Your art skills are good but I think your storytelling needs some work. I have absolutely no idea what happened in that page. Prime notices Sami. Prime gets kissed. His eyes freak out. Megatron stands there. Prime and Sami live happily ever after? How did that happen? Edit in - Okay now I see that Megatron, who is near the bottom of the page, is shooting Prime in the first strangely shaped panel. One of the old comic book artists rules is usually not to break the panel's frame unless it really adds to the story. In this case I think it takes away.
You're absolutely right about the storytelling. I was trying to fit as much as possible into one page 'cause I was only being commissioned to do one page. I'd like to think of the page as being more of a pin-up, although it was definitely structured as a sequential page. I guess I was given too much creative liberties and the storytelling probably suffered for it, lol. Thanks for the feedback! For those who may be interested, I've provided a link of some of my other sequential work (a bit better in terms of storytelling but still needs improvement): http://www.tfw2005.com/boards/showthread.php?t=108005
I'm glad that you took my comments as constructive criticism. I was in sort of a mood earlier and after I reread my comments I thought they were sort of harsh.
No problem, I appreciate any kind of constructive feedback - both positive & negative - 'cause that's the only way I'll improve, thanks!
