Battle for the Matrix - A Story of Coby Hansen's Adventures with Mini-Cons

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  1. T.F. Allen

    T.F. Allen Formerly known as Krem TFW2005 Supporter

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    This will be on YouTube as a live-action/stop-motion miniseries and on Transformer World 2005 as a comic. TFW gets the longer extended version with extra scenes! :D  The comic will rival those of Shane Anderson :) ev:)  and is coming soon.

    The Tralier/Preview/Comercial/Thingy is on YouTube here:


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  2. T.F. Allen

    T.F. Allen Formerly known as Krem TFW2005 Supporter

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    And now another preview image! :D 

    Yes, this comic will have real people as major characters! Me as Coby Hansen, and my sister, ShinkisRule, as Lori Hansen!

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  3. ShinkisRule

    ShinkisRule Unemployed librarian

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    I'm Lori! And you should definetely watch our preview! it rox!!!!:rock 
     
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  4. T.F. Allen

    T.F. Allen Formerly known as Krem TFW2005 Supporter

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    Yes. Yes it does.

    Here's the video preview if you want to download it:
     

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  5. T.F. Allen

    T.F. Allen Formerly known as Krem TFW2005 Supporter

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    What the heck? A preview of the comic:

    Space… A cylindrical white ship (The Axalon) bearing a strange, red, mask-like, insignia comes into view. It flies off-screen. Another, much larger, brown, boat-like ship follows. It, too, has a mask-like badge, but this one is purple and menacing. Inside the first ship a robot is at a control station. In the place of eyes, he has a large lens, and no other facial features. He looks at a monitor and is confused.
    Speed Dial: "Commander, a ship approaches."
    Another automaton, the captain, who is grey and has a small amount of blue, approaches him.
    Spy Shot 6: “Can you identify it?”
    SD: “One moment… Sir, it is the Nemesis!”
    Another joins them. It is mostly purple and grey, with some gold(Cybertron Thunderblast without her kibble and wearing Autobot Insignias on her feet). Also, it appears to be female.
    Override: “What? Impossible! He can’t detect this ship!”
    A fourth robot appears. He is white and gray, and vaguely resembles a gorilla.
    High Score: “How could he have followed us?”
    SD: “That is irrelevant. We must flee.”
    SS6: “I say it is relevant. it appears he has an agent in the council. Whoever it was must have put a tracking device on us.” High Score returns to his post.
    HS: “He’s right.”
    A control consol begins to beep. A computer voice booms through the command station.
    Teletraan II: "Incoming transmission from the Nemesis."
    SS6: “Put it on-screen, TELTRAAN II.”
    An image of another transformer (Energon Battle Ravage) appears on the main view screen. This character has sharp teeth and a snarl on his face. He is obviously evil.
    Ravage: “SPY SHOT 6, how… good to see you again.”
    SS6: “What is it you want, RAVAGE?”
    R: “Simple, surrender your ship to me. And… I want The Matrix. Yes, I know about it. I have spies everywhere, even in the Council of Sages. Now, give me the Matrix!”
    SS6: “Never!”
    R: “Then be destroyed!”
    Ravage terminates the link.
    SD: “What shall we do at present?”
    O: “We have to protect the Matrix of All Sparks at any costs. If Ravage gets his evil hands on it, all the Transformers on Gigantion are doomed.”
    SD: “Agreed.”
    SS6: “Right, OVERRIDE, locate the nearest planet. HIGH SCORE, prepare to penetrate its atmosphere. And SPEED DIAL, you disable that tracking device.”
    O: “Yes, sir.”
    HS: “Yes, sir.”
    SD: “I shall do so as promptly as possible.”
    Spy Shot waits a few seconds.
    O: “The only planet we can land on is called…Earth.”
    SS6: “What's the dominant species?”
    O: “They are Fleshlings known as humans.”
    SS6: “Population?”
    TII: "There are approximately 6.7 billion sentient lifeforms. This excludes trillions of non-sentient creatures."
    SS6: “Thank you, Teletraan II. Is there any place we could land unnoticed?”
    O: “Yes, but the temperatures are subzero or really hot. The liquefied energon in our fuel tanks would freeze or boil.”
    TII: "And they would explode shortly afterward."
    O: “I was getting to that.”
    SS6: :rolleyes2  “High Score, we need to locate any place to land now.”
    HS: “Hold on, I’m working on it!”
    :bay  BOOM! The ship shakes violently.
    O: “They’re firing on us!”
    SS6: “Damage Report!”
    TII: "The blast shields have been destroyed."
    :bay  BOOM!
    O: “We’ve lost our transwarp generator!”
    :bay  BOOM!
    O: “The heat shields are gone! We can’t land! We could burn up during the descent.”
    SS6: “Couldn’t be much worse than this. Get us to Earth!”
    :bay  BOOM!
    O:“Life Support is failing! Another hit like that and we’re done for!”
    :bay  BOOM! :bay 
    Override's control console explodes!
    O: “Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaggggggggggggggggggghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!”
    HS: “Override!”
    SS6: “Speed Dial, how's the tracking Device?”
    SD: "Destroyed in the explosion, sir!"
    SS6:“Then get her to the Repair Bay!”
    SD: “Without delay, sir!”
    Speed Dial carries her away into another part of the ship. High Score starts to leave his post…
    SS6: “You stay right there mister!”
    HS: “But-but-but, sir, she’s…”
    SS6: “Stay here, I need you to land this mess!”
    HS: “But… :( ”
    SS6: “That’s an order! :mad ”
    HS: “Yes, sir.”
    The ship approaches Earth and starts to look like a comet…
    HS: “We’re coming in too hot! The landing gear’s burning up!”
    SS6: "Keep going!"
    HS: "We're not gonna make it!"
    SS6: "KEEP GOING!"
    The ship crashes on the nearby planet…


