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Discussion in 'Transformers Fan Fiction' started by ironkaty, Feb 3, 2008.

  1. ironkaty

    ironkaty mystery warrior

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    this my fisrt time writeing hope yuo like

    i woke up feeling sore and then it came back to me in a flash . A great battle agaisnt megatron and me ironhide running to meet him with the others a big bang the nothing until i woke up in med bay and ratchet smileing down at me" hello mate next time jump away form the blast not in it
     
  2. Rhinox007

    Rhinox007 Liquid Fire

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    It sounds ok, but next time, just a good tip, before you post, reread your text and undo your mistakes. it's a comon mistake of first-time wrighters
     
  3. ironkaty

    ironkaty mystery warrior

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    ok thanks for the tip
     

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