transformers 3 custom script

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  1. jetfire4321

    jetfire4321 Banned

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    i give up happy now transcrazy,spin out. this just not my thing id probaley be better at radicon customs may be ill come back to this in a couple years oh yeah no hate guys im pretty sure my teacher might think its crap to lol
     
  2. Spin-Out

    Spin-Out Are you afraid of the dark?

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    I can't make heads or tails of it. It makes no gorramed sense. Also, a few occasional spelling errors are normal... But you don't seem to have much of a grasp of the English language.
     
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    im working on it this is after all my first scrit
     
  4. Stiles

    Stiles The Lovely Little Demon

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    Doubt it.
     
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    Too many spelling and grammar mistakes. Makes it hard for me to read.

    Spellcheck is your friend.
     
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    just tell me what i need to edit guys just say the part
     
  7. Spin-Out

    Spin-Out Are you afraid of the dark?

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    Everything... Just everything.
     
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    don't be that hard on him, i started writing fan fic movie scripts about 4 or 5 years ago and my first versions of each were kind of like his. jetfire4321 all you need is some practice, here's some tips...

    1. use Microsoft Word: it should have everything you need to make it look good.

    2. show it off to friends and family, just to get their opinions on it so you can fix it up before posting it.

    3. and most importantly, take you're time...brainstorm, and remember, its YOUR script, don't change anything you don't want to just because someone else said it wasn't good.

    these helped me and take a look at my scripts, YOU CAN DO IT!!!
     
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    thank you man
     
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    jetfire4321 Banned

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    okay guys im editing my first one
     
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    Lock Cade Tarn Fangirl TFW2005 Supporter

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    I'm sorry, it's still not good. You have to show what's going on, not tell us what's going on.

    My suggestion? Take a look at other scripts, and see how scripts are supposed to look like, then rewrite your script.
     
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    but is it better then the first one
     
  13. DeathStorm

    DeathStorm Snoochie Boochies

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    Just curious - how is it you have a teacher and you're 55 years old? Are you in school somewhere?
     
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    What Deathstorm said.
     
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    srsly people im just a kid learning equivalent fractions
     

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