Off the top of my head;
“But anyway, according to him, “your heroics must be rewarded, your status as a Major is renewed and you should assemble a team of your own as soon as you are able.””
His paraphrase of Ultra Magnus should have singular... things, like these ' ', rather than the double " "
Thus;
“But anyway, according to him, 'your heroics must be rewarded, your status as a Major is renewed and you should assemble a team of your own as soon as you are able.'”
The single digits help identify his relay
And this:
“Well then, let’s get ready for our next adventure!” Optimus put his hands on his hips proudly, to the laughing cheers of the others.
I think he should have a declarative word there, such as, well, declared. Since it's his first of a sentence, it helps make it a bit more concise then going to his physical action
