The Leogelu chronicles

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  1. Fishsticks

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    Characters

    Decepticons

    Brawl- leader of the Decepticons on Leogelu
    Astrotrain- transport and ineffective warrior
    Overkill- all brawn and no brains
    Thundercracker- master of swordsmanship
    MG-1- mass produced drone in the shape of Megatron
    Spy Shot 6- spy for the Autobots

    Autobots

    Blaster- leader of the Autobots on Leogelu and communication officer
    Rewind- warrior with a cunning mind
    Blurr- talks a bluestreak
    Goldbug- scout with little to no actual combat experience

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    First recommendation I'd make is that the tails of the word balloons don't need to go all the way to touching the characters' mouths. As long as the tails are clearly pointed at the appropriate characters' heads, that's all you need to do. It gets intrusive otherwise.

    Second, why the name "Leogelu"?

    Third, Brawl is a general?!?
     
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    1. Will fix in later comics

    2. It's latin for "ice planet" or something

    3. Yes, his only strategy is just attacking with brute force