2D Artwork: TRANSFORMERS MOSAIC: "Cheetor"

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  1. TF Mosaic

    TF Mosaic Well-Known Member

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    The Universe of the Transformers is vast, and populated by many characters. Their universe is a large tapestry, made up of the stories and points of view of countless experiences that serve the larger whole.

    These are some of those stories. This is:
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    It should be noted that while this project has been recognized by IDW Publishing and Hasbro, none of the works presented have been commissioned or solicited by either company. The stories are not official canon, except where noted. These stories are the result of Transformers enthusiasts taking the time out of their busy days to contribute to a universe they love. No one has been paid for the production of these stories.

    For all Transformers news / updates / information, click here

    CHEETOR

    Written by;
    Clinton “Tahu Prime” Avery

    Art by;
    Cody “Cryo Prime” Avery

    [​IMG]
     
  2. Wiggyof09

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    There's not really much to this one at all.
     
  3. deltaprime

    deltaprime The Christian Transfan

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    The art's okay, but I agree with Wiggy, there's not any real story to this one.
     
  4. Covenant

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    Misspelled word ("I an fast"), no story or development to it, art looks like it might have been fun to scribble up during study hall (do you youngsters still have 'study hall'?), but all'n'all; I give it an 'E' for 'Eh'.
     
  5. MushroomPrime

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    Well that's disappointing...
     
  6. Brawlastator

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    Nice to meet you. I'm Brawlastator.
     
  7. MushroomPrime

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    omgz, its a lieef stroy
     
  8. Belgrath

    Belgrath Boom! Nutshot!

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    As much as the art in the mosaic is decent, the story is just weak IMO.

    Other than that, okay mosaic.
     
  9. Admiral Lilwall

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    remember when mosaic was created? it was meant to be a one page insight to the personality of its main character.

    i'm not knocking the creators of this particly one, but i'm completely surprised this got in to the project at all, i've seen some great, deep and thought provoking stories be rejected by mosaic, but this one is ok?

    maybe a rethink on the standards of what mosaic is all about should be put forward, I mean, a year ago we'd never ever have seen one like this

    *shrug* just my 2c, ignore if you please
     
  10. WhiteRabbit

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    Everybody keep in mind that not everyone who's contributed to this project is a 30 year old, life-long Transformers fan with years and years of creative endeavors under their belts.

    This project has its parameters, yes, but we saw no need to close it off to the franchise's younger enthusiasts.
     
  11. Nachtsider

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    What's this in aid of?
     
  12. transmetal2dinobot

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    i like the art, and it does kind of give insight as to season 1 cheetors mindset. he didn't get any real complexity until season 2 and 3
     
  13. Spiderus Prime

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    Why Cheetor's Head look likt Prowl's/Bluestreak's/Smokesceem's head?
     
  14. Takara_destron

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    I like the art, but as everyone else has said its very thin on story.
     
  15. Fez Findie

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    That was more like a quick wrestling promo. Sure, the artwork can work in certain rough way, but...
     
  16. rattimus prime

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    it could be better if they had each frame have each form from DOFP to Transtech each have a qoute, and end with an old prime saying "but im still cheetor"
     
  17. SPLIT LIP

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    Not diggin' the art or story. If it didn't say Cheetor twice I'd think it was a fan-character or something.
     
  18. CryoPrime

    CryoPrime Cody A.

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    Hey guys, I just wanted to show you a better quality of it I didn't make any any errors in the writing, for some reason it got really pixelated I hope this one looks better, and I respect your criticisms, but would like to show you it for real.

    [​IMG]
     
  19. red00wolf

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    Cant say i like it much.
     
  20. Altitron

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    I won't critique the story, not due to the lack of one, but because I don't consider myself a writer.

    As for the art, I suggest you thin down your lines some, CP. Ink in a more controlled manner; as it is now, everything appears to have been rushed and is very thick, making it difficult to distinguish the finer details of the work.

    I notice this permeates throughout your work, and seems to be a style choice. I would ask that you try to improve in this area the most, in order to make your work seem less sketchy in the end and more professional looking and clean.

    And Cheetor, in beast mode, looks more like a tiger or a leopard here. I would suggest using reference photographs to increase the accuracy of your portrayal.

    Keep up the work, practice, practice, practice. Looking forward to watching you develop.

    - Alty
     

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