Transformers: Secrets

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  1. Ravenxl7

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    This is my fan-fic about my custom character (Raven-XL7) who is basically supposed to be me if I was a Transformer. This first chapter is to basically introduce him and the story. For those who haven't been in my thread about the custom I'm planning, here is the bio I came up for him, and you can click on my sig to take you to my thread where I first posted it. Thanks for looking, and for any comments I get.

    One of the few Autobots to be released from the Cybertron Static Spark Ward, Raven-XL7 has been an outcast his whole life. Once the leader of a top-secret special-ops team, he was built with some of the most advanced weaponry and stealth technology known to cybertronian scientists. He's now one of the few Autobots still living in the ruins of old Cybertron, where he has few friends. Due to complications after what is widely known as an "accident", Raven-XL7 has many mental issues. The major one commonly known to humans as "Avoident Personality disorder", is the reason for his isolated habits, and his coldness to fellow Autobots. Because of his very anti-social tendencies, Raven-XL7 has been misunderstood by many of his Autobot comrades, and has been shunned by many of those he would have worked with in the past. There have been a couple Autobots who have been able to befriend him, but even then, they don't know him as well as they think they do. After the multiple years he spent in the special case's wing, and then many years after that in his isolation, he has kept the badges he wore as an Autobot warrior, and the prototype stamps that he gained when he was first built. Raven-XL7 would be a valuable ally to the Autobot Army if others would take him seriously, and would take the time to gain his trust, for he is one of few Cybertronians that could provide valuable info on certain powerful Decepticons, even if he doesn't realize it himself.

    Ch. 1- The Beginning

    In a remote military lab, two brothers argue over the newest Autobot Special Forces project, and the bots that have contributed towards it.

    Jetfire- “I honestly don’t see how you can trust him. Especially when Prime told you how important this project was to the cause.”

    Skyefire- “If I’ve told you once, I’ve told you a thousand times brother, I don’t need a reason to trust him.”

    Jetfire- “Even after he asked you to take all the credit for designing all three of the new bots, and to keep his existence a secret? Sounds really shifty to me.”

    Skyefire- “Well, what Prime doesn’t know, won’t hurt him.”

    Jetfire- “It might not hurt him, but it could still hurt the rest of us.”

    Skyefire- “Trust me, I’ve already looked over the schematics. Everything should go according to plan.”

    Jetfire- “Whatever. I’m just glad that when this whole thing goes wrong, I won’t be the one responsible for it.”

    Skyefire- “You mean IF something goes wrong. Anyway, I’ve got to get back to work. Ratchet will be here soon, and I still need to finish up the designs for this EMP blaster.”

    Jetfire- “ Oh yeah, I forgot. Your little friend did let you do the majority of the designing for the one bot. That’s the one you went to the designs our ancestor created for inspiration. Not sure why though, as they were deemed a failure.”

    Skyefire- “You’re forgetting that the Dinobots weren’t a complete failure. They’re still considered a valuable piece to the cause.”

    Jetfire- “Yeah, you have somewhat of a good point there, but they still can’t be controlled. At least you’ve been able to fix the problems for this project.”

    Buzzzzzz(sound of door about to open)

    Skyefire- “That should be Ratchet now. I was hoping he would give me a little more time on this, so I could double check some things, but as I’ve already delayed this twice, I shouldn’t hold things up any longer.”

    The door to the lab opens up, allowing Ratchet to enter. He has a slightly impatient look to him, as if he’s done this too many times before.

    Ratchet- “Skyefire, are you ready? I’m not sure Prime will be able to handle another delay with this project.”

    Skyefire- “Yeah, everything is set to go as planned. I just finished the plans on the EMP blaster.”

    Jetfire- “Well, good luck to you two. I should go get some work done on my part of this whole plan. After all, I am the one in charge of training these bots in combat once they’re built.”

    All three bots leave the lab. Jetfire on his way to his private bunker, and Skyefire and Ratchet on their way to another lab to begin work on building three new Autobot warriors. When they finally got to their destination, Wheeljack and Sentinel Prime were already there waiting for them.

    Sentinel Prime- “Finally. I was beginning to think that there was going to be yet another delay.”

    Ratchet- “No sir, we decided to take some secret passageways, so that there would be less of a chance that the Decepticons could steal the plans from us, sir.”

    Wheeljack- “Let’s just hope that this goes better than the last time something like this was attempted. We don’t need any more primitives running around.”

    Skyefire- “Trust me. We’ll get the good attributes of the Dinobots, without the negatives. That and I’ve only included some of their aspects into one of the three bots.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Let’s all hope so. If something goes wrong with this, then I’m not sure what we’ll do next. The sooner we get this done and over with, the sooner we can end this war. I’ll be in my office if I’m needed. I have some work of my own dealing with this project and the future of our kind.”

    Securing the lab on his way out, Sentinel Prime leaves the other bots to their work.

    Wheeljack- “Well, we might as well get started. After all, we have a lot of work to do.”

    Skyefire- “Yeah, let’s start out with the two smaller ones, as they have a lot in common structurally. We’ll save the leader for last.”

    The three bots started working on the project, not knowing the affect that it would later have on the war effort. Meanwhile, in Sentinel Prime’s office waits a patient soldier, unsure why he was called there. Sentinel Prime walks in and immediately greets him, as if to a son.
    Sentinel Prime- “Orion Pax. I’m pleased to see you got my message to meet me. Please, sit down, there are some very important matters we need to discuss.”

    Orion Pax- “Thank you sir. I’m confused as to why you’ve requested me. I’m just a simple foot soldier, and there are surely bound to be many more qualified bots for whatever you have brought me here for.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Does that mean you are unwilling to help me then?”

    Orion Pax- “No sir. I’m just not sure that I’m the best bot to help you with something as important as your message implied.”

    Sentinel Prime- “No, you are the most qualified bot for the job. That is, if you’re still willing to take it.”

    Orion Pax- “Of course I am sir. I wouldn’t dream of turning down an important job from you sir. Whatever it is, I’ll gladly do it.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Good. There is one last thing before I can tell you what the mission is. This is a completely top secret and very important mission. Thus you cannon tell anyone about it. Not even your best friend Dion, who will be working with you, but will not know the true nature of what you are doing. Is that clear?”

    Orion Pax- “Yes sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Very well. I’ll get straight to the point. Your mission is to train a new Special Forces group that is currently being built as we speak. You will be training them in combat, teamwork, and survival skills alongside Jetfire, Skyefire, Elita-1, and your friend Dion. There are aspects of their purpose that will remain a secret from you, but you must understand that is the best for security. If the Decepticons found out about this project, it would ruin any affect it would have on the war effort. Do you understand what I’m asking you to do?”

