The cautionary tale of X-86

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  1. General Magnus

    General Magnus Da Custodes of the Emprah

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    I got this idea for a fic featuring a vehicon from Prime, narrated by his POV, so I´m gonna try and aim for a little sniped and see how it goes.

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    "So, this is how it ends..ugh. They always said the life of a Vehicon under Megatron´s orders were short. The others always warned me about it."

    Pain goes through his circuits as X-86 feels his insides shutting down one by one and his spark growing weaker by the minute. not event he greatest or brightest could save him now. He was a goner and he knew it. But that was not what made him sad. It was whom he was making sad that torn him apart.

    "Is he gonna make it?" A purple haired female asks, tears filling her eyes.

    The other cybertronians lowered their heads. The largest of them all, a red and white ambulance who went by the name of "Optimus Prime" replied.

    "I am sorry, but X-86 sustained too much damage." He pauses. ."..there is nothing I can do but ease his passing."

    "Heh, who would imagine it? Me a vehicon, surrounded by Autobots and a human in the last seconds of my life? Primus has a sense of irony hasn´t he? But I don´t regret none of it..But I´m getting of track aren´t I? I bet most of you want to find out how this all started..Well, I have en ought time for a small tale..This is the cautionary tale of Vehicon X-86."

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    Small little first chapter, to test the story around, but I might carry on with it.
     
  2. JackWheel

    JackWheel JackWheel FTW

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    I found it interesting, I would like to see more!
     
  3. Rewind Eject

    Rewind Eject Well-Known Member

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    Cool idea; it is written well, glad to see vehicons getting some fan fic light, and starting at the end made for a real nice hook.

    Is him calling Ratchet just a mistake; or do you mean more with that?
     
  4. Jus09

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    Hmm...intriguing.
     
  5. General Magnus

    General Magnus Da Custodes of the Emprah

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    Sorry I meant Ratchet who is monitoring him.
     

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