2D Artwork: TRANSFORMERS MOSAIC: "The Recruit"

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  1. TF Mosaic

    TF Mosaic Well-Known Member

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    The Universe of the Transformers is vast, and populated by many characters. Their universe is a large tapestry, made up of the stories and points of view of countless experiences that serve the larger whole.

    These are some of those stories. This is:
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    It should be noted that while this project has been recognized by IDW Publishing and Hasbro, none of the works presented have been commissioned or solicited by either company. The stories are not official canon, except where noted.
    These stories are the result of Transformers enthusiasts taking the time out of their busy days to contribute to a universe they love.
    No one has been paid for the production of these stories.


    ”The Recruit” Story and art by Andrew “Polystyleneman” Griffith

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  2. KA

    KA PENIS GOES WHERE?!!

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    nice art, but the capped text is distracting.
     
  3. NICKTORIOUS

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    Agreed about the text. I got by it, but it was jarring at first.

    Great story though. Poor Bluestreak.
     
  4. Dropshot

    Dropshot Transform your destiny

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    For me it's hard to see who's who. Great overall!
     
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    Pretty cool. Had trouble telling who's who though. :lol 

    I'm surprised you know what capitalization is.
     
  6. Foster

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    *snerk*

    Agreed on the who's who. Bluestreak needs the gold horns from his boxart.
     
  7. Gears

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    It's a good concept, but I agree you shoud of differentiated Bluestreak and Prowl's head colors more. Also there is a typo in the last panel "The city that the our enemy laid seige to..."
     
  8. KA

    KA PENIS GOES WHERE?!!

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    :lol 

    message board post and texting, i could give a shit cuz theyre disposable, but when it comes to 'work' proper, i get particular.

    http://geocities.com/petaling_st/

    i may act like a tool here but in real life, college duration time for architects (thats me) is only second to doctors. ive spent more time in tertiary education than you in secondary :lol 

    theres always right and wrong way of doing things and capitalizing each word, while an interesting stylistic choice, is not a favored method for wording speech bubbles. titles? yes. dialogue, no.
     
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    the caps are a little distracting
     
  10. StarFire_MK2

    StarFire_MK2 'Till All are One! TFW2005 Supporter

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    I agree with all the criticisms, but it's nice art. Also, why are Bluestreak's rocket launchers smoking? I presume he's fired them, but without explicitly telling the reader why, it's a little distracting. Also, since Bluestreak hasn't joined the Autobots, why does he have the Autobot symbol?

    Keep 'em coming thought...I just stumbled onto these the other day, and really enjoy them.
     
  11. Valkysas

    Valkysas Attack Buffalo

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    the caps are annoying. and once again, great art, crap writing. it's emotionless and bland, in a scene that should be VERY emotionally charged.

    These things need editors, I swear.
     
  12. Belgrath

    Belgrath Boom! Nutshot!

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    KA = win

    Nice comic, too bad the script looks "meh".
     
  13. Maximo Prime

    Maximo Prime Bassist of Ill Repute

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    yeah, same here. the art was fantastic. The capped lettering was not a good idea, and the actual lines were meh, for what could be a great scene.
     
  14. Ramrider

    Ramrider TF Art Lad

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    Total agreement with the capitalisation; it threw me right off, and took some getting past. The two characters definitely should have been coloured differently - just making Bluestreak darker would have helped a lot. I must admit, I was also kinda distracted by the shiny domed heads... it's pretty detailed artwork, but there's hardly anything there (let alone the crests they usually have, which I'm surprised were left off given the accuracy of the rest of the artwork).
    I'm also not too enamoured with Prowl's bit of flowery prose when he first arrives. "The sins of our past have given birth to an evil..?" Seems way too round-the-houses for a straight-talking mech.
    The other thing that niggles me is this: They're on Cybertron, before Bluestreak's even joined the Autobots (that's clearly going back a ways). So why do they clearly transform into Earth cars? :p 

    For all the crits, though, it's a nice bit of story, with excellent artwork.
     
  15. aussiehippy

    aussiehippy Au contraire, Blackadder.

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    OMG, glimpse of real life
     

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