Friends, I need some help...

Discussion in 'Transformers Fan Fiction' started by AlphaOmegaBlurr, Jun 25, 2009.

  1. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    ... Started on my third installment of the movie trilogy, and need some feedback.

    Main plot is simply revolving around the Autobots, and the Decepticons.

    All is peaceful, and it has been two months since RotF.

    NEST is still in use, and Optimus and Lennox lead with confidence.

    However, Megatron finds that some of his troops are moving about, and are ready to attack.

    Now that the Fallen is dead, Megatron seeks to simply wipe out the human race and the Autobots.

    Meanwhile, Ultra Magnus and the rest of the Autobots arrive in the Guardian, and help Prime take out the 'Cons.

    But, throughout the story, they find that there is a more primal force in their origin, and strange signals have been detected in Egypt, strangely near the Tomb of the Primes...

    What do you guys think?
     
  2. Surge

    Surge Village Dolt

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    All of that sounds excellent. :) 

    However, you should include how Soundwave comes to Earth and gets revenge on Bumblebee.
     
  3. Anodythe

    Anodythe Well-Known Member

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    I like the idea! I hope you include more femmes. Looking forward to your story!
     
  4. Vexza

    Vexza Nerdicon

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    I like it. 8D
     
  5. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    Ah, Soundwave does come down, but does not seek an Earth mode.
    He attacks Princeton with Blitzwing and Shockwave, and nearly kills Sam.

    For femme bots, Arcee's back as the triplets.

    UPDATE- Another Seeker is sought, his name is... Jetstorm.
     
  6. Anodythe

    Anodythe Well-Known Member

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    So far so neat! I thought Soundwave had entirely too much power. Nice to see he's earth-bound.
     
  7. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    He manages to pin down Bumblebee and nearly punctures his spark...

    Before getting shot in the optic by an arrow from Hot Rod, who's like "Wtf?"

    The Twins are screaming and running, and Jolt's like "Oh, crap."
     
  8. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    UPDATE-
    Megs knows how to create energon... :ev: 
    Sam keeps having visions of the Primes.
    Lockdown crushes Mikaela in his bare servos.
    The Twins annoy Springer and Hot Rod.
     
  9. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    Short summary of the first part-

    It's been three months since the Fallen's 'defeat.' Peace has been restored, but Optimus lies in wait, knowing that Megatron now has a way to create energon.
    He intercepts a message from Ultra Magnus, who's near Jupiter, and is leading a team of 30 so Autobots, to help Prime.
    Little do the Autobots know, victory is not what is seems to be...
    Meanwhile... Sam and Leo are back at Princeton, and life is normal. Bumblebee is joined by his good friend Hot Rod, who is Leo's new (and only) robotic friend. The Twins, just for the sake of teasing Leo follow, and no one seems to notice the new addition.
    And then Sam starts having visions...
     
  10. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    And... something tragic has happened...
     
  11. Vexza

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    You killed her off pretty fast.
     
  12. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    But, Bludgeon interferes.
     
  13. Vexza

    Vexza Nerdicon

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    She's already dead. What does it matter? xD
     
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    i like the strange things at the tomb of the Primes. Here's a thought... :D 

    The Autobots arrive at the site. All is calm. Nothing has happened for the past few years, and the chamber to the Primes tomb has yet to be sealed. Still, it isn't normal for any sane civilian to come across this particular area. Especially a one that was so hot and dry that nothing could have survived for long. Suddenly they hear a voice... "THE MATRIX HAS BEEN TAKEN"
    the whole place trembles and shakes, and two bright red tinted eyes glow from inside the tomb. One of the Primes were resurrected after the Fallen's death. One that took grief to the destruction of evil...... The Nemesis Prime......

    LOL just a thought.
     
  15. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    No, as in cut off Locky's hand and going Optimus Forest fight on him, Starscream, Soundwave and Shockwave.
     
  16. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    I like your idea, but it's rather after the Matrix was used on Prime that they awakened.
     
  17. AlphaOmegaBlurr

    AlphaOmegaBlurr Many paths to choose.

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    Opening scene starts with Ultra Magnus and his team of 30 Autobots against Shockwave and the Nemesis.
     
  18. Cmdr Prime

    Cmdr Prime co-Commander of Autobots TFW2005 Supporter

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    I think that your story is going to be a good one so keep up the good work :thumbs2: