decepticons now take is far from the one I envisioned millennia ago, and I would do everything in my power to fix this change.”

    “But you haven’t been. You spent every damn year since Galvatron mutinied brooding in those wilds! Why haven’t you taken him down yet?” Ironhide stood up sharply, and Megatron did so too. The height difference made Ironhide’s move pointless.

    “Galvatron has grown in power since that day, and he continues to, and he will forever; until the connection is severed!” Megatron explained. “Do you know why the Decepticons have become unstoppable, Ironhide? Do you know why scum like the ones I just killed are allowed to thrive? Because it is no ordinary power that is leading them! It is the power of a god!”

    “Dark Energon may be rumoured to be the blood of Unicron, but that doesn’t mean Galvatron is god-like.” Ironhide pointed out. “You’re just too scared and too cowardly to do anything about it!”

    Megatron grabbed Ironhide by the throat and lifted him to eye level. Ironhide’s soft blue eyes met Megatron’s terrifying red ones, and he cringed.

    “Listen to me, and listen well. I was mutinied upon because the will of Unicron has taken over Galvatron. He is nothing but a puppet and a slave to the Dark God now, thanks to his extended use of Dark Energon. I banned the substance from use, I believed that I had had all of it destroyed! But yet Galvatron found some, and he has been communicating with Unicron’s mind, wherever it lives now, because Unicron’s life force flows through him!” Megatron did not raise his voice, but it was cold enough to freeze the fires that still flickered behind him. “The only way to stop Galvatron and the Decepticons is to bring an even more powerful piece into play, one that utilizes the strength of Unicron’s counterpart. Do you want peace on Cybertron, Autobot?”

    “Of course I do.” Ironhide said quietly.

    “Then you know exactly what must be done.” Megatron looked at him meaningfully. “The time has come for the return of the Prime.”

    “He is in hiding.” Ironhide protested.

    “No, he is dead. I should know, I was the one responsible. He stood in the way of the peace, so I eliminated him. That is not relevant right now though.” Megatron explained shamelessly.

    “Not relevant?” Ironhide shouted furiously. “Because of you we have no chance against Galvatron!”

    “We still have a perfectly good chance, because the perfect successor sits right beside us.” Megatron looked down at Optimus, who nodded.

    “Optimus? He may be remarkably good-hearted, but he is still just a child for Primus’s sake!” Ironhide looked apologetically at Optimus.

    “This is for the sake of Primus. We need to get Optimus down into the Core and find the Matrix so that he can end this darkness for all of us!” Megatron insisted.

    “Optimus, you can’t honestly believe him!” Ironhide said.

    “I do, Ironhide.” Optimus replied seriously.

    “Fine. But you aren’t taking him alone, I’m not leaving his side.” Ironhide said to Optimus.

    “Neither shall I.” The rest of the Autobots agreed.

    “So be it.” Megatron dropped Ironhide. “I suggest getting a good rest whilst you can. The journey to the Core of Cybertron is a perilous one, and we leave as soon as everyone is able.”
     
  9. Rewind Eject

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    Unicron, already? Your universe is getting so big, that I have no idea where you'll be going next. :lol  (that's a good thing mind you):D 
     
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    Yay DarkEN!
     
  11. JackWheel

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    Here we go! The story is really starting to pick up! Can't wait to see where it's headed :)