Honour - Issue #1 (Spotlight: Dinobot)

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  1. Verno

    Verno Beast Wars Collector

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    G'Day all,

    I've uploaded the Script for Issue #1 of Transformers: Honour up on my DeviantArt Account.

    The series (an intended 4 Issues) is a backstory for Dinobot from Beast Wars, and could well have been called Spotlight: Dinobot, but Honour had a nicer ring to it.

    Transformers: Honour - Issue #1

    I'd love to get some feedback on it. And extra points for anyone who would care to guess who Shadow, the mysterious cloaked figure is.

    Cheers,
    Verno.
     
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    Ømnidrive I HAVE A MANE!!! TFW2005 Supporter

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    Great work!!!
     
  3. Vaikyuko

    Vaikyuko Transmetal

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    Not too bad. I like that you've kept it in script format, as opposed to rewriting it. I'm also liking that already we've gotten Cryotek involved, who is quite the big player, after all, what with being a mentor to Megatron.

    I'm not quite sure who Shadow is. I have a hunch, but I'll withhold that until it's revealed. As for the writing itself, good distinct verbal quirks. The almost every-sentence enunciation emphasis that Cryotek has is especially nice.
     
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    Verno Beast Wars Collector

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    Cheers, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

    Cryotek is delicious to write for. Yes, with him being a mentor for Megatron, I tried to make it clear where Megatron got some of his 'pomp' from.

    I try to make them all different in their speech patterns, but I worry that it doesn't translate through, so I'm very glad you said that - thank you!
     

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