A little songwriting help?

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  1. cybertron2006

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    I'm trying to write my band's vocal "track"(as I like to call it) and I'm having a bit of writer's block. BTW, the song's called "Unsung Heroes".

    Here's what I got:

    Intro: [spoken] You know those heroes that never get mentioned? The men who die but never get noticed? Well, here's one to every unsung hero out there. Play it Sam.

    Verse 1: Well, I've got my rifle/ I'ma ready go/There's someone in the trenches that I've gotta blow/Well I'm killin' time and I need to reload/Throw this damn grenade/Make his head explode/I gotta end this/Before it turns to piss...

    Alright guys! we're going good! more ideas please!
     
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    wait...wait... ... ...damn :mad: 
     
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    ..gonna make his head roll, and lots of blood will flow. But then I hurt my toe, and I thought, "Oh no." I keep thinking "He's just a foe", when he looked up at me with his rifle cocked, and I went "Woah."
     
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    Well, it'd make a nice abstract piece with the BOOM part at the end. Send some sort of chilling message about war... But that's not what you're going for, is it?

    Um -

    ...killing time, but I need to reload. Throw this damn grenade, make his head EXPLODE!!! ?



    Maybe u should listen to Metallica or something for inspiration (esp. MOP). Just don't rip em off, or "heads will roll"...
     
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    nah, I'm trying to make this more of a Bon Scott-era AC/DC song. My band was heavily influenced by dems.
     
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    "You forgot to say away".
     
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    Demolition Man, FTW. "He's finally matched his meat. You really licked his ass."
     
  8. funstorm

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    kiss the picture of my girl in case i dont see her again,take a look at my fatigues and i see that they're stained,with the blood of my brothers who got killed by the others its going to be a hard time explaining to their mothers and still i keep going theres shrapnel flying everywhere and still i keep going with the stench of death in the air?
     
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    funstorm, are you a Bob Dylan fan?
     
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    No. why?
     
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    I dunno why I asked that. I should probably throw away Highway 31 Revisited before I turn into a hippie.
     
  13. Cavshock

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    Reminds me of some cadences we used. :D 

    Chuck
     
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    Intro: [spoken] You know those heroes that never get mentioned? The men who die but never get noticed? Well, here's one to every unsung hero out there. Play it Sam.

    Verse 1: Well, I've got my rifle/ I'ma ready go/There's someone in the trenches that I've gotta blow/Well I'm killin' time and I need to reload/Throw this damn grenade/Make his head explode/I gotta end this/Before it turns to piss...

    Chorus: I'm a white male teenager living in the USA (echo: white male teenager) / Just hanging out and playing video games all day (echo: playing video games) x 3

    Verse 2: The game is loading up / I'm connecting to the internet / War Simulator three point o, let's go! / Squeeze the trigger and fire off my virtual gun / Killing the other team just for fun / I'm strafing 'round the map / Noobs are begging me to stop / But I don't give a crap / I'm going straight to the top!

    Chorus: I'm a white male teenager living in the USA (echo: white male teenager) / Just hanging out and playing video games all day (echo: playing video games) x 3

    Freestyle Rap: Yo yo yo ch-ch-check it out y'all it's mixmaster halofan95 rocking the mic dropping raps that are so hella tight i might just fight you blam blam motherfucker feel the heat of my gun bitches up on my dick sucking my nuts while you crying like a ho, so look out world cause here I come

    Verse 3: It's the end of the game / all the losers are dead / getting ready for the next round / drinking some chocolate milk / suddenly my mom shows up / tells me to go to bed
     
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    llamatron just exploded the internets.
     
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    Verse three... so good.
     
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    There's someone in the trenches that I've gotta blow?

    LOL!
     
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    pure genius, llam.
     
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    llama's song is AMAZING.
     
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    Iiamatron for the win
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