A tiring first day.

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  1. blitzwingfan94

    blitzwingfan94 Vikings are the bomb!

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    It's like where Spike gets his first car except it's a different autobot with my own made up story.

    Sentences in parenthesis are where the characters are at the time. eg. (At the beach.)

    Sentences in quotations mean an action. eg. "He picked him up."

    Let's begin.



    Narrator:Spike is just an ordinary young man getting his first job as an assistant search and rescuer for the summer.But he doesn't know his new vehicle that he uses is more than meets the eyes.

    "Shows Spike's dad drop him off at the emergency center, Spike gets out of the car."

    Dad:So I'll just wait out here?

    Spike:Yeah.

    Dad:Alright.

    "Spike walks into the center."

    Boss:Ahhh.....you must be Spike Witwicky.

    Spike:Yep.

    Boss:Well I'm Mr.Chase, your boss, let me show you around.

    Spike:Sure.

    "They start walking down a hallway and take the first door to the left."

    Mr.C:This is the hotline room, where we get calls from families in need of our help.

    Spike:Cool.

    Mr.C:You think that's cool, just wait until you see your emergency vehicle. But before that, I want to introduce you to the real person you will take orders from, Vernon. He's right over here across the hall.

    "They both walk across the hall to the coffee room."

    Mr.C:Spike, this is Gerald.

    Gerald:Hey.

    Mr.C:Samantha or "Sam" for short.

    Sam:Hi.

    Mr.C:And this is your real boss Vernon.

    Vernon:'Sup?

    Mr.C:Guys, this is Spike Witwicky.

    Gerald:Witwicky? HA! That's a hilarious name. Hehehe...Witwicky...HAHAHAHAAA!

    "Vernon slaps Gerald in the back of the head."

    Gerald:OW! What the hell man?

    Mr.C:This is no place for fighting!

    Gerald and Vernon:Sorry.

    Sam: Don't listen to Gerald, he's just unhappy that he got demoted.

    Gerald:Hey! I told you that was NOT an illegal venus fly trap!

    Mr.C:Come, Spike, let me show you your car.

    Spike:Sweet

    "They walk down the hallway some more and get to a door, they enter the door and walk down 1 story, they enter the garage.

    Mr.C:Here is your car.

    Spike:Woah!

    "His new car was a Hummer H2 with a roll cage on top, a red stripe reaching from front to back with a pulse reading on it, and a weird symbol on the door in side the logo of the center."

    Narrator:Now when Spike saw that symbol, he wanted to ask Mr.Chase what it was, but he didn't have time.

    Mr.C:Now you can go and check it out, but you only have ten minutes, my shift is almost up.

    Spike:Cool.

    Mr.C:Alright if you would just exit out the back door to the right after looking at the car that would be great. And I will see you tomorrow.

    Spike:Okay.

    "Mr.Chase leaves, Spike walks down to the car and checks the outside because Mr.Chase forgot to give him the keys, he then walks out of the garage and starts walking down the alley." "After he has walked down the alley about 30 seconds, the garage door opens and his truck starts to drive his way, Spike turns around to see the car come at him, he couldn't duck anywhere, so he huddled down, but the car stopped just inches before hitting him, then all of a sudden the car starts to transform." "While it is transforming Spike stands up, it finishes transforming and is now a giant robot."

    Robot:Hello, my name is Ratchet.

    Spike:Oh my God.

    To be continued...
     
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    Part 2.

    Spike:What the heck are you?

    Ratchet:I am an autobot, but come quick.

    "Ratchet transforms"

    Ratchet:Hop in.

    "Spike jumps in to the car, then they drive down the street and into an alley on the left, Ratchet stops, Spike gets out, Ratchet transforms, then a cab to a tractor trailer, a Pontiac solstice, an '08 Camaro, and a GMC Topkick drive into the alley in the other entrances."

    "They all transform too."

    Giant robot #1: Greetings, my name is Optimus Prime. These are the autobots, Bumblebee, Jazz, Ironhide, and you've met Ratchet.

    Spike:Are you aliens?

    Optimus Prime: Correct, we are from Cybertron, we are here to destroy the evil decepticons. Before they get the allspark.

    Spike:The decepticons? Allspark?

    Optimus:The Allspark is the object that gives us and the Decepticons life. The Decepticons are an evil bunch of robots just like us, The leader is Megatron, their is also Starscream, Barricade, Blackout, Scorponok, Brawl, and Frenzy.

    Spike: I see, but why do you want this allspark thing?

    Optimus:Because if the Decepticons get it they will control all the universe.

    Spike:Oh, I'm guessing that isn't good?

    Ironhide:Not one bit.

    BOOM! "A giant hole is made in a building in the alley, All the decepticons step out, Megatron last."

    Megatron: Ahh Optimus Prime. I've finally found you.

    Optimus:Megatron!! Autobots attack!!!!!!!

    To be continued....
     
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    Could someone please tell me what they think?!
     
