Transformers: Birth of New Heroes

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  1. Arenova

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    Hi everyone! This is my first time writing so could you give me good criticisms about it. This may be a bit different than some stories since it will be told from a first person perspective of one of my new characters whose name will be revealed. I can edit this first part so tell me how I can improve it. I hope you enjoy!

    I only saw light at first. Then I quickly realized that I was alive. I didn't know who I was and where I was but I couldn’t get over the fact I was alive. I looked around me and I saw many other pods identical to mine. In the pods the people were all identical and had a symbol I recognized. The insignia of the autobot which I remembered I was apart of. Suddenly the ceiling above me began to shudder as if there was something was stomping on it. I jumped out of the way as the roof collapsed into a red sky. I saw one large, beefy shape standing above me. He leapt in front of me causing the floor to crack. I noticed a different insignia on him that was different from mine. A blade was drawn and I was stabbed by a bright, glowing blade. Great way to start a life. He then grabbed me by the head and threw me into a wall. I didn’t remember what happened after that but I awoke to find that I blew a hole in the guys chest. I freaked and jumped out of the hole. The paradise I thought I’d find was a war torn city. I saw the dying and dead everywhere. But somewhere deep inside me I knew I had to find a way to survive.