Attic Wars

Discussion in 'Transformers Funnies' started by ironjazz, Apr 19, 2012.

  1. ironjazz

    ironjazz Tie Fighter pilot

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    this is a new serious comic about a bionicle bounty hunter called vampyro who got framed for killing the king of metra nui toa lewa and is on the run from the law now wanted for killing chief of police optimus prime here is an intro and how he killed optimus prime
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  2. T4mercustomz

    T4mercustomz Genus time! TFW2005 Supporter

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    WHOO BIONICLE! a little constructive critism the thing looks very messy and for a serious comic this seems very hard to try and be funny at points. And dude try and fix your dialog things like "damn your bad things!" And "a huge bounty over 100$" are just week. I'm not trying to be mean just trying to help.
     
  3. kaijuguy19

    kaijuguy19 Keyblade Wielder

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    Good start. Although you have to make your words more clearer and puttng up word ballons help a great deal. Also think about how to handle the humor and such.

    Other then that it's an intresting start. You just need to fine tune some things in the comic that's all.
     
  4. Datbotwithaface

    Datbotwithaface Well-Known Member

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    Why can people not into Speech Bubbles! Its so laughably easy to do!
     
  5. JBerryFTW

    JBerryFTW The new kid on the block.

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    On the road again, going places where I've never been, killing people its so fun to be on the road again.
     

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