W.a.r d.a.w.n

Discussion in 'Transformers Funnies' started by star11scream, Oct 31, 2008.

  1. star11scream

    star11scream Spoon + Star11scream

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    A war that lasted for ions has never come to a rest.

    Episode #1

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  2. Otispq

    Otispq Elocution Onymous

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    Cool beginning. just need to make the font a little bigger, it's kinda hard to read.

    By the way, board rules specify 300 High x 500 wide x 40kb size on your signature pics. You might want to change yours before mods simply delete it and replace it with what I just said.

    Happy Halloween! can't wait to see what's next!
     
  3. Dremare

    Dremare Had an Epiphany

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    I agree with everything Otispq has said. But otherwise a good comic.
     
  4. Anodythe

    Anodythe Well-Known Member

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    Wow! Congrats on the great begining! You've rerally peaked my interest. Can't wait for the next instalment:popcorn 
     
  5. StarFire_MK2

    StarFire_MK2 'Till All are One! TFW2005 Supporter

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    Yes. Can't wait to see more though.
     
  6. star11scream

    star11scream Spoon + Star11scream

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    Episode 2

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  7. Spoiler

    Spoiler Autobot Spoiler

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    A lot better now that it has larger text. Couldn't really read it before hand. It is coming along nice.
     
  8. Mastergeorge

    Mastergeorge I should burn my wallet.

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    Pretty good. I like this one better than your first.
     
  9. Otispq

    Otispq Elocution Onymous

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    Nice effects! I really like that trapezoidal(?) lens flare, that's cool. the negative effects are different also, but work well. You could use some more light, unless that's the look your going for, in which case its just fine.

    Keep 'em coming!
     
  10. star11scream

    star11scream Spoon + Star11scream

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    I wanted it to br dark
     
  11. Autovolt 127

    Autovolt 127 Get In The Titan, Prime!

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    not bad
     
  12. Superquad7

    Superquad7 We're only human. Super Mod

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    This looks really cool, but (as it's been mentioned) the font is too small and hard to read. I'd simply suggest choosing a different font that is not as narrow and upping the font size :thumb 
     
  13. Fez Findie

    Fez Findie Well-Known Member

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    Hey... that negative effect is actually quite clever and might be somethin' that people will remember this comic from in a good way :)  Kinda like a trademark or so, if used right :) 

    Also, ya really do give off the feelin' of just somethin' big havin' happenin' and now people tryin' to react to it as quickly as possible and all that.
     
  14. ShadowDragon

    ShadowDragon R to the D to the D yo.

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    Cool. Good start. :) 
     
  15. Grimlock_13

    Grimlock_13 Reformed Geewunner

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    Very cool! The larger text in the second update was much easier to read. I'll look forward to your next update!
     
  16. StarFire_MK2

    StarFire_MK2 'Till All are One! TFW2005 Supporter

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    Nice second update.
    My BT Sunstreaker doen't have the black racing stripes--did you do those yourself, or were there different versions of him made?
     
  17. star11scream

    star11scream Spoon + Star11scream

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    You own a BT Sunstreaker, I own a AT[Alternators] Sunstreaker
     
  18. Coolhand

    Coolhand Spiff's Stunt Double

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    Nice use of the lens flare, here, especially in the frame where Dropshot rams Sunstreaker-really felt like a good, crunching impact.:thumbs2:  Also nice speed effects on the alts.
    The font size does need to go up a bit though.

    And yeah, Alt Sunstreaker comes with his racing stripes pre-made, plus a bit more red on his arms, I think.
     
  19. star11scream

    star11scream Spoon + Star11scream

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    Episode 3

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  20. Otispq

    Otispq Elocution Onymous

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    Awesome fight scene, but it took three tries for me to read the black lettering in the first panel. And man, that is some cool funky shaggy pillow things!
     

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