    Orion Pax- “Yes sir. You’ve made it perfectly clear. I will do my best to do this for you.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Good. Now, if you will excuse me, I have yet more work to do on my own. Thank you for seeing me today.”

    Orion Pax leaves the office and heads back to his bunker to try and fully process what he’s going to be doing. Several weeks go by with little or no mishaps. The three new bots are built to specifications laid out months in advance, and with some of the most advanced technology known to cybertronian scientists. The three tired bots finally put their tools down as two more bots walk in.

    Skyefire- “They’re finished sir. All that’s left to do is put sparks in them.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Good. A little behind schedule, but you’ve been able to make up a little bit of time in the production stage. This is Orion Pax by the way. He’s going to be one of the bots training the team.”

    Skyefire- “Let’s hope that he gets along well with my brother. He’s almost always had a problem with working on a team.”

    Wheeljack- “They’re all hooked up and ready sir.”

    Ratchet- “Yeah, we’ve got everything set up like specified sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Good work. Let’s finally bring these bots online and introduce them to the world they’re going to help protect.”

    Sentinel Prime activates the device attached to all three of the bots lying on the lab tables, thus giving each as park, and waking up three new Autobot warriors. The three new bots sit up as Wheeljack, Ratchet, and Skyefire detach them from the device and Sentinel Prime greets them for the first time in their lives.

    Sentinel Prime- “Welcome my fellow Autobots. As you know, I am Sentinel Prime, your leader. You know this and many other things because you have been programmed with a certain amount of knowledge. These three bots here are Wheeljack, Ratchet, and Skyefire, your builders. Skyefire was also the bot who designed you. This here is Orion Pax, who is going to be one of your trainers. If you have any questions, feel free to ask these three. Orion Pax and myself have some work elsewhere to attend to, but we will meet again.

    Sentinel Prime and Orion Pax exit the lab, leaving the newly created Autobot warriors with their creators.

    Wheeljack- “Sorry to be leaving so soon after finishing, but I’ve got some business of my own that needs attending to.

    Wheeljack leaves the lab and goes to his bunker.

    Skyefire- “So, any questions guys?”

    Ratchet- “Anything at all?”

    Raven-XL7- “What’s our purpose in life?”

    Skyefire- “Well…that’s a little tough to answer at the moment. That’s something you’ll learn as time goes by.”

    Over the next couple of weeks the three bots bonded and got to know each other so well, they were like brothers. It was easier for Warpdrive and Thunderbolt to relate to each other, as they were based off of the same structure type, but Raven was able to relate to his teammates over time. Only a month after their activation they were ready for combat training.

    Orion Pax- “Hello. My name is Orion Pax, and I will be one of your combat trainers along with Jetfire, Skyefire, and Dion. I will also be one of your counselors along with Elita-1. It will be our job to prepare you for your top-secret missions. Specifically, I will be here to overlook your training and to make sure everything goes according to the plan.”

    Jetfire- “As your commanding officer, it’ll be my job to train you in all forms of combat, so that if you need to face any Decepticons, you’ll be able to handle the situation.”

    Skyefire- “ As one of the scientists who created you, it’ll be my job to train you to repair yourselves and fellow teammates in several different situations.”

    Dion- “As requested by Prime, I will be training you to survive in several situations where you would need to resort to primitive means of survival.”

    Elita-1- “As a specialist in cybernetic analysis, it’ll be my job to prepare you for the mental strain of combat and many other situations that you may run into during your missions.”

    Orion Pax- “Now that you know what we’ll be doing for the next several years, are there any questions before we begin?”

    Raven-XL7- “I have one sir. Why have my teammates and myself been kept a secret from the rest of our Autobot brethren?”

    Orion Pax- “Raven, I’m sorry to say this, but even I don’t know the answer to that question. Sentinel Prime has put a lot of emphasis on keeping you three a secret, but has yet to give a reason why.”

    Over the next decade the three teammates were trained in all forms of combat, taught how to repair themselves and others in several different situations, and prepared for the many possible situations they would possibly face in their future missions. They developed their several special abilities to the point of being experts in what they did. Even though they knew they would never see the Autobots that they would soon be fighting to protect, they still had each other. Which was enough for them to continue their training.

    To be continued…
     
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    It took me a while to get this chapter finished, but it's finally complete. It's a bit longer than I originally planned, but it works. Thanks for looking and for any comments I get.

    Ch. 2- Tragedy

    In a highly secretive bunker hidden deep within Cybertron command wait three bots for their first debriefing for their very first mission against the Decepticons. The leader of the group continues to pace from one end of the bunker to the other while the other two contemplate what they are going to do.

    Thunderbolt- “What if we aren’t ready for battle?”

    Warpdrive- “ We’ve been trained in every form of combat, we should be able to handle the Decepticons.”

    Thunderbolt- “I’m not so sure about that. At least you can teleport out of the way.”

    Warpdrive- “Yeah, you have a point there brother, but it’s not like we’ll be taking on the Decepticons on our own. We’ll still have each other to count on in battle. Isn’t that right Raven.”

    Raven-XL7 stops pacing, and stands silent for a second or two.

    Raven-XL7- “If Sentinel Prime believes in us, than I see no reason to doubt our ability in combat situations.”

    Thunderbolt- “I’m not so sure I trust Prime. He’s put a lot of emphasis on keeping us a secret from the rest of our Autobot brethren. It’s like there’s something about us that needs to stay a secret. Even from the bots we’re going to be protecting.”

    Warpdrive- “The whole secrecy thing is a bit weird, but if there was something odd about us, or even something wrong with us, I’m sure that Prime would have told us the minute he knew about it. Trust me brother. Everything is going to go just fine on our first mission.”

    Raven-XL7- “That reminds me. Sentinel Prime and the others should be down here in a little bit to debrief us for our first mission so that we can prepare tonight.”

    Warpdrive- “Yeah. We’ve got just enough time to get this place straitened up. I want this place to look good when they get down here. Elita-1 is coming for the debriefing right?

    Thunderbolt- “Keep it in your chase Warpdrive. You’re not her type.”

    Warpdrive- “You’re just jealous that she likes me better than you brother.”

    Raven-XL7- “Stop the bickering you two. We’ve got more important things to be doing than arguing with each other. Now lets get to work cleaning this place up. They’ll be down here in no time, and we want to look our best for Prime and the others. Oh, and Warpdrive, she is coming down with the others. She apparently wants to have a little talk with each of us individually to make sure we’re mentally prepared for our mission.”