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    NMPT Goofy ominous nutball

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    Hmm, not bad.

    It's a good start-seems like it'll make a good fic. The only thing I have to nit pick about is how Spike just jumped into the seat of a giant monster.
     
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    part 3:

    "Bumblebee jumped at Megatron, but went right through him."

    Megs:Hm yellow annoyance. You see we are holograms.

    Ops:What power source did you overtake to do this, Megatron?

    Megs: Let's just say I have a friend of yours.

    Ironhide:What do you mean "a friend of ours"?

    Megs:You'll know soon enough.

    Barricade:Bye losers!

    "The holograms disappear"

    Jazz:Megatron that babbling bu-bah!

    Ops:Hmmm...What could he mean by a friend of ours?


    (Shows a desert and goes underneath the sand to find a huge mechanical room, Starscream pacing back and forth, a poor tortured soul being electrocuted in the distance.)

    SS:Okay we've got the hostage. Now what do we do?

    Megs:Just wait and be patient Starscream. Humph like you could ever do that.

    SS:Excuse me!? I demand to know why you always degenerate me like this.

    Megs: Oh I don't know. Maybe because you a blabbering idiot?!

    SS:Oh ha, ha ha ha You are such a joker. I can't believe I started fighting with you I'm sorry, friends?

    "Puts out his hand for a shake."

    Megs: I don't think so you horendous pig!!!!

    SS:AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! THAT'S IT! I CAN'T TAKE YOU ALWAYS GET AT ME! YOUR DEAD! AAAAAAAHHHHH!

    "Brings out his blaster, but at the same time megatron pulls out his fusion cannon."

    Megs:Alright if your that eager to die than fine.

    SS:This is it megatron the last battle to decide who becomes the leader of the decepticons!

    (Screen goes black and you here a cannon boom)

    To be continued...
     
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    I liked it.
     
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    If you liked that your gonna love who I have the decepticons keeping as a prisoner.
     
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    Part 4 I am getting rid of the " and the () and BO is blackout

    shows megatron and starscream yet again, but this time smoke is coming from their backs.

    Megs and SS:Ugh ah gahhhhhhh.

    They both fall backwards. Blackout and brawl still holding out their guns.

    Brawl:Finally those 2 can shut up.

    BO:Yes those annoyances are gone.

    Barricade:So now what do we do?

    BoneC:We decide who the next leader. I vote me.

    BO:Of course you are going to vote for yourself. Everybody is voting for themselves.

    Frenzy:Blabdasticanghito?

    Barricade:He's right we shouldn't even have a leader. I vote for that.

    Rest of the group:Here here.

    BO:Then tonight we strike.

    to be continued...

    I'm kinda running out of brain power so sorry this is a short part.
     
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    Just a heads up. When I'm done with this story I am doing a new story called: off to the side wonders. It's about autobots who were never really shown on G1 show. I am going to start with my fav ratchet.
     
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    it was intrertaining.
     
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    Part 5:

    Mr. Witwicky puts down his glass of OJ and looks up at Sam standing next to him at the kitchen table.

    Mr.W: You were 40 minutes late I waited in the car for what seemed like eternity!

    Sam: Dad, I told you. My truck came alive and morphed errr.. transformed into a robot.

    Mr.W:Just go to your room and don't go anywhere.

    Sam:Hmmmmmmm! Fine!

    He runs up the steps to his room and slams the door. He sits on his bed Mojo asleep next to him. He decides to check in for the night. He lays down and closes his eyes..........

    Prime:No!!!

    Bumblebee gets hit by Barricades Spiked-yo-yo-type-thing and goes flipping through the air and lands onto a building falls and doesn't get up. Then Jazz gets stabbed by Blackout's blade and falls to the ground. Then Ratchet gets hit by Brawl's Tank turret 3 times and falls backwards dead. And finally Ironhide gets hit at the side by Bonecrusher's Giant fork thing and goes flying also. And then it reveals that Optimus is being crushed by tons of steel rods. Goes first person through optimus' eyes and they slowly close. Sam opens his eyes to see that it is morning.

    Sam:Weekend,Yay.

    Mojo barking like crazy out the window.

    Sam:Mojo SHHHH! It's morning.

    He turns around to his dresser and the light coming from the windows suddenly dissappers. He stands in shock for a moment and turns around.

    Sam:AH!

    A giant eye is at his windowsill.

    Mr.W:Sam you ok?

    Sam:Yeah just had something in my eye.

    Sam walks over to the window and while he is the eye starts to back away to reveal a gigantic robotic monster.

    Sam:Oh God please don't tell me your an autobot.

    Figure:Iam an autobot.

    Sam:AAAHHHH! Well who are you?

    Figure:Who are you?

    Sam:Alright this is no time for games! I'm Sam, Sam Witwicky. Who the heck are you?

    Figure: I am the autobot that was kidnapped by the decpeticons and forced to make holograms of them. I am Hound.

    To be continued...
     

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