A New Era is coming...

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    IMPORTANT NOTICE: PLAYJURISM WILL BE PUNISHED. I KNOW SOME PEOPLE CAN AND DO DO IT.

    As part of some coursework I require constructive critisism in replies (e.g. any obvious issue that I've not noticed, how can i improve?), thank you.
    Me and OptimusGinrai have been discussing this for quite somtime now so I decided to provide a teaser. (If you can even call it that this early on.)
    I'm only in the early stages at the moment but when finished New Era will become a stop motion series.
    Please open the attached ile to read what i have so far for a Prolouge, there is more but that will all come in due time. I also request thaat reader are aware that I am not the best at writing stories so blurb form is the best I can do.

    For those that will stuggle to read my hand writing. I may aswell do this.


    TRANSFORMERS NEW ERA Prolouge blurb DRAFT 1
    It is the end of the Cybertronian cival war. The Autobot are defeated. Faced with the prosect of living under Decepticon rule many Autobots have fleed Cybertron. Optimus Prime, commander of the fallen Autobot army is trying to escape the planet with as many survivor as possible. to do this he plans to use two ships that were discovered under Cybertron's surface. One ship identified as the Axalon and an older sister ship, The Ark, rumoured to have servered as the flagship of the mysterios Nova Prime, prepare to launch. each ship carrying a crew of Autobot refuges.
    Racing for the Ark optimus Primes is escorting a young officer byb the name, Clocker to their escape vessel, however, unbeknost to the two Autobots they are being pursued by bounty hunters, hired by Megatron to elimate any escapees. This group of Bounty hunters is led by the notorius Lockdown and he's determined to catch his prey...




    I know I'm not very good at writing interesting stories but I am trying my best.

    TRANSFORMERS NEW ERA. COMING WINTER 2011/12
     

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