    Warpdrive- “She probably wants to see if I’m free after the missions over.”

    Thunderbolt- “In your dreams Warpdrive. If anything she wants to tell you to stop sending her gifts all the time.”

    Warpdrive- “I’ve already told you, I’m not the one sending her those things!”

    Raven-XL7- “Both of you get to work before I put you into stasis lock. I’m not only your commander, but also your medic. I know at least 32 ways to knock both of you out before you even know what’s going on. Besides, I know the bot who’s been sending her gifts, and neither one of you could last very long against him.”

    The three bots worked on cleaning up their private bunker, while in the private office of Sentinel Prime were for bots preparing to debrief the awaiting warriors.

    Sentinel Prime- “Orion Pax, do you think that the team is ready for their first mission?”

    Orion Pax- “Yes sir. I’ve been watching over them for over a decade now sir. They are as ready as they ever will be sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “I agree Orion Pax, but what do you think Dion? You have remained silent. So very out of character for you.”

    Dion- “Sorry sir. I did not want to hinder your plans for the team sir.

    Sentinel Prime- “It’s okay Dion. Your input would not have hindered my plans, but possibly made our preparations more successful. Feel free to tell me what you think of the team, and how prepared they are for their future missions.”

    Dion- “Honestly sir, I feel that the team is not yet ready for any missions yet. Specifically any dealing with contact with the Decepticons, sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “And why do you feel that they are not ready Dion?”

    Dion- “I’m not fully sure why sir. It’s just a feeling that I have. I feel that they are not fit to be sent out yet, sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “I value your input Dion, as you have been such a great help in training the team, but I’m going to go ahead as planned. Elita-1, how have our warriors been doing with their mental status training?”

    Elita-1- “Well, sir, they’ve been doing exceptionally well. Even when it was only a month or two after being put online. They’ve each formed a unique personality that works well with the others. Raven-XL7 is the only one of the three that worries me even a little, sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “And this little worry of yours about Raven would be?”

    Elita-1- “Only that I’m not sure he’s the right bot to lead a team of warriors into battle. He’d be better suited working in a lab, like Skyefire. He has a very brilliant mind, if only he had a chance to develop it, and be able to put it to good use, sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “He might have some use in the labs later on in life, but for now he’ll have to do for the job. Any more time waiting and we might as well hand Cybertron over to the Decepticons now. Lets head down to the bunker now. It’ll take us a while to get there, as we’ll have to pass threw security. It’s a bit of a hassle, but I’d rather have to deal with it than not secure them from outsiders getting a hold of any info on them, or their top secret missions.”

    Orion Pax- “If it’s alright sir, I just have one question to ask before we leave.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Yes Orion?”

    Orion Pax- “Why have we been keeping them secret this whole time? Don’t you think it would raise morale if the troops and civilians knew that you were doing something to further aid the battle against the Decepticons, sir?”

    Sentinel Prime- “Well, Orion, I’m afraid I can’t tell you that. All I can say is that if word got out about them, that anything they would do in their missions would be rendered futile by the Decepticons.”

    Dion- “If I’m interpreting what you’re saying correctly, you mean there are Decepticon spies in the Autobot ranks?”

    Sentinel Prime- “There are suspicions, yes, but I can not deny nor can I support any rumors of Decepticon spies penetrating our ranks. Now, if you three are ready, and done asking questions, we should leave. We’re going to be late as it is.”

    The four bots headed down to the secure bunker, where the three warriors just finished fixing it up for their guests.

    Warpdrive- “There, everything’s perfect. Elita-1 should be impressed with how clean and organized my section of the bunker is.”

    Thunderbolt- “Brother, she’s turned you down ever single time you’ve tried. That and your section doesn’t look as nearly clean as mine does.”

    Raven-XL7- “You two do realize that there is no difference between either one of your guy’s sections? The only reason mine is any different is because I’m the leader of this team, and the medic.”

    Warpdrive- “You’re also larger than both of us.”

    Raven-XL7- “That’s true too, but that only accounts for the larger size of the furniture in my section, not the added equipment.”

    Buzzzzzz(sound of door about to open)

    Raven-XL7- “That should be them, so let’s stop the pointless arguing and get into position.”

    The three warriors get into position in front of their individual bunks as the door opens allowing the four bots to enter the bunker.

    Raven-XL7- “Welcome, sir. We’ve been awaiting yours and the others arrival for our first debriefing.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Thank you Raven. I’m glad to say that you and your teammates are finally ready for what you’ve been waiting for many years now. We might as well get down to business then.”

    Raven-XL7- “Yes, we do have much to discuss. Let’s move into the conference room, so that we all can sit down. I’m sure it’s been a bit of a hassle getting down here from your office, sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “No problem at all Raven. I wouldn’t have set up the security precautions if I wasn’t then willing to go threw them to get to you and your teammates.”

    All seven bots enter the conference room, where each of them sits down.

    Sentinel Prime- “As this is your very first mission, we are not expecting you to run into any Decepticons. It’s a basic mission, in which you will find something of importance and bring it back here for analysis. There is a possibility that you could run into a Decepticon or two, but all our sources show that this should run smoothly, and withought any contact with the enemy. What you will be retrieving is what we believe to be an old data processor for the Decepticons. As they are a very careless group, they have left it, and any information it contains, siting in the ruins of what used to be one of their bases. I will be giving each one of you a file containing all the information you need to retrieve it. It may not seem like it now, but this mission is extremely important to the Autobot cause. Your missions from now on out will continue to get tougher and more dangerous, and possibly even more important than even this mission. And now, Elita-1 will be talking to each one of you individually to make sure that you are mentally ready for this and future missions.”
    Elita-1- “Thank you sir. I’ll start with the brothers first, as it’ll take less time to check you two. Warpdrive, if you’ll follow me to the next room, I’ll begin with you.”

    The two bots left for the next room, one with a huge smile on their face. It didn’t take too long to check the two brothers out. Both were properly prepared for the mental stress that their missions would give them, though Warpdrive came out of his session a little disappointed.

    Elita-1- “Ok, now it’s your turn Raven. If you will follow me to the next room, we can begin your session.”

    Raven-XL7 gets up from his seat and follows Elita-1 into the room.

    Elita-1- “Ok, this shouldn’t take too long, as I just want to do some scans of your processors.”

    Elita-1 hooks up Raven to a scanner, and scans all of his processors to check for any bugs, or bits of random code that could complicate things for him while on a mission.

