transformers: generation x issue 1

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    this is the true start of my fan-fic, i hope yall like it

    Transformers: generation x

    Issue#1 Maximus prime’s first strike

    The year is 2006 and the Autobots are upping there defenses so they could stand a chance against the decepticons new leader, maximus prime. Sidescream, the new leader of the Autobots is out on patrol with the aerialbots looking out for maximus’ next move.

    Silverbolt: can we go back to the base, there’s no decepticons for miles
    Sidescream: not yet, we need to make sure your right
    Firefight: I found something
    Sidescream: what is it
    Firefight: a decepticon mining facility
    Sidescream: let’s go regroup back at the base so access this situation

    So the aerialbots and sidescream went back to the base to figure out what to do about the situation

    Sidescream: Ultra Magnus, any ideas
    Ultra Magnus: I say we surround the mining facility and attack from all sides
    Preceptor: that a good idea but you left something out, the jetbots that are surrounding the entire area
    Hound: don’t worry about it, cliffjumper and I will handle them
    Sidescream: there’s only one more thing, Autobots lets move out

    So the Autobots went to the mining facility to try to foil the decepticons’ plans

    Dirge: the project is complete maximus prime
    Maximus prime: activate it because the Autobots have joined the party

    All of the sudden, the ground shook violently and a huge robotic city rose from the mine and transformed into an immense robotic being.

    Ultra Magnus: what is that
    Maximus prime: Autobots, I would like you to meet you destruction, Killerzone

    The giant transformer Killerzone grabbed the aerialbots and swallowed them whole

    Ultra Magnus: without the aerialbots, we don’t stand a chance against that thing
    Killerzone: Autobots, prepare to die

    Then, Killerzone shot cliffjumper and hound into a smoking pile of rubble

    Ultra Magnus: cliffjumper and hound just bit the dust
    Sidescream: Autobots retreat and regroup at the base

    So the Autobots retreated to their base to make a new battle plan

    Ultra Magnus: Sidescream, what are we going to do, we just lost 7 Autobots to a monster
    Sidescream: we must stop that monstrosity if it’s the last thing we do
    Rodimus prime: so let’s strike that thing while it rest
    Sidescream: it’s to risky
    Rodimus Prime: we must or Killerzone will kill us eventually so let’s strike when it is not on guard
    Sidescream: Fine, but let’s call on reinforcements.

    So, the Autobots contacted blaster on Cybertron to bring all available Autobots to earth

    On Cybertron,
    Blaster: Grimlock, slag, sludge, snarl, swoop, sunstreaker, sideswipe, and jazz boarded the shuttles
    Jazz: Where are we going?
    Blaster: Earth

    So the Cybertron Autobots took off and headed to earth

    Blaster: Jazz, any decepticons in the area?
    Jazz: no…wait...Ahhhhhh
    BOOOM

    To be continued
     
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    hello anybody there? please post:cry  i'm bored
     
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    maximus prime3 Banned

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    if you post i will pay you 20 bucks
     
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    please post:cry  i beg of yall please post
     
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    maximus prime3 Banned

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    post and i will give you 100 bucks
     
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    onesock Banned

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    Want my opinion? Needs work.

    Where's my $120.
     
  7. Alpha Prime

    Alpha Prime Ten Years Strong

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    Needs more details. Try to proof read; there are some parts that need to be re-worded. Otherwise, not bad. You'll get better as you go!

    Now where's my $120.
     
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    maximus prime3 Banned

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    i said 120 BUCKS so here you are. 120 male deer run you over:ev: 
     
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    maximus prime3 Banned

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    same to you 120 BUCKS
     
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    issue#2 is finished, i will post it in a few days
     
  11. fschuler

    fschuler Member TFW2005 Supporter

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    Hmmm...it actually reads more like a script. If you want it to be a script, then continue...otherwise, I would suggest adding some more descriptions of the surroundings, the bots' feelings/thoughts, and other events going on in your world.

    And, like they said, do a little proofreading for grammatical/wording issues and keep up the good work!

    That'll be $120... :D 
     
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    maximus prime3 Banned

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    i said 120 bucks, when will yall learn, no offense fschuler
     
  13. Alpha Prime

    Alpha Prime Ten Years Strong

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    regaurdless if it was deer or $$$, I WANT MY PAYMENT NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    i can see it now, Alpha Prime's Deer Meat Market.
     
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    here [​IMG] times 120
     

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