i know you wasnt talking to me, i was pointing out that i agree with that rule (as i was told bee765 earllllier (before the urle was made) that to reivew EP when i was doen with it)

 

 
Well, keep up the good work, I guess.  

 

http://www.tfw2005.com/boards/trans...r-dimensions-guest-starring-transformers.html
By: eagc7

Grammar and Spelling:
Mostly okay, although it has it's fair share of grammar and spelling issues, and that does draw you away from the moment.
I spent a decent amount of time repeating sentences to fix them in my head.

Story:
Okay, so the story follows the recent TV special Disney movie "Phineas and Ferb: Across the 2nd Dimension", in which Phineas and Ferb, along with their pet Platypus Perry, traveled into an alternate dimension ruled by the evil Doctor Doofenshmirtz.

In this story, that picks up shortly after the special, the "real" Doctor Doofenshmirtz, is once again plotting with his latest device, the "Other-Dimension-Inator".
This time, he teams up with Spongebob's antagonist Plankton, and the two go on a quest to gather villains from the vast videogame/TV universe, such as Bowser from Mario, Dr. Eggman from Sonic the Hedgehog, Shen from Kung Fu Panda 2, and many more.
They're going for multiversal-conquest, and only the heroes of the respective franchises can stop them.

Pacing:
The story often feels dull due to the fact it doesn't include a lot interesting moments. It's just a lot of conversation followed by a cool action scene or something.
Nonetheless, pacing isn't too slow, and the story does have its appealing points, pacing-wise.
The characters felt natural almost all the way through, and fans of the characters in this story (And there is a handfull of them) will appreciate how they have been treated.

Personal Notes:
None

Overall: 6/10
Pros:
-A lot of characters from many franchises
-Fits in well with the movies/games/series the characters come from

Cons:
-Boring at times
-Grammar and spelling need serious work

 

thanks for reviewing  

it also takes place right after the Spongebob film too, for let u know  

 

Can my "wwlcome back to TFW" present be a review of some of my fictions?

 

Dude, I got a little pissed off when I heard you were banned. So yes.
Just say which fiction.

 

People get angry when I leave? That makes me so happy! *sniff*

How about either The Blood Races, Part 1, or...A Quick Fix? Either or.

 

Okay. I'll read both,  

 

Would someone mind reviewing my old one-shot, Sentinel?

 

Could you reveiw my fanfic "Fall of the Action Masters"?

I'd like to know what I could improve on.  

 

Sure thing. Your Sentinel will be reviewed by Bumblebee765.

Yeah, Shatter, once I get through with Blindside's two projects, I'll review it.

 

Hey guys.
Sorry for the long wait, I've been slightly busy lately, but I just stopped to say I'm still here, and I'll review Blindside's fanfics sometime the coming week.

 

I know what you mean.

2500 words!

 

I know, right? That guy's nuts!  

 

Well considering the first part of his username...

 

Well yeah, that kinda gives it away.

 

Who are you guys talking about?

 

Me. Don't worry, I'm sure it won't interfere with him doing your review. Among other things...

 

http://www.tfw2005.com/boards/transformers-fan-fiction/596457-wheeljacks-travels.html
Chapter: A Quick Fix
By: LCDR Blindside
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Grammar and Spelling:
Well written, all in all. Not much to say besides that. Didn't spot any sort of issue.

Story:
The story of this chapter takes place directly (Or shortly after) the episode Triage.

Wheeljack is still fixing his Jackhammer. Thinking and remembering tales and characters from his past and present. For the sake of spoilers,

*Entries of this fiction are very short, thus any piece of detail can be considered a spoiler.

Pacing:
Well, I'll just pick right up saying, it's short. It's very short. Not necessarily in a bad way, but don't expect more that 1-2 minutes before having to turn to the next page.
The flow and pacing, on the other hand, are actually pretty good. I liked reading about Wheeljack's thoughts. Prime Wheeljack is a presonal favorite of mine, and this fiction definately delivers his best.

Personal Notes:
Once again, it's short. Despite being supposed to be short, I just felt like I shouldn't be reviewing a single entry simply because there's nearly nothing to review. Upon further reading, I found myself quite interested, and I will be reading more once there is.

Overall: 7/10
Pros:
-Pretty awesome story, as a fan of Wheeljack I was drawn into a great story.
-Very appealing writing style and grammar.

Cons:
-Short, therefore causes the interest to wear out.

(My word to you, Blindside, try your best and make it a tad longer. Doesn't have to be much, but try and add some more meat inside. I will be more than happy to review later entries without having to list "Short" as a con.)

Next, I'll be reviewing another entry from this fiction, The Blood Races, Part 1