    Elita-1- “Well, everything appears to be ok. Before I ask any questions of you are there any you would like to ask yourself? Anything that’s been on your mind that could hinder your ability to perform during your missions?”

    Raven-XL7- “Well, there have been a couple things bothering me, but they don’t really make any sense.”

    Elita-1- “It’s ok. I’m not going to make fun of you if you have a weird problem. At least you’re not arrogant like Warpdrive.”

    Raven-XL7- “That’s the thing though, I have nothing in common with my teammates. Warpdrive and Thunderbolt are basically twins. Sure they have separate personalities and abilities, but they can work better with each other than with me. It’s like I’m an outcast in my own team.”

    Elita-1- “Well, I’m not exactly sure what to say, other than you’ve been trained with them since the beginning. You three belong together on the same team.”

    Raven-XL7- “That is true, but there is still a bit of a barrier between them and myself. I’ve also noticed a barrier between me and other Autobots, and not just Prime keeping my team and I a secret. I have this feeling that I don’t belong with other Autobots, that I should be on my own, in complete privacy.”

    Elita-1- “We all get that felling some times. I’m sure once you start on your missions with Thunderbolt and Warpdrive, you’ll feel more in-place with the others. We should go out with the others, so you’ll have time to get everything ready for your mission, and take a stasis nap. Trust me, you’re a perfect addition to the Autobot ranks.”
    Raven-XL7- “Thanks. You’ve been a great friend. Before we leave I have one thing I’d like to say.”

    Elita-1- “What’s that Raven?”

    Raven-XL7- “I know who’s been sending you all the gifts lately.”

    Elita-1- “Oh yeah? Who is it?”

    Raven-XL7- “You’ll know who it’s been when the time is right. All I’ll tell you know is that he’s a great bot, and a great friend.”

    The two bots leave the private room and join up with the others.

    Elita-1- “All three have been checked, and all are prepped and ready for their mission, sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Thank you Elita-1. The session with Raven was a little stretched out, but I trust that every second of it was put to good use.”

    Elita-1- “Yes sir.”

    Sentinel Prime- “Ok, now that is over, we can move on. Orion Pax and Dion will help you get everything you need for your mission ready. Once that is over I want each of you to take a stasis nap to rest for your mission. Elita-1 and myself will be leaving, as we have some things of our own to attend to. I have left the files necessary to your mission on the desk behind me. Please go over them thoroughly, and save them in your hardrives, so you can access them if need be during your mission. I will be seeing you when you return, as I’ll need to get the scientists processing that device as soon as possible. Good luck men.”

    Elita-1- “Good luck men. I’m confident that you’ll be successful.”

    Sentinel Prime and Elita-1 leave the bunker and go out their separate ways.

    Orion Pax- “Well, we might as well get started then. Dion, do you still have that list of supplies I gave you earlier today? We’ll need it to make sure we have everything ready.”

    Dion- “Yeah, just a second and I’ll put it up on the screen. There we go.”

    The five bots gathered up the necessary supplies for the future mission, and in no time they had a small pile of gear for each bot ready to go.

    Raven-XL7- “Thanks for the help.”

    Orion Pax- “No problem. Can I have a word in private with you for a second Raven?”
    Raven-XL7- “Sure, let’s use the room Elita-1 used to check my teammates and myself.”

    The two bots enter the room, leaving the other three puzzled as to why Orion needed to speak to Raven alone.”

    Raven-XL7- “What do you have on your mind Orion?”

    Orion Pax- “Well, Elita-1’s been acting a little strange lately.”

    Raven-XL7- “How so sir?”

    Orion Pax- “Well, all she’s really been able to talk about for the past month or so is you.”

    Raven-XL7- “And this worries you sir?”

    Orion Pax- “ Raven, you can stop calling me sir. If we were in the same division, we would be equally ranked.”

    Raven-XL7- “Sorry. It’s a little hard to control sometimes.”

    Orion Pax- “It’s ok. Also, it does worry me a bit. I’m worried that she might be obsessing a bit much. No offense to you, but she might think that you’re the one sending her gifts, instead of me. Maybe I should come clean and tell her. What do you think?”

    Raven-XL7- “No offense taken. Elita-1 is a great bot, but I would never dream of taking her from you. You’ve been a great friend to me. I have a feeling that you’ll know when to tell her.”

    Orion Pax- “Thanks Raven. Let’s go finish up getting you ready.”

    The two bots join the others, and finish preparing for the mission. Finally, the three warriors lie down for a stasis nap before they finally leave the safety of their Autobot base.

    Meanwhile…

    In a hidden Decepticon chamber two bots debate over the trustworthiness of another bot.

    Soundwave- “My lord, are you sure that he can be trusted? He’s already disobeyed or direct orders more than once, and has fowled up even the simplest of missions.”

    Megatron- “He’s the only one who could have done it, and in less time than it would to find someone else. His connections with the Autobot scientist still make him useful to us. Trust me on this one Soundwave. Besides, I’ve been watching his progress, and everything has gone according to the plan.”

    Soundwave- “I trust you my lord, but I still do not trust him.”

    Megatron- “I would not expect you to trust him.”

    Buzzzzzz(sound of door about to open)

    Megatron- “That should be him now.”

    The door to the chamber opens up, allowing the bot to walk in, wearing a smirk on his face as if he’s proud of what he’s done.

    Megatron- “Is everything ready Starscream?”

    Starscream- “Yes, my lord. Everything has been prepared for you.”

    Megatron- “Good. Now, go fetch Shockwave for me. He should be waiting in his lab.”

    Starscream- “No problem, my lord.”

    Starscream exits the room, and travels to the Decepticon labs, where a bot is waiting for him.

    Starscream- “Shockwave, are you ready yet?

    Shockwave- “Yes. My labs are ready for the procedures. It’s only logical to be ready and on-time for Lord Megatron.”

    Starscream- “Whatever. Let’s just get this show on the road. Megatron should be here any minute.”

    Buzzzzzz(sound of door about to open)

    Starscream- “That should be him now.”

    Megatron and Soundwave enter the lab. Shockwave immediately bows to Megatron.

    Megatron- “Thank you Shockwave. Has everything been set up accordingly?”

    Shockwave- “Yes Lord Megatron.”

    Megatron- “Good. We want our guests to feel comfortable once they get here. Soundwave, take your troops and get into position. It shouldn’t be too long before they arrive.”

    Soundwave leaves the lab, and gets him and his minions into position.

    Meanwhile…

    Back in the hidden bunker a bot wakes up to the alarm he set up to make sure his teammates and himself wouldn’t be late to their first mission.

