Transformers/RE:Origins

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  1. UnicronFTW

    UnicronFTW Don't blink.

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    At last. After months of preperation, from lighting, to scripts. And it's finally here. The first strip didn't quite turn out as I wanted it to. And one day, when I'm more experienced, I would like to come back to it and do a revision. But, until then, I present to you...
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    Season One
    Chapter One
    "Dead Man Draggin'"
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    Did it suck? Did it? Did it suck? Of course! But I remain optimistic that it will get better. ;D

    Some notes:
    Throughout this comic, you'll note that there is a lack in aesthetic continuity. Meaning that characters will be portrayed through all sorts of figures. Movie, Animated, Classics, you name it. It may throw you off sometimes... :banghead: 
    Secondly, my sets aren't always top notch. Whether it's just a piece of cardboard, or a bedsheet, it's really all I can do. And that would be fine any other time, but my story starts on cybertron, and having cybertron degraded to a teal carpet and carboard cutouts is kind of lame. Just bear with me. XD
    And thirdly, could you guys point any errors you see? Just so I know what to improve on.

    And yes, I threw in such lines as "find my way back" and "sorry, magnus" in order to have a bit of foreshadowing. It's an underhanded thing to do but... I'm not always one for subtlety .
    So, thanks for reading, and tune in next time... whenever next time may be. Seen as how I don't know how often I can update.
     
  2. Strarf

    Strarf Crystal Convoy no more TFW2005 Supporter

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    Not bad for a start. If I'd say there's anything you could improve on, it's getting clear shots. Several here are good, others are blurry. Having clear pictures most certainly is helpful. Taking multiples of shots, adjusting lighting if possible, and playing with camera settings all help. It's not to say there won't be some that don't turn out no matter what you do. I will say though, don't worry we all start out like this and improve with time.
     
  3. UnicronFTW

    UnicronFTW Don't blink.

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    Consider it done ;D
     
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    myhobby ArigatouArigatouArigatou-

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    i like it.

    the lighting is dark and moody, the goings on are mysterious and we've already gotten some classic quotes. :) 
    it makes me want to read more, so mission success!

    i feel that any advise at this point would be encroaching on your signature style. :D 

    cyberton, eh? we seem to be starting at the roots of the war, if the title "origins" and the WFC optimus and megatron in your sig are anything to go by. :D 

    i'll stick around for this one...
     
  5. UnicronFTW

    UnicronFTW Don't blink.

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    Whoa. Then it seems everything I was trying to convey has been... conveyed! Woot!
     
  6. Galvatronimus

    Galvatronimus Well-Known Member

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    Great start man! Love the dark mood as well. Writing was great, can't wait to read more!
     
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    Lock Cade Tarn Fangirl TFW2005 Supporter

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    Hey, this isn't a bad start. In fact, I'm very intrigued. I'm definitely interested in reading more once you're able to update. :) 
     
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    Ironhide2005 PS3tag=DeaDPooLTFW

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    Fantastic start! Great writing and the dark mood you are portraying is awesome. Looking forward to more!
     
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    Love it, good start
     
  10. UnicronFTW

    UnicronFTW Don't blink.

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    Believe it or not, the dark mood was supposed to be even darker and moodier XD. Glad to see you're on board. ;D

    Hey T+C! Intrigued, huh? Well stick around, I'm hoping to update by tuesday.

    Well dawgonnit, you guys sure are liking the dark mood. XD I guess it came across better then I thought. Thanks, Ironhide.

    Thanks. ;D
     
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    Lock Cade Tarn Fangirl TFW2005 Supporter

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    Of course, I am! You got me hooked right off the bat. :thumbs2: 

    I'm definitely sticking around, and I'll bring lots of popcorn to munch on. :D 
     
  12. UnicronFTW

    UnicronFTW Don't blink.

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    The popcorns on me!
     
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    Wars Regular At Swerve's™

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    A very nice start. I can't wait to read more of this.
     
  14. Galvatronimus

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    Ooooh... Better get mah popcorn then... :popcorn 
     
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    Autovolt 127 Get In The Titan, Prime!

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    :popcorn  :thumb  Great comic so far.


    Looks like Strongarm's screwed or is he.........










    ......(yeah he is) :p 
     
  16. UnicronFTW

    UnicronFTW Don't blink.

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    Thanks, TFWars, I can't wait to make more of this.

    Extra Large Super Buttered whammy jammy, please!

    Yeah, it's pretty safe to say he ain't gonna be coming back. XD
     
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    tfmad2010 Oh Hai Internet!

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    This is good. I love the use of Straxus as a main villain :D .

    That is great lighting you have there. Keep up the good work :thumb !
     
  18. UnicronFTW

    UnicronFTW Don't blink.

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    I honestly was disappointed in the lighting... o.o
     
  19. UnicronFTW

    UnicronFTW Don't blink.

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    Bet you guys can guess whom this figure is going to portray:
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    Here's a hint:
    I'm going to have digitally duplicate him... lots and lots of times...
     
  20. Galvatronimus

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    I don't know, but what I know is that something big's gonna go down! :popcorn  :popcorn  :popcorn  :popcorn  :popcorn 
     

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