The Rookie.

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  1. Starwave

    Starwave Herald of Unicron

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    Okay this is my first post in fan fics, so please bare with me I'm new at this. I may not get all my grammar right, because I need to be caught up. I'm not dumb, I just don't write much. Okay, so this is a story based on a dream I had after viewing the War for Cybertron trailer. The designs for Megs, Prime, Soundwave, and Screamer are WFC, and BB is his movie design. It is first person, where I am a Decepticon Rookie, and I see how it is in the army, and what it means to be a Decepticon. Ok so here we go.

    I emerge, I must have been in stasis lock or something.

    Megatron: Get up! We are headed to battle!

    Rookie: Huh? Wha-

    Megatron: Get moving rookie!

    Rookie: Yes sir!

    I head into battle. I am ready to fight whatever comes at me!

    Optimus: Autobots move out!

    The mighty Autobot commander Optimus Prime takes out his battle axe and slices Decepticon drones as he rushes into battle.

    Soundwave: Lord Megatron, Optimus Prime is here!

    Megatron: So you are this Optimus Prime the Autobot Council has sent!

    Optimus: Yes Megatron, and I have come to stop you and the other traitors to Cybertron!

    Megatron: Never! You will feel my wrath!

    Bumblebee: Take this Decepticreep!

    Bumblebee attacks the rookie.

    Rookie: You Autobot scrap! You will suffer for your deffiance!

    Glowing yellow blades pop out of the rookies forearms.

    Rookie: I'm ready to tear you to scrap! Come and face me!

    Bumblebee: Get ready for a beat'in!

    The rookie strikes directly at BB, and BB counters and knocks him back.

    Rookie: Dammit!

    Bumblebee: You must be a rookie! HAHAHA!!!

    Rookie: Silence you peice of scrap!

    Rookie launches at BB.

    Rookie: I will tear you to scrap!!!

    BB does'nt see the attack comming, and the rookie jumps on him and peirces the yellow blade through BB's chest.

    Bumblebee: Arg-groo-bweep!!!

    Rookie thinks to himself: I must have busted his core programing temporarily with that blow...

    Rookie: Die scrap heap!

    Rookie then stabs BB in his chest again. He then wraps his blades around his core, and rips his chest open. Bumblebee's eyes go blank.

    Optimus: Bumb- Gahh!!!

    Megatron: You lack concentration! You will never beat me!

    Optimus: Autobots, we must retreat!

    Ratchet takes Bumblebee's body as they retreat.

    Megatron: Decepticons.... I claim Iacon our new base!!!

    Decepticons cheer.

    Skywarp: Hey, you are the rookie right?

    Rookie: Yea. It's cool to finally meet a Seeker.

    Skywarp: Yea I'm awesome are'nt I?

    Rookie: Way to kiss your ass..

    Skywarp: Yea, so have you encountered Starscream yet?

    Rookie: No, I heard he is a weasel.

    Skywarp: You heard right. He is the lowest coward that wants to overthrow Megatron.

    Skywarp: Now listen closley if you don't want Megatron to rip your spark out.

    Skywarp: Starscream tries to recruit every rookie for his rebellion against Megatron. Only a few have joined him. Megatron has done very brutal things to those that have.

    Rookie: I understand. I will be sure and stay clear of that sly.

    Skywarp: Looks like you got some brains kid. Maybe we might see eachother in battle again. You still gotta meet Thundercracker.

    Rookie: Sure.

    Skywarp teleports.

    Megatron: Alright you miserable piles of scrap, get moving! We have work to do!

    End of part 1.

    Please leave so good critical feedback. This is the first time I have done this, and I would like some good, constructive, critisism. But don't critisize just to be a douche, make sure it is constructive.
     
  2. Autobot_Wall-E

    Autobot_Wall-E The Musical

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    I enjoyed it.

    Two things: Calm down with the exclamation points and you said scrap a lot.

    But otherwise, well done
     
  3. Starwave

    Starwave Herald of Unicron

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    Haha, thanks alot. I really apreciate it.
     
  4. Keller500

    Keller500 Well-Known Member

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    sounds awsome, someone needs to make a movie style toy and design concept of rookie.
     
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    also please don't tell me this is Halo 3 ODST XD
     
  6. Starwave

    Starwave Herald of Unicron

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    Maybe if I get into customizing more I could do one.
    Nah, I got the idea from the Nintendo DS game Transformers Decpeticons.
     

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