    Raven-XL7- “Thunderbolt, Warpdrive, get up. It’s time to leave.”

    Warpdrive- “Oh, come one. Just another 5 minutes.”

    Raven-XL7- “No. We’ve got to be going. The sooner we get started, the sooner we can get the device back to Prime, and the sooner we can get some more rest.”

    Thunderbolt- “Yeah, and the sooner Elita-1 can turn you down again. *laughs *

    Warpdrive- “Like I already told you brother, the only reason she turned me down last time was because it would have conflicted with our important mission.”

    Thunderbolt- “Whatever brother. She’s turned you down before, and will turn you down again.”

    Raven-XL7- “Both of you shut it. Let’s get going before we’re late.”

    Warpdrive- “Ok, let’s get going then. It’s not like it’s going anywhere, but we might as well get it over and done with now.”

    All three bots exit the bunker and travel threw multiple hidden tunnels, so that any civilians still up won’t see them. It takes them a while, but they finally reach their destination. An abandoned Decepticon base.

    Warpdrive- “Not much of a looker is it?”

    Thunderbolt- “Not really, but it’s not like the Decepticons really cared that much about it. We might as well go in and get this over with. Which room is it in again?”

    Raven-XL7- “It’s in the old command station. Smack dab in the middle of the whole building. We might have to make a detour or two on the way there, as it appears that some of the walls have been knocked down, and will probably block a few ways in.”

    The three bots slowly make their way threw the rubble of the old Decepticon base. Every once in a while they would stop to scan the surrounding area for any signs of remaining Decepticons. The closest they come to an actual Decepticon is a statue of Megatron that’s been heavily damaged, yet still sends chills threw their bodies. They finally make it to the command room, and instantly spot the old data processor.”

    Raven-XL7- “I don’t know. Something about this has felt way to easy for us to do.”

    Thunderbolt and Warpdrive scream out in pain and fall to the ground, and before Raven could turn around to see what happened to his teammates he too falls over in pain and blacks out…

    The next thing Raven knew, he was strapped to an operating table, completely unable to move. Standing around him were four bots. The one appeared to have a bird perched on his shoulder. As everything came into focus, Raven realized who the bots where, they were the Decepticons.

    Raven-XL7- “Where are Thunderbolt and Warpdrive!”

    Megatron- “Oh, don’t worry about your Autobot brethren. They’ve been taken care of. *laughs *”

    Ravem-XL7- “You mean……you’ve killed them?”

    Megatron- “Oh, I wouldn’t say we’ve killed them, but they won’t be useful to you or any other Autobots.”

    Shockwave- “The acid is ready Lord Megatron.”

    Megatron- “Thank you Shockwave. Soundwave, you can go and finish up with the other two, but leave Laserbeak here with me. I might need to send you a message, and he’ll be the fastest to get to you.”

    Soundwave- “Yes Lord Megatron. The former Autobot warriors shall be dealt with.”

    Soundwave leaves the lab, and makes his way to a holding facility where his minions await.

    Megatron- “Starscream, it seems that you have not failed me this time, but we still have one bot to take care of. Let’s hope for your sake that he’s as easy as the others were.”

    Starscream- “Thank you, my lord. This is unfortunately the one I allowed the Autobot to design almost completely by himself, but I was still able to work in the bits you wanted for him.”

    Megatron- “Good. This bot should make a great addition to my collection. Let’s get this started then.”

    The three bots push the operating table towards the vat of acid, and tilt Raven into position.”

    Megatron- “Before we dump you into this specialty acid that Shockwave has come up with, I’m going to tell you exactly what it should do to you. Unlike other acids, it will not disintegrate you, but will change your circuitry. You will become a new warrior, that will follow me along with your future Decepticon brethren. It will also mess with your mind, making you insane, thus a better Decepticon warrior. Unfortunately it’ll also mess with your color adapting ability, and will probably permanently change your armor plating a nasty shade of red. That’s one ability I’d love for one of my warriors to have, but it’s a minor loss for the time being. Now, before we begin, are there any last words as an Autobot you would like to say?”

    Raven-XL7- “Just one thing. That no matter what you do to me, I’ll always remain an Autobot, and fateful to the Autobot cause.”

    Megatron- “Ah, a brave bot. You’ll make for a nice Decepticon Warrior. Especially since your basic systems are based off of a very loyal Decepticon. My communications officer, Soundwave. We’ll have to outfit you with a couple minions, so you can put your abilities as a leader to good use. Now, let’s give our guest a bath, shall we?”

    Shockwave activates the machine, which then starts to lower Raven into the vat of acid. The three Decepticons back away so that if anything goes wrong, they won’t get hit by any of the acid. The pain Raven goes threw is unbearable, and he blacks out before he is fully submerged. What wakes him up is a shock of electricity as Shockwave activates another machine designed to force the acid to bond with the victim. After about 10 minutes of this torture, Shockwave activates the machine to lift him back out of the acid. Raven blacks out again as he is raised out of the vat.

    Megatron- “Shockwave, get him washed off and ready for interigation as soon as you can. I’ll leave Laserbeak here if you need to get hold of me. I’m going to go see if Soundwave has taken care of the other two yet. Starscream, you come too. Shockwave does his best work on his own.”

    Shockwave- “Yes my lord. I’ll send Laserbeak once I’m finished cleaning him up, and will wait to awaken him when you arrive.”

    The two Decepticons leave, and head on down to the holding chamber, where Soundwave waits for them. Shockwave immediately starts to clean the excess acid off of Raven-XL7. As he does so, he can see that the acid has, like Megatron said it would, changed his armor plating a nasty shade of red. Once he is finished, he puts Raven-XL7 onto the table that Megatron prepared for the interrogation. He then sends Laserbeak to fetch the others, who arrive back to the lab in only a couple of minutes.

    Shockwave- “My lord, he is ready for interrogation, and you were correct. As you can see, his metal plating has changed to a nasty shad of red.”

    Megatron- “Thank you Shockwave. You are free to go back to the base, and your proper labs. I believe you have some new projects you were going to work on.”

    Shockwave- “Yes, my lord. You will be pleased with what I have in store for you.”

    Shockwave leaves the lab, and heads back to the main Decepticon base.

    Megatron- “Soundwave, if everything has gone according to plan, you’ll have an assistant, a sort of second in command as it were. Let’s just hope he’s more loyal than my second in command is.”

    Soundwave- “Thank you Lord Megatron.”

    Megatron- “Starscream, wake him up.”

