2D Artwork: Brainstorm Sketch - I WANT HEAVY CRITIQUES or however the heck u spell it

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  1. ABoMiNuS

    ABoMiNuS Who Knows? Im new?

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    PLZ heavily critique this peice on anything that bothers you. Im making a poster, and hes the first part im working on. Sketch took me around 15-20 minutes, so tell me anything u see wrong with it so i can investigate! :D  thanks

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    sketch idea

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    color idea

    tell me what you think, even if it is mean! i wont cry! thanks :D 
     
  2. Gears

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    Looks good to me so far! :thumb 
     
  3. reillyd

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    Nice! Brainstorm was always a favorite of mine.
     
  4. KA

    KA PENIS GOES WHERE?!!

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    looks alright to me, but the left arm and leg may look better if stretched out - more dramatic. right now it just looks like your trying to fit it in the paper. still looks good tho'.
     
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    I have to agree with KA. The left arm is stubby. it needs to be drawn a little longer.
     
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    I like it.
     
  7. Trypitcon

    Trypitcon No, I can't spell.

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    Can't say many negative things about that. Nice work!
     
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    nkelsch Do you know this Icon? TFW2005 Supporter

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    Proportions, perspective and style all seem good.

    I guess your next step is inking it.
     
  9. ABoMiNuS

    ABoMiNuS Who Knows? Im new?

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    his left arm, or the left arm when we look at the paper?
     
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    His left arm. the one without the gun.
     
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    ABoMiNuS Who Knows? Im new?

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    thx, ill work with it
     
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    You should check this book out. it really helped me with proportions and stuff.
     
  13. ABoMiNuS

    ABoMiNuS Who Knows? Im new?

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    lol, ive never really taken an art class before, most of my art is self taught. Those how to books never worked for me sorry :(  Im taking art classes in college next year so that should help quite a bit ^^
     
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    Brave Magnus Hecho en Argentina

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    Once you fix the left arm it will look perfect. Right now its just awesome. :D 
     
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    ABoMiNuS Who Knows? Im new?

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    updated and finalized sketch. Worked on all proportions people said were messed up. If you see any more let me know before i ink it. Thanks for all the helpful crits!
     
  16. Josh

    Josh Comic Color-guy

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    his gun looks a little funky

    really small

    the handholding it as well. its smaller than his open left hand

    also i dont think his "thigh" should be overlapping his right forearm there. it should be vice versa. his arm would be sticking out more so at us than his thigh/knee would IMO

    course i could be wrong. but. my comment on the hand and gun remain xD
     
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    ABoMiNuS Who Knows? Im new?

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    thx josh, i see it now. man this peice had a lot of problems with it, knocking one out at a time, but not knocking enough of them out ^^ thx for the crit, ill fix it tonight :) 
     
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    any better?

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    Josh Comic Color-guy

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    hey, lookin pretty good

    perspectives maybe slightly wonky now on the gun [or the back part of it i should say. unless its meant to be a triangular piece (that top part) then the line at the base of that fin thing should be parallel to the lines of his forearm as well

    here's what i mean. its little. its minor. but its crazy how just 2 slightly misaligned lines can sort of throwoff the illusion on a portion of a pic or in this case, a specific object

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    i also see somethin with his right knee
    or rather the transition from thigh to lower leg

    neither seems to be in the same "plane"
    like, following his thigh, the rest of the leg below the knee doesnt seem to match up perspective/alignment-wise. but to fix that would probably require redrawing that whole right leg of his

    i figure if you dont fix it, its probably not that big of a deal. im probably being nitpicky. but looking closer i do see it and notice it so. i mean its up to you ultimately :p 

    but i amliking as a whole how its turning out. looks very alex milne IMO

    hehe
     
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    ABoMiNuS Who Knows? Im new?

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    thx josh. Yeah that knee gave me lots of probs, ill fix the gun in the inking stage. Top is supose to be a semi triangle, but no biggie.

    PS yes alex milne is my favorite comic artists. I studied his work and compaired it to my old stuff and am tryin to perfect my form to make a very detailed peice. Detail has always been my grab for art, if its not detailed i usually don like it ^^
     

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