When toys collide.

[David9000]

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[David9000]

I apologize it was susposed to say "uh to uh, well i don't know keep reading".





P.S. more on the way.

[Grimlock_13]

Very cool, my only critique is if the dialogue was in speech bubbles it would make it easier to read :)

[David9000]

thank you I will try that, but the next few have been edited and I can't fix it.

[David9000]

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[ShadowDragon]

yeah, I can't see the first part of demolisher's answer. Good start though!

[Dropshot]

Some of the dialogue is impossible to read, and you should get a flash since it's hrd to see what is going on.

[David9000]

sorry it's my first time.

[Otispq]

Good so far, if you don't have a flash, at least brighten the image with whatever imaging software your using, cuz I can't see much in the panels.

[Autovolt 127]

Good Start.

I really like that cyro scourge, i really wished it was in my area. T_T.

[David9000]

here's the next part it's early because i am going out of town
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[Otispq]

I don't think those three have what it takes to fend off Demolisher and Brawl...bye bye Megatron!

[Fez Findie]

They sure made use of the advantage of long range weapons against a melee one...

[David9000]

I don't think those three have what it takes to fent off Demolisher and Brawl...bye bey Megatron! No they don't but they try and fail.

[David9000]

They sure made use of the advantage of long range weapons against a melee one
Yeah, but he will be back

[Optimal Megatron]

Hey David9000, great job so far, if they free Megatron will Cyro Scourge try to overthrow
him?

[herugrim]

not bad for a beginner, keep it comin kid!

[Z.U.D.O.N]

My comments first.

Comments:

1. Try to find suitable text colours. I had real difficulty reading a few words...

2. Brighten up the images. Perhaps turning on ALL the lights in that particular room, or using a flash. But I don't recommend the latter cuz overexpose your images..

3. Several spelling errors...


Compliments:

1. I like the plot so far :). Not so much interaction going on, but there's something. Keep it up. :D

2. Your laser effects are not too bad at the moment. You can't do much with paint, but you seem to have made the best out of it :). It's a good thing! Hopefully, one day, you would start using better photo-editing programs like Adobe Photoshop or GIMP. They can do wonders! ^^

I'll be reading your comic from time to time! All the best for your later episodes :D

[Ray Kremer]

This really can't be emphasized enough to all the funnies authors who don't use speech balloons: make sure the color of the text you use is appropriate compared to the area of the photo where you are putting it.

[Coolhand]

Yup, reasoning with Brawl is usually a bad idea.

[Ironhide2005]

Nice looking good so far could work on the text though

[David9000]

I am sorry about this first shot.http://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart29.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart210.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart211.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart212.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart213.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart214.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart215.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart216.jpg

[Negavator]

No! Brawl can't be taken down by a single shot from a pathetic Autobot! Good otherwise, though.

[David9000]

No! Brawl can't be taken down by a single shot from a pathetic Autobot! Good otherwise though
He's not He'll be back.

[Otispq]

Well that was surprising.

[Coolhand]

Nice touch with the smoke grenades. Blind him, THEN shoot him. Much safer that way!

[David9000]

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[David9000]

The print was a little small at some points. These had been done before the rest of the pictures.

[David9000]

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[Shane Anderson]

I like the effects... not as flashy as some around here, but cool nonetheless. They illustrate the story very nicely. Great job. :thumb

[David9000]

Thank-you shane your threads were so good that I was ispired to make a comic of my own. My brother and I really enjoy reading it.

P.S. CHIP!!!!!!!

[TCracker]

I like the effects... not as flashy as some around here, but cool nonetheless. They illustrate the story very nicely. Great job. :thumb

Agreed!

[David9000]

Hey TCracker,** Thanks, for reading my comic Enjoy!:popcorn

[Z.U.D.O.N]

Hmm... interesting interesting ^^

[GladiatorPrime]

:popcorn

[David9000]

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[Jazzy Zx]

:popcorn

[Fez Findie]

:popcorn

Double the :popcorn

[ShadowDragon]

oops, hi Bumblebee, bye Bumblebee.

[David9000]

Sorry about the wait, I'v have a weird month! I went out of town,had a guest over, got sick, and my computer wasn't working. anyway here's the next part to my story.http://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart240.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart241.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart242.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart243.jpghttp://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm187/bigbigbob9000/Davidpart244.jpg

[Fez Findie]

Whoah, Landmine sure kicks some ass. :D

[ShadowDragon]

Nice!

[Z.U.D.O.N]

:eek: What'll happen next?

[Otispq]

that's some pretty good beat down on Megsy!