    Starscream- “Certainly, my lord.”

    Starscream walks over to Raven-XL7, and presses a button, which gives a shock to the bot, awakening him.

    Megatron- “Welcome, my new Decepticon warrior. What shall we call you?”

    Raven-XL7- “The names Raven-XL7, and I am NOT your new Decepticon warrior. I’m not sure how my Autobot circuitry survived your acid dip, but it has.”

    Megatron- “STARSCREAM!!!!”

    Starscream- “Yes, my lord?…..”

    Megatron- “I should crush you for this. Something your Autobot friend did to this bot’s design helped him survive the acid bath.”

    Starscream- “Maybe we just need to dip him a second time, my lord.”

    Megatron- “We already know that’ll kill him if we do that. Remember the last couple of bots we put into the acid twice in a row. There was barely anything left of them.”

    Raven-XL7- “So you did kill my comrades. You’ll pay for that.”

    Megatron- “Yes, your Autobot friends are dead. They’ve found a new home, as it were. Now, what shall we do with you?”

    Soundwave- “With out the help of fresh energon he’ll dye, so we could just leave him here to dye. I doubt the Autobots could get here in time to save him. The only reason they knew about this base is because our insider “discovered” it and informed their leader about it, and what it contained.”

    Megatron- “You’re correct Soundwave. We’ll leave him here to dye, and become history with the rest of this retched place.”

    Starscream- “Are you sure about this Megatron?”
    Megatron- “Don’t question me, Starscream. You’re in no position to have an opinion in the matter. Let’s just get out of here, and back to the base. I’ve got more important things to worry about at the moment.”

    All three Decepticons leave the lab, and head on back to their base. Leaving Raven-XL7 to dye alone. Raven dipped in and out of stasis lock from the pain that was coursing threw his entire body. It seemed like it would never end till he was finally off-line, but he still had some hope left in him. Fortunately the acid didn’t damage his homing beacon, which he then activated. Another hour or two, and he heard the door crash to the floor as a bot came charging in.

    Raven-XL7- “Over here, I’m strapped to the table!”

    The bot walks over and begins to unstrap him from the table. Once he is finished Raven-XL7 is able to sit up and see the face of the bot who’s saved him.

    Raven-XL7- “Orion Pax? Is that you?”

    To be continued…
     
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    knook Let the Virus Consume You

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    Thanks :D . I wasn't sure how easy it was for someone else to read. I just noticed a little grammatical error and fixed it. Hopefully it won't be too long before I begin writing the next chapter.
     
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    knook Let the Virus Consume You

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    Ravenxl7 W.A.F.F.L.E.O.

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    Thanks. The next chapter shouldn't be too hard to write. it's got a bit of a time-gap in it, but that won't be too hard to describe. One detail that I haven't worked in yet, that I'll work in later, is that Raven-XL7 has a monotone voice, kinda like Soundwave. I'm thinking about renaming the story, as Transformers: Destiny doesn't fit as well as I origionally thought it did. I'm thinking about changing it to Transformers: Secrets.
     
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    knook Let the Virus Consume You

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    have you seen my new Animated Fan Fic?
     
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    Ravenxl7 W.A.F.F.L.E.O.

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    Haven't really had a chance to yet. I'll probably check it out sometime tonight.
     
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    Ezilla82 Expect the Unexpected.

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    Damn! Acid bath treatment not a good way to spent a night. Anyways raven an awesome second chapter of Transformers: Secrets. So cant wait for chapter three.
     
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    Thanks. I've been compiling all the stuff I plan to put in Chapter three, but won't start writing it till probably Monday, though I've got some spare time tomorrow, so I might begin work on it then. This next chapter will have a bit of a time gap built into it (10 years to be specific), but it should go smoothly when I write it out.
     
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    Ezilla82 Expect the Unexpected.

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    Sweet. I can't wait to read it and I know its going to be awesome. Hell yeah!
     
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    Little Update: It's taken me longer then expected to write up the third chapter. I'm going to do some revisions on in tomorrow and hopefully write up the end to it that'll lead up to what I have planned for chapter 4.
     
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    Aside from the punctuation and grammatical errors, this reads much more like a script than it does an actual piece of fan fiction - and even scripts let their characters pause for a minute so that some actions can occur. As it is, it's not a very dynamic story and the lack of any description of setting or actions performed by the characters further handicaps what would otherwise be a semi-interesting fan fiction.
     
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    Well, it's been a while, but I've finally begun work on this again. I did hear back from the HS teacher I'm still in touch with, and they actually liked it (they're a Language Arts teacher). I've scrapped what I had of Chapter three, and have started to write it again. I've also made some changes to my original idea, specifically the time line of events. Though it shouldn't have any affect the first two chapters. Here's a bit of a snippet of what I've got done so far of this next chapter. I hope you guys like what I've done so far. There is a decent amount more I still need to write. Including a bit of a crossover with Ezilla82's fan fiction story.

    Edit(3-14-09): I'll have it up in the near future (hopefully today).
     
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    Ravenxl7 W.A.F.F.L.E.O.

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    I've finally finished Chapter 3. Hope you guys like it. I think I got all the typos out of it. Thanks for any comments. It's a direct continuation from Chapter 2's ending.

    Ch. 3- Misunderstanding

    Optimus Prime- “Yes Raven, it’s me. I would have gotten here sooner but the Decepticons ambushed us. It seems they’ve gained two more warriors recently, who somehow knew where our secret base was. We took several casualties in the battle, but were not entirely defeated. We’ve been able to relocate the remaining survivors.”

    Raven-XL7- “Orion, you, you look different. Or has my memory been altered too.”

    Optimus Prime- “I was damaged during the battle, but was reformatted and renamed by the council. I am now Optimus Prime, but any more explanation will have to wait. We are not safe here.”

    The two bots slowly travel back to the last secure base. Raven slips into stasis lock off and on throughout the journey, but makes it back mostly intact. At the councils request Raven is put into a high security room at the Cybertron Static Spark Ward. This decision seems to bother the new leader of the Autobots, Optimus Prime, who patiently waits outside of the operating room with Ultra Magnus.

    Ultra Magnus- “Let it go Optimus. It’s not like he’s not getting the medical attention he needs.”

    Optimus Prime- “I know, but the decision to hide his existence from the others bothers me greatly. Dion, you should remember how it bothered me even before the Decepticon attack.”

    Ultra Magnus- “The name’s Ultra Magnus now, Optimus. The council reformatted Elita and me too. As for this secrecy thing, just let it go. The council will never change their mind now.”