    To be continued...

    Actually, to be retold. THEN continued. :D 
     
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  6. T.F. Allen

    T.F. Allen Formerly known as Krem TFW2005 Supporter

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    And now...
    The moment you've all been waiting for... *drumroll*

    I will post the first part of the comic tomorrow or soon afterward! (It will rival Shane's :ev: )
     
  7. T.F. Allen

    T.F. Allen Formerly known as Krem TFW2005 Supporter

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    I'm going to post it as soon as I get the images uploaded. It's not the sneak peek, this takes place before it happened...
     
  8. T.F. Allen

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    Prologue

    The following takes place BEFORE the sneak peek:

    Deep in the underground cities of Gigantion, the Mini-Cons live, for fear of being squished by their giant "Bulk" friends. The Great War spread even here, where the young 'bot Rodimus Prime heroically stood up against Galvatron's group of Decepticons and prevented them from leaving Gigantion to assisit Megatron on Cybertron. Optimus never knew about this, indeed, only the Mini-Cons knew these tales.
    But The War is over now. The four factions, Autobot, Decepticon, Maximal, and Predacon, are little more than American Earth's political parties now.
    And Ransack, a rather small Decepticon, is running late for a very important meeting....

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    For those of you who didn't figure it out, Ransack is late for a meeting of the Mini-Con Council of Sages because he over-energized the night before.

    Ransack hates hangovers.
     
  9. King Waspinator

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    a good and interasting start
     
  10. T.F. Allen

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    Thanks for your comment! You are the first one, thus you get a prize! I shall PM it to you!
     
  11. T.F. Allen

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    OK, for some reason I can't attach files to a PM. that's dumb.

    Anyhoo, here is the prize: A Stupid Video of Transformers Dancing Like Idiots! I made it myself :D 
     

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  12. Ripclaw

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    good beginning

    RANSACK IS SHORT!!!!!
     
  13. T.F. Allen

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    Yes, he is. :D 

    So is Undermine, but he doesn't care cuz he's a Predacon.
     
  14. LoC Soundwave

    LoC Soundwave 俺の魂は燃えていない!

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    "Welcome, Ransack. You are late." :lolol 

    Nice start :) 
     
  15. ShadowDragon

    ShadowDragon R to the D to the D yo.

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    Yes, nice job so far!
     
  16. T.F. Allen

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    Actually, Teletraan I's voice is the computer voice LH Michelle if you wanna hear how that would sound!

    P.S. Tell your friends about this, I need more readers!
     
  17. Chaos Incarnate

    Chaos Incarnate Not just a name.

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    Hey that's cool, photocomic interspersed with text dialog.

    Looking good so far!
     
  18. Pun-3X

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    Rather interesting so far. I'm curious as to what you plan to do with the story.
     
  19. Cobalt Agent

    Cobalt Agent My dick kills dinosaurs

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    Huh. Some of the editing ain't that bad.
     
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    Nice start. :thumb 
     

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