    Optimus Prime- “I know, it’s just hard to let go of the past. The council shouldn’t have this much control over our lives. Unlike Sentinel, I do not, and will not pledge my allegiance to them. They are nothing but a group of politicians who do nothing but protect themselves.”

    Ultra Magnus- “Optimus, I don’t see how you dislike them. They gave you a second chance at life and made you the leader of all the Autobots. If I were you I’d be worshiping them right now.”

    Optimus Prime- “They made me leader because the Matrix chose me, not them. The only one I’ll be worshiping is Primus.”

    Ultra Magnus- “You’re also one of the few that still have any faith in him. If he was as powerful as the stories make him out to be, we wouldn’t have to deal with the Decepticons anymore.”

    Optimus Prime- “Primus created all of our kind, not only us Autobots. He could not destroy his own creations when there’s a chance they can see the error of their ways and rejoin us.”

    Ultra Magnus- “The day Megatron finally gives up his quest for power and joins us will never happen Optimus. That is why we need to destroy him and all of his followers. Even the one’s that used to be on our side.”

    Optimus Prime- “It could happen. There is good in all of us. I just hope that the good in Megatron will one day take over.”

    Ultra Magnus- “Keep wishing Optimus. It’ll never happen, and you know it. This “Ultimate Warrior” project was supposed to be a great help for us against the Decepticons, and look where it got us.”

    Optimus Prime- “The mission may have been a failure, but we still have one of the warriors to help the cause. I just hope he makes it threw the surgery’s he’s gong under. That acid did some major damage to his armor.”

    Ultra Magnus- “Listen Optimus, I think Sentinel was planning on terminating them if they ever got this bad for a reason. We should follow his orders and terminate him while we have the chance. It’s not like anybody will miss him.”

    Optimus Prime- “No, not while I’m in charge. Sentinel was corrupt and would have terminated any of us if it meant he and the council were safe. I will not do that to my own people.”

    The door to the operating room opens up and Elita-1 steps out. Optimus immediately stands up and walks towards her. Ultra Magnus on the other hand, only gets up so that he can properly hear what she has to say.

    Optimus Prime- “So, how did the surgeries go? Is he going to be alright?”

    Elita-1- “Well, he survived everything, but he’ll never bee the same after what they did to him.”

    Optimus Prime- “What exactly do you mean? He seemed to be his normal self when I found him. A little distant, but that’s to be expected when tortured like that.”

    Elita-1- “Well, his armor is permanently red now, and there are some scars that’ll never fully heal.”

    Optimus Prime- “Those are only physical, has there been any other kind of damage to him at all?”

    Elita-1- “It’s hard to say until he wakes back up. I did a full scan of all his processors, and there has been significant damage. I don’t think he’ll ever be the same mentally. He’ll probably have to stay here for the rest of his life.”

    Ultra Magnus- “Well, that’ll definitely keep him out of our way then.”

    Elita-1- “Don’t be so insensitive Magnus. He was one of the kindest bots I’ve ever met. You could have learned something from him.”

    Ultra Magnus- “Didn’t you say the same thing about Optimus at one point? Sounds to me like you’re getting a little closer to the experiment.”

    Elita-1- “I’m just worried about him. If his circuitry doesn’t heal correctly, there’s no telling what could go wrong.”

    Optimus Prime- “Ultra Magnus, go watch over the remaining troops. We’ll need to see if we can find Warpdrive and Thunderbolt, or at least what’s left of them. I want a small tactical team ready in 60 cycles.”

    Ultra Magnus- “Oh come on Prime, if the Decepticons did half of what the did to their leader, I seriously doubt anything would be left, let alone anything useful.”

    Optimus Prime- “Do it, or I’ll make you wish you were never saved by the council…NOW!!!”

    Surprised by Prime’s anger, Ultra Magnus runs off towards the barracks that his troops were waiting in to start prepping them for the search. Even more shocked, Elita-1 stares at Optimus Prime as though she has never seen this side of him. She jumps when he starts to talk to her again.

    Optimus Prime- “Elita, I’ll need to see him as soon as possible. He could have picked up some valuable information while being tortured. Maybe something about the two new Decpticon recruits.”

    Elita-1- “Yes sir. You can see him now. He won’t be awake for a while, but you can see the extent of the damage.”

    Both bots quietly walk into the operating room. When Optimus lays his optics on the sight on the table, he is rendered speechless. Elita then begins to tell him about the damage, and what she and the other surgeons did to try and help the healing process. Everything seemed to be going ok, Elita talking, Optimus listening…

    Elita-1- “…and all that while trying to keep an optic on his vital signs. I’m sure If Ratchet was available, he would have done better. I sent all the other surgeons to work on those injured in the battle. I should be able to keep everything under control here on my own. Most of his external armor should be healed soon, it’s his circuitry I’m worried about.”
    Optimus Prime- “It…..it’s my fault. I should have known there would be a trap. Everything was going too perfectly. Megatron will pay for this.”

    Elita-1- “Don’t blame yourself for this, there’s nothing you could have done. The Decepticons didn’t start the attack till after they tortured him and his team. Raven is lucky you got there when you did.”

    Optimus Prime- “I know, it’s just hard to not feel somewhat responsible for what happened…”

    Raven-XL7- “Wha……where…….where am I……”

    Elita-1- “Raven, Raven, it’s me, Elita-1. You’re in the”

    Out of nowhere Raven sits up, bringing his hands up to Elita-1’s neck in the process, and starts to strangle her, his optics glowing bright red. Prime immediately attempts to stop him.

    Raven-XL7- “GET…OUT…OF…MY…HEAD……MEGATRON!!!”

    Elita-1- “ It….it’s m…..me….Eli…..ta….1…..”

    Optimus Prime- “Raven! Stop, Megatron is not here! You’re safe now!”

    Suddenly coming to his senses, and realizing what he was doing, Raven relieves pressure on Elita’s neck, but doesn’t let go. He’s able to mutter one more thing.

    Raven-XL7- “ He…help….me……”

    Not realizing that Raven had stopped, Prime grabs the near by shocker cables, attaches them to Raven’s back, and gives him a large enough shock to make him black out, and fall back onto the operating table. No longer being supported by Raven’s hands, Elita-1 falls to the floor, where Optimus rushes to her aid.

    Optimus Prime- “Elita, Elita, are you ok?”

    Elita-1- “I’ll be fine, I’ll be fine. Why did you do that?”

    Optimus Prime- “He was hurting you, I had no other choice.”

    Elita-1- “He had stopped before you attacked him. Didn’t you notice his optics turned back to green? He was also able to mutter help me before you shocked him.”

    Optimus Prime- “I’m beginning to think Ultra Magnus was right, you are getting closer to him, to the experiment.”

    Elita-1- “At this rate I’ll be his only friend. Dion was always thickheaded, but I would never have expected that from you Optimus Prime.”

    Optimus Prime- “I’m sorry Elita, but I had to save you. Now, once he is healthy enough, I want him put into the specialized holding cell the council has set up for him…”

    Elita-1- “But…”

    Optimus Prime- “I also want extra security to be added to the room, and guards stationed every cycle possible…”

    Elita-1- “But Opt…”

    Optimus Prime- “I also want him to be taking meds to keep him under control at all times…”

    Elita-1- “But Optimus…”

    Optimus Prime- “I want him to be restrained and put into stasis lock each time a medic bot gives him the meds…”

    Elita-1- “But Optimus…”

    Optimus Prime- “Lastly, and most importantly, I don’t want you going anywhere near him…”

    Elita-1- “Optimus Prime, how do you expect him to go back to normal when you’re treating him like a sparkotic Decepticon prisoner.”

    Optimus Prime- “I don’t. You even said it yourself, there’s no way he’s going to become normal again.”

    Elita-1- “I also once said that it would be impossible for Dion’s bad attitude to rub off on you. Now that I know that’s possible, I know anything’s possible.”

    Optimus Prime- “Elita, I’m sorry. I just need to know you’re safe. You also have no choice in the matter.”

    Elita-1- “but Prime…”

    Optimus Prime- “But nothing. It’s for your own safety, and it’s not up for discussion. I’ve made my decision, and I’m sticking to it. Now, I’ve got to go, I’ve got some dead bodies to find. I’ll be sending two soldiers and some replacement medics. I want you to strap him down, and then go help work on Ratchet. We could use our chief medical officer back. I’ll see you later.”

    Prime leaves the room, leaving Elita-1 to tie Raven down to the operating table. By the time the soldiers and replacement medics arrive she had left. It was too much for her to stay in that room, by herself, crying. Meanwhile, the new leader and his team has arrived at their destination.

    Optimus Prime- “Ok men, you know what we’re looking for, but be careful. We still don’t know if the Decepticons have left the area or not.”

    Huffer- “What happened here Optimus, you still haven’t explained to us why we are looking for two dead bodies.”

    Optimus Prime- “I’ve already told you, and the others, that there are certain things that are top secret. Now get back to work.”

    Huffer- (to himself) “Yeah, but all you have told us is that we are looking for two dead Autobots. We don’t even know who we are looking for.”

    Cycles go by, but the soldiers continue to look threw the rubble that used to be a Decepticon base. The troops begin to question the situation, when one of them finds something he can’t explain.

    Warpath- “Hey, over here, I think I found something.”

    Optimus Prime and the others rush over to see what Warpath has found. Everyone is shocked at what he has found, all except for Prime, who instantly recognizes it as the precise spot he found Raven earlier.

    Huffer- “What in Primus’s name went on here.”

    Optimus Prime- “Nothing you need to know about Huffer.”

    Warpath- “I think we should take a sample of this acid back to Wheeljack. He should be able to analyze it back in his lab.”

    Optimus Prime- “NO! We are going to destroy it here. All of it.”

    Huffer- “Why Prime? This is getting really suspicious. When are you going to tell us what happened?”

    Optimus Prime- “For the last time, YOU DON’T NEED TO KNOW!”

    Optimus Prime and his crew carefully put all of the acid into one spot, went back to a safe distance, and blew it up remotely. They then continued their search for the two missing Autobots, but they have nearly searched the entire area already.

    Ultra Magnus- “Optimus, I don’t think we’re going to find them. For all we know the Decpeticons had them disintegrated in that acid stuff, or something. Whatever happened to them, they are gone, and for good.

    Optimus Prime- “You’re probably right. We have better luck trying to fix the one we still have. Huffer, Warpath, get over here, now. We’re going back to base. There’s no point continuing the search.”

    Optimus Prime’s orders to put Raven into isolation went into effect almost immediately. Since most of the Autobots were injured in the battle, Optimus Prime himself had to watch over the cell when the others were resting. Those who knew the secrets behind the incident kept it to themselves, and the mystery of the two new Decepticon warriors remained just that, a mystery. Life seemed to continue on as normal for most Autobots. Maybe even a little brighter knowing that they had a new Leader to look to for guidance. Things would be even better if the naïve new Leader knew that the answers to all of his questions lied in the top secret bunker he once hoped would never be put to use.
     
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    Ravenxl7 W.A.F.F.L.E.O.

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    Well, finally got around to putting chapter four down into words, lol, and decided to post a little sneak peak of what's going to go on. Oh, and I should be able to get back to work on my comic here soon, lol.

    Three young Cybertronians race threw the old ruins. Not competing against each other, but to prove how brave they were for traveling so far into the forbidden ruins. Their parental units continually told them to stay far away from the destroyed cities, that they were open to attack from Decepticons, but to the young bots, the Decepticons didn’t seem like a real threat. They had after all never actually seen one, only videos of them during class. The war was still ongoing, but had, for the most part, left Cybertron. Racing threw the decrepit streets of some nameless ghostown, the young Cybertronians had no idea that shortly, there lives would change forever…

    Edit: Well, just finished writing this chapter, but I'm going to wait till after I get a good nights sleep before I re-read it (check for errors) and then post it. I really hope you guys like it. I know I do :D 
     
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    Ravenxl7 W.A.F.F.L.E.O.

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    Well, here it is. Just re-read it, and it looks as though everything should be in order. I hope you guys like it. For those wondering, Rodimus is the same as Hot Rod, I just personally prefer to use the name Rodimus for him. I've put Springer in to round out the group of young Autobots, and to try and make a comparison to three older bots (Optimus Prime/Rodimus, Elita-1/Arcee, and Ultra Magnus/Springer).

    Edit: In the process of re-writing this chapter. I'm hoping to have it up sometime today.
     
  18. Ezilla82

    Ezilla82 Expect the Unexpected.

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    You gave the Transformers more human-like quantites in which are pretty cool. So keep it up.
     
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    Thanks. Yeah, basically trying to make the characters more relatable. It'll help down the road.

    Out of curiosity, is anybody else reading this? It'd be nice to get some more opinions. No offense to you Ezilla82, just that a wider range of opinions would be beneficial. Can't improve if I don't know what needs improving.
     
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    Ezilla82 Expect the Unexpected.

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    None taking.
     
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